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the deep [my first poem]

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AlaskaYoung

PostPosted: Sun Jan 28, 2007 11:42 pm


The Deep



I open my eyes,
I open my mouth to take one breath,
darkness rushes in,
I am num I can't feel my fingures,
I look up to see the deep,
I hear the moans of the chaos,
I feel the coldness seping into my
sun drinched skin,
I close my eyes, I can see his face,
he smiles, but his warm smile quickly truns,
cold and coverd with anger,
he is mad, I tell him 'it is alright,
we will meet again one day',
he cries in my arms,
I can't feel his tears, he tells me not to go,
I say but I have, to,
I fall into the deep, he stands there with
his loveable smile,
saying 'good bye, my moon, good bye my life,
good bye, my love'
I fall deeper with out hope, but to
feel once more the warmth
of my one loves arm's, I say'good night
my love' as I land,
softly on the bottom of the ocean,
my finaly resting place,
I breath in once more, the darkness truns to water,
the water fills my chest, I can not breath,
I watch the last air bubbles escape,
from my mouth, I fallow them, with my eyes,
to the surface or at lest what the darkness,
allows me to see, I close my lips and shut my eyes,
and fall eternly to sleep
PostPosted: Mon Jan 29, 2007 7:26 am


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I open my eyes,
I open my mouth to take one breath,
darkness rushes in,
I am numb I can't feel my fingers,
I look up to see the deep,
I hear the moans of the chaos,
I feel the coldness seeping into my
sun drenched skin,
I close my eyes, I can see his face,
he smiles, but his warm smile quickly turns,
cold and covered with anger,
he is mad, I tell him it is alright,
we will meet again one day,
he cries in my arms,
I can't feel his tears, he tells me not to go,
I say but I have to,
I fall into the deep, he stands there with
his lovable smile,
saying 'good bye, my moon, good bye my life,
good bye, my love'
I fall deeper without hope, but to
feel once more the warmth
of my one loves arm's, I say 'goodnight
my love' as I land,
softly on the bottom of the ocean,
my final resting place,
I breath in once more, the darkness turns to water,
the water fills my chest, I can not breath,
I watch the last air bubbles escape,
from my mouth, I fallow them, with my eyes,
to the surface or at lest what the darkness,
allows me to see, I close my lips and shut my eyes,
and fall eternally to sleep.

I like it ^^, I got rid of the spelling mistakes, but I left the punctuation pretty much intact, since I though it'd be rude if I went that far XD

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AlaskaYoung

PostPosted: Mon Jan 29, 2007 2:17 pm


thatnk you I can't spell at all but thatnk you I am gald you like it
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