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PostPosted: Sat Nov 03, 2007 10:02 pm


It's really interesting to read everyone's excerpts and see all the ideas that are being explored. This is why I love writing. biggrin

Anyway, w00t, magical bar fight involving swords and fire. This excerpt is my favourite moment in the narrative so far. Yay for burning things.

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The demon heaved himself back to his feet, drawing his sword once more. Fury twisted his face, which dripped with sweat and the blood that still oozed from the cut in his cheek. He snarled inarticulately and strode forward, aiming his sword at Pyralis.

Pyralis did not draw her sword. Instead, she quite sedately removed the glove from her left hand, tucking it into a pocket. She raised her hand to reveal the perfect circle, the channel symbol for the elemental magic of fire, that was tattooed in black on her palm. The demon saw this and stopped in his tracks, his rage abating slightly in the face of this threat – but not entirely.

“I will destroy you, mage,” he growled.

She kept her face neutral. “I will give you this one chance,” she replied steadily. “If you leave now and cease targeting me, I will not pursue you.” Although she had made it her purpose to track down and kill creatures such as this one and had no wish to show this one any mercy, she saw no sense in needlessly wasting her energy on this one when there was another, more powerful demon that she was in the process of tracking down. Nevertheless, she opened herself to the fire element, and felt the energy course through her mind and body, tensing her muscles as she forced herself to contain it.

“And if I do not?” he grinned, undoubtedly seeing her supposed compassion as a weakness.

Her response was straightforward. “I will vanquish you.”

For a moment, he appeared to consider this notion. However, it was not long before his uncontrolled rage had made for him the decision to remain and continue his attempts to kill her. He set himself, and then raised his sword, running forth with a frenzied howl.

Her voice was mild. “Flame.”

A wave of purple-red flame ignited before Pyralis and rolled toward and over the demon. He was knocked back, emitting a horrifying agonised shriek and disappearing into the inferno. Pyralis kept the blaze contained, focusing it upon the demon and minimising the damage to the Minotaur’s stall. She channelled the flame from within, relished the way it blazed through every facet of her being, accustomed to the excruciating burn that accompanied the manipulation of the untamed and destructive element of fire.

She clenched her hand into a fist, drawing the flame into a tight ball, intensifying its heat. The demon still lived within it, twisting and screeching as the fire slowly, piece by piece, completely devoured him. Her head began to ache, her mind burning from the force of her concentration, but Pyralis refused to pay it any heed, drawing the focus of her spell even tighter. She could not allow herself to falter at this point. The demon had to be eliminated entirely before she could release her hold upon the spell, for she would not be able to conjure the energy to create another spell of this strength.

Finally, the flame pierced into the body of the demon, stabbing through his flesh and rending him in two. His shrieks became excruciatingly high-pitched, a screech of utter agony that reverberated within the energy field of the fire spell. As he dissolved, a greenish-black haze seeped from his core, bleeding into the purple-red of Pyralis’s spell and becoming engulfed. The purple-red blaze squeezed tighter still around the demon, moving of its own accord now, until it had compressed itself into a blinding star and then disappeared entirely.
PostPosted: Wed Nov 07, 2007 3:16 pm


An excerpt of my NaNovel, Sza.

-=-

Chapter One

I felt lost. I was far from home and around people I'd never met before. The place was teeming with energy and bodies in motion. It was quite the contrast from home which moved at a more sedate pace.

Life was lived in luxury there in Dna and not with hurried anxiety and rushing. I'd grown up with servants my entire life and was used to being catered to and coddled by them and my family. I am the baby in my family, I am but 20 years old. My Mother was 5,034 when I was born. If anyone ever complains about their parents not understanding they don't know the half of it. I just couldn't take it anymore so I left.

Yeah, I snuck out and left for my own adventures. In Dna, I'm a child and will be a child for many many years in their eyes and that also means hidden from the world. I'm not "old enough" to be on my own according to their rules.

I've watched TV and read books, I know what the real world is like and I intend to live it to the fullest.

I took just one bag with me when I left and filled it with journals, pens, clothes, and money. I couldn't think of anything else that I'd need. I would be like Kerouac and find my own road to travel.

I certainly didn't plan on being picked up by a bunch of dirty smelly men and stuck in a cage on view for all to see. I don't suppose anyone plans to get kidnapped but that's what happened.

They left my bag with me for which I'm grateful and it allows me this time to sit and write in my journals. I've always been a writer and liked to record the daily happenings in my books. I cherish them.

-=-

The people here are strange. I never realized how different the Dna felt from the others. I didn't realize that we vibrated with a sort of intensity not found on anyone else. I think that is the one thing that makes me more homesick. I know what I did was dumb but it a rather grand adventure even if it ends badly.

I didn't think slave markets existed anymore. Of course, slavery doesn't bother me because I have slaves and have had slaves my entire life. There is room for everyone in this world, including slaves.

That said, I think that I'm to be sold as a slave which changes my viewpoint rather dramatically. I don't know if I could be a slave. I couldn't honestly tell you what a slave does ... well, I know what my slaves did but I have no idea how they did it. I've never cooked or cleaned in my life.

I really am thinking running away was a bad idea.

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PostPosted: Tue Nov 13, 2007 4:36 pm


Just a clip that I think is neat. It takes place during a flashback scene.

“He is dead, Tash,” she said sadly. “His body was destroyed with the spell’s power. Helios too.” She stared out at the battle field and at the surviving Summoners. “But we have not won just yet.” The Great Master of Air wiped her cheeks with her long powder blue sleeve and looked at Tash for the first time since she had appeared behind him. “We have to prepare for the worst.”
PostPosted: Fri Nov 21, 2008 6:48 pm


Excerpt from Bellanoche

The six of them looked up into the sky, watching the stars.
"What a beautiful night," said Channa, sliding her hands behind her head and sighing. It had been a long journey, but they all had the feeling that it was just the beginning.


The very end of my novel. Ha ha. It ends on such a cliffhanger.

Andromeda Zreng

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