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 Posted: Tue Dec 19, 2006 6:42 pm
( this is a poem that i rote to my friend that i whanted to be my girl friend )
i love you
i wish i could tell you how
i feel but im afraid of losing
what i have already gained
becuse you love somwone else
i cant take you away i dont whant
to ruin the relashionship that wee have
for the silly fealling that i have for you
so if you love me than be true becuse
i no the girl you love is not with you
so if you love me like you say you do
then show me by saing i love you
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Posted: Mon Dec 25, 2006 11:28 pm
Im not too good with poetry sweatdrop
I can see a few spelling errors in there, just a heads up.
Sorry couldnt help out more.
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Posted: Tue Jul 10, 2007 5:51 pm
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Posted: Wed Jul 11, 2007 1:45 pm
you have some grammar errors....HORRORSS actually. BUT! I like it. Direct and anyone can understand it. GOOD!
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Posted: Thu Jul 12, 2007 5:58 pm
Its very direct but thats good. You need to spell check it but I hope you got her
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Posted: Fri Jul 13, 2007 4:30 am
Have you actually given it to her?
Tell us what happened in the end then smile
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Posted: Fri Jul 13, 2007 1:21 pm
if she don't want u i do =]...
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Posted: Mon Jul 16, 2007 8:45 pm
Aw..I wish my poems were as happy ^.^
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Posted: Wed Aug 22, 2007 9:00 pm
awww, so sweet^^ i actually like the spelling errors, and gramatical errors ARE poetry, so i suppose i don't see them wink what did she say?
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Posted: Sun Sep 23, 2007 4:54 am
Cool.
^^
I liked it.
Nobody can tell you how your poetry ranks except you, because you know what it means and how much depth it has.
Good luck.
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the_forgotten_thought Captain
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Posted: Sat Dec 15, 2007 3:49 pm
is she with you? did she like it? i did blaugh
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Posted: Mon Dec 31, 2007 1:18 pm
Thats so cute! Is she with you now? I hope she is because I'd hate to see such a great expression of love go to waste.
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