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 Posted: Sun Dec 10, 2006 2:12 pm
Moo! <3 Polly sounds like a won-dee-ful idea Rabid! Goooooood luck! <3
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Posted: Sun Dec 10, 2006 4:37 pm
And already, he's been reduced to his feminine nickname. xD <3
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Posted: Thu Dec 21, 2006 12:20 pm
Hmmm... Well, the idea is very creative. Although there's one thing that bugs me. xDD (And it could totally just be my personal opinion) But, I think the "two different eye color" thing is starting to get overused in the RPable children in B/C. Although, in this case I suppose it'd be alright, but I do think two green or two yellow (maybe even two purple) eyes would suffice. This is just my personal opinion, though. xDD
This isn't so much a critique as it is an opinion, but I've noticed that you named your scent after a term that is symbolic of his fragrance. While I am guilty of naming my characters after symbolic terms or phrases at times, sometimes it's best to just pick a name. A name doesn't define a person, the person defines the name. For example, on the Rugrats, Angelica is actually a mean b***h, she's no angel. xDD I'm not saying to change Pollux's name, but just a tip for the future. (Again, this is just my opinion~)
As far as personality... Well, it needs to be fleshed out a bit more. Why does he get into trouble with authority figures? Is he a bad kid? The description of his personality leads you to believe that he's fun loving and doesn't like to go outside and get dirty, so how does he get himself into trouble? Also, does he feel the need to be the center of attention? Why does he resort to promiscuity for attention?
You're off to an awesome start, but I do think there's a few kinks that need to be worked out within the concept. Good luck~! heart
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Posted: Thu Dec 21, 2006 1:36 pm
Time for counter-critique!
The eye thing is simply to make him clash more. Yes, I know it's overdone, but he simply wouldn't be himself without absolutely every bit of his character burning the eyes.
I generally name my characters something random, but this time decided to go for a symbolic one simply going by the Guardian's personality. She'd search for days before finding a name she liked, and the meaning would have to fit something about him (in this case, the way he smells). Thusly, Pollux.
Also, I'm not very good with fleshing out personalities before I actually begin to roleplay characters, and even then, I don't want to. I loathe having a set-in-stone personality to have to follow and prefer beginning with a barely-there concept to flesh out as time goes on in his existance.
Polly isn't changing.
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Posted: Thu Dec 21, 2006 2:04 pm
Well, okay. By the way you worded your last post, it seems like you took offense. Honestly, that wasn't my intention.
But if you don't want your character to change, then don't put him up for comments and/or critiques.
Sleepy Cetra: He should've had SWIRLY EYES. that would be cool instead of bicolored.
^ Suggestion from Sukku~
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Posted: Thu Dec 21, 2006 2:13 pm
Yes, I did. I'm not going to lie.
What you gave was a slew of opinions, not critique. I'm looking for "this doesn't make sense" or "that could be so much awesomer if you did this...!", not just personal opinion, and telling someone you think they have a few kinks to work out before their character is finished?
Ah, I already have a full race of characters with swirly eyes... <.<;
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Posted: Thu Dec 21, 2006 2:43 pm
The front page says it's open to comments, and doesn't an opinion count as a comment?
My last paragraph was a solid critique, but you already provided a reason as to why you don't want him to change. (Which is totally cool, he's your character.)
Everyone's characters have kinks, hon. ALL of my characters have kinks. Alelisa has kinks. My concept over at Cirque has kinks. All of my characters could go through many changes before they were fully developed, which is why I leave them open to personal opinions, critiques, and anything else that could improve them.
If you rather not take my opinions/critiques/comments in a constructive manner, that's fine. I wasn't trying to offend you in any way, I was trying to be honest and tell you what I thought. I apologize if you disagree with me, and I reiterate the fact that I wasn't trying to offend you. (Like I said, the idea is creative.)
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Posted: Thu Dec 21, 2006 2:49 pm
Oh, I took the last paragraph in stride, trust me. That's the reason I gave a...true reply to it.
And I know you didn't mean to sound offensive, but it came off as such. It's not so much that you gave opinions but more...how you worded them?
Well, whatever it may be, I hope I haven't pissed you off...for a lack of any better phrase.
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