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My Poem: Tears & Prayers.

Lady Djin

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Posted: Fri Oct 27, 2006 3:01 pm

This poem is pretty much based on my life.
I wrote it today in Business Studies.

I'm sure that it might not sound right, but if you don't understand a part tell me...'kay here it is:

Memories in my head are spinning,
It pains to know that they are winning.

I lie my head upon the wood,
I would cry if I could.
Buts years of tears have made me dry,
& since then I can no longer cry.

I wouldn't dare risk the attention,
or I'd be forced into dark detention.

Quietly I pray to thee,
take my life away from me!

May I die before I wake.
I wish for the fire, my body to take.
So I'll be without care.
Part of the fire, land, sea & air.

Posted: Sun Oct 29, 2006 2:22 pm

Say, that's a pretty decent poem ^^ I like the first two lines a lot...can totally relate to them X_X The last verse was really pretty too, that part about being part of "fire, land, sea, and air." I think your poem would be even better if you edited some of the rhythm a bit =X But overall, 'tis a great poem =]