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Kattie

PostPosted: Sun Oct 22, 2006 3:59 am


Plant
You're sitting there...
Pretending you're there for real...
An empty shell,
Not feeling anything.
A mannequin
Depending on others.
A doll
Letting play with itself.
And what for do you do so?
If you don't say anything,
Don't feel anything,
Don't answer questions...
You gave your soul away...
You are a plant...


That's a quite old poem, I wrote it almost three years ago when I was very angry at a friend of mine. Feedback of any kind would be most welcome, as always. 3nodding heart
PostPosted: Sun Oct 22, 2006 2:22 pm


You're sitting there...
Pretending you're there for real...
An empty shell,


I love these lines. A lot. They provide an AMAZING start to the poem, it's like the thesis statement of an essay that summarizes everything before it's detailed.

Spastic waffles
Captain


Kattie

PostPosted: Tue Oct 24, 2006 9:04 am


Thank you. heart
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Poetry and Lyricism

 
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