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December wording. Poetry, and opinions.

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December. What's your opinion on the poem?
  Terrible, horrific, just plain disgrace to poetry
  Don't know, don't care
  Beautiful and haunting
  It's not perfect but it's nice
  I don't know?
  Absolutely amazing, Brillant!
  I don't like poetry
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Fallentowards

PostPosted: Mon Jan 29, 2007 12:05 pm


Hello, well First things first, I will be posting a poem for everyone to read, and I wish to hear your opinions, thoughts, and insight. Whether you just enjoy poetry or take it a little more seriously by analyzing it. If you wish to completely deconstruct and analyze my poetry, then you are more then welcome. I believe poetry should be taken seriously and if you need to break down the poem to discover it's meaning, you must. So enjoy the first poem I will be posting is called December, and it was written recently, do enjoy.

December
The silence is comforting
The shadows and lights crawl to my company
Drawing towards the crazed emotions that have laid dormant in my mind
Coming out of my absent dreaming
I realize the cold
Only awake to the sweet sweet singing
Ringing into the night
Screaming, crying, whaling
Only speaking to the vast deep darkness
I ask just one thing;
Why do you linger in the drowning darkness?
And sing to where darkness grows?
The deepening coldness calls to my question
And I feel myself alone
Left to wonder if I’ll return to my solitude
Or am I left to linger too
Till the sweet, soothing soprano calls to me from where is unknown
Why do you still linger is absent darkness
Drowning yourself in a guiltless manor
Still still you stay
Like day and night.
Life has yet to escape you, don’t let it escape yourself.
My eyes open to the cold feeling of the rain painted pavement
The images in front of me blurred, each movement slowed
I can’t help but feel numb, the coldness is stilling
I begin to hear again
Screaming, crying, whaling
Just like my dreaming
This cold December day
Their tears remind me of the rain
It’s movement and with purpose
I just hope they realize
I’m not dead.
PostPosted: Thu Feb 01, 2007 7:37 pm


Alrighty,

Fallentowards


x__deadsoul

PostPosted: Sat Feb 03, 2007 8:48 pm


@__@ Such pretty words!!
PostPosted: Sat Feb 03, 2007 9:45 pm


mind if i critique? there's some promising material in this, and trust me when i say i offer that to very few goth poems.

cold.wire.lips


Fallentowards

PostPosted: Sun Feb 04, 2007 5:27 pm


cold.wire.lips
mind if i critique? there's some promising material in this, and trust me when i say i offer that to very few goth poems.

oh please if you want to tear it to pieces do so, i love to hear what people have to think and if you understand the message behind my words oh please tell.
PostPosted: Sun Feb 11, 2007 8:59 am


hm.....

Fallentowards

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