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 Posted: Thu Nov 09, 2006 2:44 pm
Every night I think of you
I bet you don't have a clue
That I still love you
Everynight I cry
'Cause your not by my side
Everything was going good for us
But instead ,you wanted to fuss
And I pray each night
For you to come back in my life
Please Come back to me
Without you, I fell no longer to believe
Can't you see?Me and you were meant to be
Some people say I should forget about you
But I feel we can make this through
If we work together
Then our lives would be light as a feather
You don't know,what I'm trying to do
To make my dreams come true
For you to come back in my life
Please Come back to me
Without you, I fell no longer to believe
Can't you see?Me and you were meant to be
You run through me like a river
I want to be by your side forever
I don't want our life to be a storm
I want our love to be warm
Please Come back to me
Without you, I fell no longer to believe
Can't you see?Me and you were meant to be
Please come back to me
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Posted: Sat Nov 11, 2006 7:05 pm
This poem has a good topic but I feel that it doesn't flow very well. That fact makes the passion behind it not shine through so well. If you worked on its rhythm and flow, this piece would be greatly improved.
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