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NovaKing

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Posted: Wed Jan 24, 2007 8:13 pm

[Dark]

[work in progress]

Posted: Thu Feb 01, 2007 8:15 pm

[Seeking solace]

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Posted: Fri Mar 02, 2007 5:36 pm

[break away]

Posted: Tue Mar 20, 2007 4:05 pm

[heaven]

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Posted: Mon May 07, 2007 5:13 pm

[innocence]

Posted: Fri May 11, 2007 10:10 pm

I think its time for a bit of change. three is done, finally.

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KirbyVictorious

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Posted: Sat May 12, 2007 7:30 am

...I'm confuuuuuuuuzed. X.x

Posted: Sat May 12, 2007 2:39 pm

KirbyVictorious

...I'm confuuuuuuuuzed. X.x

you are?? bout what?

[ Ack confuzzlment is contagious]

[I'll be editing now]

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Posted: Sat May 12, 2007 3:38 pm

...

Posted: Sun May 13, 2007 12:26 pm

Yay! three is officialy done. DONE I SAY!

Four poems have seen there death here, and finally comes one with the strength to endure that theme.

Light is doneth.

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Posted: Sat May 19, 2007 9:32 am

KirbyVictorious

...

I had writers block for theme number three because I thought the poem for light should be powerful, but I just couldn't find the right words to make it so.

Not until now anyways.

Dark is next. The story will alternate between short story and poem.

So another short story is up next.

Posted: Thu May 24, 2007 2:03 pm

NovaKing

KirbyVictorious

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I had writers block for theme number three because I thought the poem for light should be powerful, but I just couldn't find the write words to make it so.

Not until now anyways.

Dark is next. The story will alternate between short story and poem.

So another short story is up next.

I might try to get some illustrations up for a few of the short stories. Of course, I'll need to give kirbs her fan art first..( I hope its good enough. I'll be able to get to a scanner tomorrow. )

Any feelings on the latest entry? or am I alone for this rare visit?

(Ill be working on theme number four in the mean time.)

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Posted: Sat May 26, 2007 8:53 am

Voxxx

"My being crafted with your intentions.
My legs to follow your soul corrections.
Forever I must travel
on paths chose not by me.

That "soul corrections" line. sweatdrop What is a soul correction?
And instead of "chose" try "chosen"

Actually, I think the beginning was the best. It was definitely something new to come up with a sphere's point of view. The imagery wasn't bad. I would be careful with your word choice, sometimes, though.
Like here:

kneeling in the shade made by two large metal boxes, was a young barefoot girl with curly untamed hair that would tickle the bridge of her nose whenever she forgot to brush it aside.

The young girl sat barefoot, kneeling in the shade created by two large metal boxes. Untamed curls chased their way down her back, and tickled the bridge of her nose whenever she forgot to brush them aside.

ack! Voxx your correction to the first paragraph of the short story sounds so much better than what I had. I only just realized it when I was reading it for the umpteenth time. ^_^

Posted: Mon Jun 11, 2007 4:13 pm

Heh Im done with what may be a multipart section. or not.... I haven't decided yet.

anyways feel free to cricize whats up there already if you wish.

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