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 Posted: Fri Dec 29, 2006 5:04 pm
These ashen skies, this tumbling gray
once shielded me form the light,
this horrid day
oh why have you forsaken me
in such a time most dire?
turning to a shell, can you not see?
so much death, so much hate
my anger boils, burnng within
my wretched soul dies at an alrming rate
these ashen skies, once a peaceful world of gray
now turn black.ending my view
these ashen skies
once a tumbling gray
no longe sheilds me as my spirit dies
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Posted: Wed Jan 10, 2007 1:29 pm
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Posted: Wed Jan 10, 2007 10:16 pm
i like it, it had good rhthym and rhyming, the words painted a very good emotional picture. i haven't seen anyone use a rhyme scheme like that before so it was pretty much an all around original poem. mrgreen
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Posted: Fri Jan 12, 2007 8:23 am
Sounds good, I like it dude.... [thumbs up, grins]
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Posted: Mon Feb 05, 2007 10:58 pm
thanks..i wrote it not long after the death of someone very close to me
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