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 Posted: Mon Nov 20, 2006 3:33 pm
The Moment I believe in this moment of truth scattered around me like diamonds in the desert sand scars unseeing so why unveiling to heal a pain that was not ment to fade moment of death moment of life moment of now moment of never a moment of moments trap in my mind awake in the light never to see outside this cage in mind bruise and blood take me away to believe in this... moment of lies
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Posted: Wed Jan 17, 2007 6:46 am
I am known for being blunt in the Arenas but its just that is what I do and it can never change now as for your poem I will say it is good but could be better........ near the middle and the end I lost what you were writing about because the lines and the wording is what I would call a moment of confusion...... Now I am sorry you feel this is a flame but it's not I would sugest that you go over the poemm again after having not read it for awhile and see...... Again I am sorry for my bluntness...... please forgive this poor college girl....
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