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PostPosted: Wed Sep 27, 2006 6:28 pm


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♠ To all of the mods who I have possibly pissed off because I *may have* misplaced this thread, I am sorry about that and I am a newb to this guild so I don't know how everything works around here. Anyways- this is going to be about my first "novel" (if you'd call it that) and I title it "MTV land" since the protagonist winds up finding himself on an MTV television show. Anyways, it's quite different from the romantic novels that the other members post on here because for one thing, it's quite casual. I could go on, but I ought to actually post part one. Enjoy. sweatdrop

It was the usual day in my hometown- I departed from school with my headphones in ear and the beloved Rammstein blasting my ear drums to smitherines with loud music. Everything was going alright; I had no homework that day. That was great in my book, but that wasn't where this story begins. Flash forward to home; my comfortable two story cape cod house... well- my parents' house to be prescise. Anyways, I entered the home with my duffel bag in hand and with my CD player in the other. I took out my headphones, turned my CD player off and dropped it on the table. The house was quiet- dead quiet. Very unusual. That was when I realized that there was something on the table- a note of some sort. I slowly scanned the note as if I was reading the instructions on how to set up a nuclear bomb. The words were sloppily written; my mother's handwriting- she worked as a pharmacist and I'd have to either be a cirtified doctor or a relative to read her handwriting.
"Boxes? What the ********?" I asked myself as I grew a bit suspicious for a second, and then I assumed that it would have to be for our cabin. We sold the shack last week and it was probably to store some items. The basement hasn't been that cluttered since... well... since the last resident (or maybe packrat, to be more specific) who lived here.
I dropped my bookbag on the floor and went to my laptop. It's state of the art... or at least, it was when the last century turned, but anyways- I signed in on gaia quickly, and randomly browsed and posted in the General Discussion forum and it's pathetic topics. Five minutes passed by and I turned on the television; my brother must have been watching MTV before he boarded his plane back to New York. It doesn't matter now, what truely matters is that the channel was playing that one show that I can't stand at all; a television program where we get the joy of watching old asshats b***h at high school jocks. I think the city was somewhere in Alabama or something like that. It doesn't really matter. Anyways- so, that was when my parents entered the door with cardboard boxes. My dad carried most of the load and the two leaned the boxes against the stairs bannister.
"Honey- we need to talk to you, you mind putting the laptop down for a second?" My mom asked me as she sat down on the couch.
"Yeah, sure." I replied as I gently placed the computer on the floor, in front of the leather sofa.
"Well... Your father and I... We..." she began. Already, I had a concerned look on my face. "Your father has been transferred to Birmingham, Alabama and we need to move south." The words came out of a Stephen King novel. It can't be- I loved my hometown and I loved my friends like they were my siblings without the rivalry, or war.
"Okay..." I told her, wanting to scream out stuff like What the hell? or How could you do this to me? I just felt rather depressed inside and at this point, if my eye contact was a gun, I would have missed and shot her in the stomach.
"Honey, I know that this is going to be a painful expirience for you, but you're going to make new friends." She told me. That's what they always say; in the movies, in real life and s**t like that. My heart went cold and I wished one of two things- that my dad wouldn't have transferred, or that he wasn't my dad at all. I sighed and I gave my mom the cold shoulder and I then grabbed my laptop and took it to my room, muttering "I hate both of you." I felt numb for the rest of the night and I guess I might have overreacted, as usual. The next day was Friday and the weather that day went in harmony with my mood. The day was chilly, followed by an extremely gray sky, mourning and giving sympathy towards me. Alabama. I hate Southern culture; it pretty consists of an obsession with barbeques, NASCAR, football, Jesus and country music. I'm sure as hell going to fit in. I was late to first hour this morning and I had a face-to-face discussion with the lovely Ms. O'Brien. Seriously- she had golden hair that was taken very good care of, peircing blue eyes that could force out even the darkest of secrets, a tan of a supermodel and cherry lips. She was intelligent and someone who could stop a train with her radient beauty.
"Colby, you're late to class today- is there something that's wrong?" she asked me. Usually, teachers would give me a detention for this, but not her. She would play counselor before a lesson- right in her office in the front right corner of the room.
"Yeah," I replied with a deep sigh. "I found out that I have to move to Alabama by the end of the month." Today was October 20th, and I only had about a week to move out- give or take a few days.
"Oh... that's terrible," She said to me. O'Brien was either giving me sympathy or making fun of my gloom. Next thing I know, she's pulling out a picture and handing it to me. "This is a good luck symbol; I'll wish you good luck, but move to your seat so we can start the lesson."
I did so and the lesson progressed. Three more periods passed by and that was when I went to lunch. I was standing in the lunch room, looking over people's heads when all of a sudden, someone quickly tapped me on the shoulder. Not funny from my perspective. I turned around and this twit just happened to be... Jessica Albas. She's not hot, like Jessica Alba, but more like- if you were to stick her in with a crowd of New Yorkers, she'd blend in like camoflauge.
"Grooss Deesh!" (Authors note: The german spelling is Grüß Dich) I greeted her; it's a greeting in Deutsch and she was in my class, which made it appropriate, and it made me look like the world's biggest dork.
"Hallo, Colby!" She told me, giggling.
"What's up?" I asked her, quickly turning my head and moving forward, so that I wouldn't cause a domino of people toppling over. I then turned so that I could see her again.
"Not much- but what is it that I hear about you moving to Alabama?" She asked me with a that one look that just says Tell me all that you know.
I sighed and I looked at her. "My dad took a job in Birmingham and I have to live there, now."
A frown appeared on her face. "Wow... I'm so sorry." She said in sympathy. We moved forward again in the lunch line.
"Thanks..." I told her, and moved along in the lunch line. I grabbed my food and I sat at my usual seat, right across from my friends: Alex Gobrahn, a small Egyption kid who loves to fool around; O'ryan McCain, who comes from a family of hippies and who is one of them as well; and then there's Marty Sanchez, who is a bi-racial kid, half-black, half-white, who is more like O'ryan, but is more into school and modern music.
"Hola, Colby." Alex greeted me, cheerfully. Out of the blue, Jessica walked over to us from the cash register and sat next to Marty. Being a big guy, Jessica had some issues with sitting down.
"That's different." I told Jessica as she sat down.
"I feel like hanging out with you, today, Colby." She told me as she began to pick at her cherry tomato.
"Okay... thanks..." I replied as I took a chunk of pizza and swallowed it. Then a bombshell crashed and she asked me one of the most random questions that anybody has asked me.
"You don't mind if I ask you this, do you?" she asked me as she took a sip of water.
"No..."
"I'm just wondering, but do you like... like me?"
"As in have a crush?"
"Yes."
At this point I was panicing and I hesitated, dumbfounded by her question. I liked her because she was a dork just like me and she was beautiful from my eyes.
"Colby?" she asked me one more time.
I sighed, "Yes." I responded. O'ryan smiled and ate another bite of salad.
"Oh... wow... I kinda like you as well." she responded, not giving me eye contact at all, but instead, mumbled into her salad as if she just rehearsed a speech for English class to her food for approval.
"That's cool." I responded as I finished my meal. Through the noise of the cafeteria, nobody at our half of the table talked for the rest of the lunch hour.

~End of Story 1~

♠ Once again- sorry if I wound up posting this in the wrong spot; I don't know all of the ropes of the guild. Also- tell me what you think before I post the story two tomorrow. Also, don't be afraid to comment on it as I go along. I want feedback. ♠
PostPosted: Wed Sep 27, 2006 6:47 pm


♠ I guess since this is my own forum, I'll reserve this post for links just in case others post as I go along. ♠

Zwiebelsaft!


Oukow

PostPosted: Wed Sep 27, 2006 6:49 pm


I quite like it. 3nodding

Can't wait for the next!
PostPosted: Wed Sep 27, 2006 7:18 pm


♠ In this section, we find out some more about Colby and his family and this is the last week that he lives in his house. Okay- I won't keep the suspense running any longer. Here is part two. ♠

After school of that day, I was bombarded with questions. Everybody was either asking me where I was moving to or they were begging me for a postcard. Half of them are people that I don't know; I guess that I'm famous around school for being extremely tall for a freshman, maybe even a human for that matter. Once again, I plopped my duffel bag- loaded with homework, on the floor. An inch would have made a hole in the floor. Mom was dressed in the 1940's housewife style of clothing, which consisted of denim capris, a red and white checkered du-rag and a white blouse.
"Hey grandma." I told my mom as I dropped my CD player on the table again.
"Har har har, Colby." She told me as she sealed a box right next to the angel cupboard.
"I'm just trying to make light of the fact that you're going to have to transfer to a Target down in Alabama."
"...Just help pack."
I grabbed the box and placed it in the living room just as the doorbell rang. I could slack off for a little bit, while a realitor came in. She was the most gorgeous woman I have ever layed eyes on, between her tiger marble eyes, her stringy deep brown hair and her hollywood tan- I was tempted to get to know her and to ask her out. Alas, I didn't since she was here on business. I walked over to my bedroom and I booted up my laptop and logged back on to gaia. A half hour passed before my mom called me down- time to pack again. I ran around the house, like a little rat, moving boxes here and sealing them there. By the time the news broadcasted at 10, the entire basement's height was lowered by an average of two feet. This is going to take a s**t load of time to bring these boxes up, I thought as I sat down on the cushy leather sofa. My dad was sitting next to me and that's when I turned to him.
"Where are we moving to?" I asked him as he surfed the channels.
"It's a city called Blue Springs, Alabama. It's a suburb of Birmingham."
Oh s**t.
"You'll like it there- it has great schools and a great community." he continued on.
"And you're forgetting about one thing." I said with an unpleasant face on. I was pointed in the direction as him, but my eyes were shut.
"Oh?"
"It's fricking MTV... Wait, which high school am I going to?" I asked him, almost raising my voice.
"Don't yell at me, and it's Blue Springs high school." he responded
I sighed. "It's MTV land," I just walked upstairs. "G'night, turn up the lights on your way up."
"Okay."
I had a terrible night sleep that night- it went over and over in my hand. ******** MTV land, Blue Springs high and s**t like that. I used to have a dog; a golden retriever named JD. My dork of a sister named it that. The family was incredibly devistated when he was hit by the neighbor's car; a bit ironic since we used him for comfort when something dreadful occured in the family. I felt like I needed him right now.
The next morning wasn't too bad... okay, I lied. Today was miserable and I woke up around nine in the morning, feeling incredibly groggy and exhausted. I had to spend the entire day packing and moving boxes. Fun. Beginning with my bedroom and my infinate collection of compact discs, I packed those into a small box, followed by the clothes I don't want to wear within the next 10, or so days. I just about packed all of my room at this point- the only thing that needed to be packed would be my toys. Nevermind, that was hitting ebay. I slacked off and watched whatever was left of the morning lineup of Saturday morning cartoons- another rerun of Johnny Test. Like she had a sixth sense, my mom called me down just as I turned the television off for lunch. At this point, I still have a grudge against my parents for moving, but it's merely hormonal; I'm not mad at my dad himself for making the move to Alabama, but I am, however tempted to burn North Pine Bank headquarters to the ground.
Today's menu featured grilled cheese, extremely crunchy kettle chips, and some chicken noodle soup. I sat down on the chair and pretended to pray before the ritual of eating, and once the blessing had ended, I took a bite of my grilled cheese. It tasted different.
"Mom, is this a new recipe?" I asked her. She always tried out new recipies.
"Yeah, I used cheddar cheese in the bread, instead of american." She responded to me in a smile.
"Oh..." I said as I took another bite.
"You know... if you don't like it..."
"No- it's just different, in fact, I actually like it." I interrupted, as I took another bite.
That was when we just talked about different things instead of moving. The rest of the afternoon was pretty much the same as this morning, except that I had to finish picking up my room and then I moved on to Evan's. He was relatively perfect in every way to my parents, except in one area, and that would be music. If it wasn't that he could catch any girl, that he plays one of the quarterbacks on some football team in NYC, and that he had relitively perfect grades, then I'd be the better one. Plus, being a possibly bisexual kid, if he wasn't my brother and he was gay, I'd date him in a heartbeat. Too bad it wouldn't make me look very good amongst the girls team. Anyways, my job for his room was to dust his s**t and pack it away. Yeah, he was Mister Superstar with the 20-something trophies in his room. Next thing to pack away was his bedsheets. Now- I caught him masturbating three years ago, so call me hypocritical, but I was afraid to even touch the bedsheets. I slowly reached for the corner of the bed and then, grabbing all of the blankets and the fitted sheet, I lifted everything off of the bed- even his pillows were on the other side.
I'll skip out on the boring details, but all of his stuff was packed away in boxes, and being the good brother I am, even his playboys were packed away. Seriously, who could resist Dita von Teese in a corset and bondage? Anyways, so days were pretty much like this after school and homework every day, except for Fridays and Saturdays.
Today was Friday, about eight days after the news; the day that the movers came. While I was at school, the furniture was being moved out of the house- one by one. The house was already sold on Tuesday, which I'm assuming is quite fast, but that's not the main point. I come home as usual- no CD player in hand since it's somewhere in the middle of the US and I have a duffel bag that's lacking homework, due to the move. I turn my key in the door and then all of a sudden, there's about seven of my friends in the door yelling out "Suprise!" simultaniously.
"Oh my god!" I yelled as everybody came to rush over to me. "What are you doing in my house?"
Jessica stepped forward, "Well... this is probably one of your last days here and so we wanted to make one more memory for you.
That was awfully sweet of them. I normally would have made a punny comeback, but I was dumbfounded and my mouth was obviously hanging from my jaw.
"It doesn't matter now, we're all going to see "Jackass Two"." she continued. I was pinching my a**, since my parents wouldn't have usually let me go. I guess that because there was a big party of ten celebrating their loss, it was a good thing that my dad bought that crappy van. Anyways, we did go and I just had a great time, especially when the fat girl jumped on... one of the guys. The next day was the flight to Birmingham. Yay! I'm so ******** excited. Not.

~End of pt. 2~

♠ Anyways- I'll post part three tomorrow. It's not all that big, so there shouldn't be any suspense in this one. ♠

Zwiebelsaft!


Zwiebelsaft!

PostPosted: Thu Sep 28, 2006 1:48 pm


♠ This chapter is short and more casual, but anyhoo- here is part 3: ♠

I was a bit depressed in my hotel today, because I get to leave my own hometown of Minneapolis just to fly to Blue Springs. If you can imagine, I'm recruited for football enough, but now that it's everybody's obsession, imagine fourteen times a week squared. I woke up, wearing only my camo novelty pajama pants. I honestly could say that I thought that I looked good in them- I don't have those toned abs that hollywood celebrities such as Ben Affleck and Orlando Bloom have on them; just a bit of pudge here and there that I supposedly needed to work on. Damn society.
In the insult of a bathroom I was in, I used the toilet and took a shower, which made me smell better. That day was as gloomy as I was, still, and I was wearing my black zip-up hoodie over a simple white tee with some boot cut jeans that I sanded down with course sandpaper awhile back. I took a step into the airport with my parents; a step that was an introduction to the rest of my high school career. A step closer to being on national tellevision. Jurreigh! (AN: It's pronounced you-rhay- more German) The first stop was a McDonald's, since they were just about the only place that served breakfast. I ordered some kind of McGrease bagel sandwich and then I devoured only half of it on the way to the terminal- the rest I finished while sitting and waiting for the plane to board. A quarter of an hour's worth of rain plumited towards the ground before a broken intercom announced our flight to Birmingham. Good-bye, Minnesota. I missed thee. I sat on a window seat, where I saw the last of my prescious homeland; just a strip of concrete with funny-looking carts lugging whatever wherever. The sign that ordered all passengers to buckle their seatbelt began to glowed and nearly simultaniously, all of the others clicked their seatbelt and the plane shortly took off. A tear rolled down my cheek since I'd have to start a new life in a bizzare location that is just about the opposite of where I grew up.
Five minutes later, looking down from the window, I could see some river and a bird's eye view of some midwestern city; I was simply looking down, when I suddenly felt a tap on my shoulder. A stewardess asked me if I wanted a scone.
"Uh, no thanks." I told her, nearly giggling at hearing somebody say that they were joining the mile high club. Damn, was I immature.
"Okay." She replied as she moved down the aisle. I noticed a man and a woman going into the same bathroom simultaniously and I gagged. Note to self, don't use the airplane bathroom.
A long hour passed and I felt myself slowly growing into a deep sleep. That was where I had this disturbing dream, where O'ryan back home was a Jackie Chan and after defeating this weird invisible squid thing, he gave out autographs and fought a black guy dressed in Link's costume. After the fight, O'ryan came up to me and bowed to me and told me to wake up. I obeyed him and woke up to a half-empty plane with people walking down the aisle to exit the plane, like in the DMV line.
"Colby, you ready to see our new house?" Mom asked me.
"Here already?" I asked, still groggy.
"Yeah."
I looked out the window and I saw some steam; the clear stuff that you often see over a grill whenever someone was frying some hamburgers on the grill.
"C'mon, Colby." My mom called over to me. I rose up and quickly paced over to where they were in the long tunnel that streaches from the airport to the airplane. Welcome to the rest of your life, Colby. I thought as I just followed my parents around the airport like an obediant dog.
~End of part 3~
PostPosted: Sun Oct 01, 2006 9:08 am


♠ Okay, there are two parts to chapter four on here, so Ladies and Gentlemen: Chaper four, part eins. ♠

After grabbing a cab at the airport, we ventured through countless tree-lined avenues and boulevards. My only verb in the cab was that I looked out the window and looked at the architecture and nature that passed by the cab window. My parents were talking to the German cab driver; how they could understand him through his accent, I have no idea. After awhile, the cab driver offered a strange puppet. I grabbed the thing and I looked at it. The nylon fabric was baby chicken yellow and so were the feathers; as a matter of fact, it was a chick. I put my hand in the sock and I squeezed the rubber ball in the sock, which caused the mouth to open and a long tongue to shoot out and then recoil. I felt like a little kid again and I smiled because of it. I played with this puppet until my inner adult kicked my child off and took control. (AN: If this is a sexual induendo in any way, there was no intent of it.)

The house was a larger one-story on a hill- there was a triple garage underneith the only floor of the estate. There was also a patio, a swimming pool, five bedrooms with their own bathrooms and other fancy things.

"Uh... this is out of our price range, are we renting?" I asked the parents, as I exited the cab.

"No, grandma Wedekamper is moving in." my mother replied, exiting the other side. Today, she was wearing some kakhi shorts and a turquoise blouse.

"Okay..." I responded, approaching the house. The weather was hot and I missed the near-cold October weather of Minnesota. Once inside, all I saw was a large open sea of white inside and a clear view of the backyard, along with swimming pool, beyond the clear glass windows and doors. Apparently the living room hasn't come yet.

"Colby!" Mom called. "There's a new neighbor who wants to meet you!"

Hey it's not like there was anything better to do. Taking giant steps, I nearly rushed for the door- not in panic, but because I was tall- and I saw this red-haired girl with freckles standing outside our door with a basket filled with fruit. A welcome gift, I guess.

"Hi!" she cheerfully greeted me with a gesture to shake hands.

"Hey." I told her, shaking her hand.

"I'm Kristy," she told me "and I hear that you're new."

"Yeah, I've come from Minnesota."

"I knew you weren't from the south- you have an accent."

I had an accent?

"That's no problem though- here, my mom and I made this house-warming gift for you." she told me as she shoved the basket into my chest.

"Thanks." I replied, as I smiled. At this point, out of the corner of my eye, I saw this cheap sportscar drive into the driveway across the street, followed by a beat up mid-nineties Chevy. "Who is that?" I asked her, looking at some teen get out of the car with a bunch of big cameras trailing his every move, as if he was a terrorist being spied on by satellite.

"Oh. That's Blake Grazer, the quarterback." she told me, her emerald green eyes targeting him angrily as he walked into his front door. She said that rather harshly and it made it incredibly obvious that she had a grudge against him.
You don't say, I thought. Sports car, tall, blonde, wearing a Pirates jersey with matching athletic shorts and even more obvious- he had cameras following him.

"I hate that a** so much." she told me. For a southerner, I was a bit suprised that she would use that language.

"I just moved here, so could you give me a bit of a history lesson?" I asked, while turning to stare at her pretty face. If you couldn't tell, I wasn't being sarcastic.

"Sure. It all started in eighth grade..." she began.

Oh- an eighth grade romance, who'd thing that it would end tragicly?

"...and I was in English class with him. Back then, I had a crush on him and I sent out notes to him, until one day he stopped me in the hallway and asked me out. Basicly, I found out that he had three other girlfriends- one a devil-worshipper, another a cheerleader and a third one being a whore."

"Is devil-worshipper a synonym for one of the goth clique?" I asked her.

"She wears all black, corsets and pentagrams, if that's what you're wondering."

I love the bible belt. "We call those people goths up north." I told her.

"Yeah- that's another name for them, but our minister says that they're evil."

If she was less ignorant, then I'd ask her out. "Okay."

That was pretty much the highlight of my day, except for opening boxes that contained items that belonged to my room. It's like Christmas in November! Except that I knew what I was going to recieve; not so fun.

♠ Yeah, Colby is quite stereotypical. dramallama Anyways, I'll try on part zwei tomorrow. Hope you enjoyed this one. ♠

Zwiebelsaft!


Zwiebelsaft!

PostPosted: Mon Oct 02, 2006 2:36 pm


♠ Part two isn't that big, really- but here it is, for your entertainment. ♠

Today was Sunday and normally, because of my family's Atheism, I'd sleep in. Not the case today.

"Guten morgen, Herr Colby!" my mom cheerfully woke me up.

"Vhas?" I groaned. About ninety percent of the time, I'm braindead when I first wake up.

"You have to register for the school, remember?"

"Isn't it a usual fill everything out and everybody's happy?"

"No, silly; you have to actually go to the school."

Wunderbar

"So get up and get dressed."

I did as I was told and I showered and did my hygiene s**t: deodorant, brush teeth, comb hair, wash face and floss. From what I recall, I thought that I was going to go on a tour of the school.

Dad handed me some frozen waffles. "Eat up, Colby- we're running late.'

I suddenly regretted taking a 20-minute shower, since I always hated eating in vehicles; it just always seemed rude. I had to eat breakfast in a taxicab that was parked out front. I slowly lowered my body into the front seat, while my dad sat in the back. One would think that the payer would sit in the front passenger, but because of my long gams, that wasn't the case today.

"How tall are you, man?" the taxicab asked me, rather hyperactively (if that's even a word).

"Uh... six-foot-five." I responded to him. Give or take another inch.

"Damn, son! Ever thought about playin..."

"Football? Basketball? Don't bother- I don't enjoy either one of them. I'm more of an artsy person, ya know?"

"Yeah."

The rest of the cab ride was pretty much awkward silence amongst the driver, my dad and I. The only thing we could hear was the engine, the pressure on the car as it passed by others and the road. Once we arrived at the school, my stomach was in a knot. This is a famous high school on an overrated network! Oh em gee, I'm so ******** excited! I exited the cab and walked halfway down the sidewalk, before turning to wait for Dad. The time it takes for him to have a conversation with the cab driver, one would think that time would have stopped. A minute passed and I called out for him to hurry up. He stood straight up again and slowly walked towards me.

Inside the school was the principal, (AN: Keep in mind that ALL of these characters are totally made up and that if they don't have their own wikipedia article, then they will be replaced my pre-mades. I don't know how much I have to emphisise on that!) a short, chubby woman who only stood up to my top rib. She had long red hair and she was wearing a sky blue sweater and suit pants.

"Hello!" She greeted us cheerfully, as if she was Satan, trying to seal a deal that involves an empty luxury in exchange for our soul. Dad shook her hand first. "I'm Miz. Green, the principal at Blue Springs high school."

"Hello, I'm Roger Vaydekamper and this is my son, Colby." He said it like that, but that's not the correct spelling (which is Wedekamper).

She held out her hand towards me. "Hi." I told her with a slight smile as I gave her a firm vibrate. (AN: get your laughs now, but this ain't a sexual induendo)

"C'mon, Colb, you can turn that frown upside-down!" she said cheefully as I let out a nerd-like snort. "That's the spirit, darling."

I released my hand from her grip. "So... what do I have to do here?"

"Well, all you need to do is sit at that desk right there and then registar for your classes." she explained. I was already halfway down the large corridor when she explained that I had to sit at a dark wood desk and register for classes. I sat down slowly and she handed me a booklet. After fifteen minutes of skimming through it, I signed up for band and French class. Those were the only two languages available. So ******** unfair.

♠ We're still going into the beginning- just wait until he actually starts school. dramallama
PostPosted: Sun Oct 29, 2006 9:27 am


♠ Chapter 5- nothing really special, just fitting into a new school. ♠

Monday rolled around, just as I rolled around in my bed all night- desperate for a good night sleep. Nothing. A royal blue sky covered the earth, and I questioned the time. I was so used to summer that a part of me was telling me that it was only five in the morning. On a november? Yeah right.

I climbed out of bed and looked in the living room- yeah, mom was in the kitchen. Swiftly, I grabbed my clothes and headed towards the bathroom. This was different, since there were two sinks and a glass door for a shower. How humiliating would it be if someone was to walk in? I asked myself as I set the clothes on the counter and entered the shower, feeling the cold tiles on the floor. s**t that's cold. That was when I turned on the head and about twenty jets leaked cold water onto me. I cringed at this suprise and slowly sighed from relief when the water gained heat.

I dressed in my finest- a pair of camoflauge cargo pants, some old military boots, and a red Schweiz T-shirt that I bought off of ebay (this shirt had a white cross in the center of my chest), covering a teal henley shirt.

"You're up early, Colby." Mom told me as I walked into the main area.

"I know- I couldn't sleep last night." I replied as I scratched my wet black hair. "What time is it?"

"It's quarter after six. I'm aware that you're nervous- just about everybody becomes nervous as they start a new school."

Replace that with petrified and you're right on the money.

"What do you want for breakfast?" she asked me as she checked the cupboard.

"What's there?"

"Honey nut Cheerios or cinnamon toast crunch?"

"Cheerios."

She grabbed a bar and tossed it over towards me.

"You need to get groceries again?"

"Yeah."

I sat on the floor of the living room and devoured the bar, watching the sports reel. Nothing but high school football; I'd have to watch ESPN just to see how any national team was doing! Speaking of, we didn't have ESPN at the time since the cable wasn't going to be installed until Thursday night.

The sun rose over the sky and the cool weather was warming up. The microwave told whoever was there that seven o'clock was coming and that it was almost time for school. I had to ride the bus that day- just to get to know my route. This was all Greek to me and I knew nothing about the kids that lived around here, except for Kristy and Blake. That's it.

Once the time had come, I felt every possible pain and ache going on in my stomach- ulcers, butterflies, knots, et cetera- you name it, I have it. Maybe it was the idea of being on a television show that triggered all of this, but nobody can be certain. I walked onto the cement with a packed duffel bag in one hand and my CD player in the other. Yay! I have my prescious once again! Upon listening to the first powerful guitar riff, I walked down to the bus stop that lied just a few houses down. I could see Kristy hanging out with her friends- one was a short black girl who wore capris and had a chubby duck-like face. She wore capris that only traveled down mid-calf, pink sandals that have a magenta pom-pom in the toe strap, and a tight black baby phat t-shirt with a pink cat on it. There was another girl- a thin caucasian girl with red hair, dense freckles and blue eyes that were so sharp, I could see them from where I was standing. She was wearing sweatpants and a blue and gold abercrombie polo with a moose emblem on the chest. Kristy waved over towards me and I paused my player to see what she was saying.

"Colby! Over here!" she shouted towards me.

I quickened my pace and looked before running across the street. "Hey." I told her, my breathing slightly harder.

"Colby, this is Dianna" she said, gesturing the black girl, "and Morgen"

"Wow- how old are yew?" Dianna asked me in a higher-pitched voice.

"Fourteen..." I replied to the girls.

There was a ton of ooh-ing and ah-ing amongst the three of them.

"How tall are you?" Morgen asked me with a peppy look on her kid-like face.

"Uh... six-foot-five." I replied.

Dianna giggled and the girls still ooh-ed.

"Why? Is this some kind of a joke or something?"

"No- we were just curious." Kristy told me as she motioned another kid over towards me. He appeared to be half my height and he had dark brown curly hair, rich cocoa brown eyes, and if the stubble on his face didn't count as facial hair, then the soulpatch that extended from his lip to his chin sure as hell did. He wore a Pittsburgh pirates hoodie and ripped jeans.

"Yo!" the kid told the group as he approached us. "Whose the new kid?" he asked them

"That's colby" Kirsty told him "he come from Minnesota" she told him as she made fun of my supposed accent. I smiled and let out a gust of air as a sign of simple laughter.

"Hey kid, what's up?" he asked me as a yellow bus came from around the corner.

"I arrived two days ago. You?"

"Not much- just stick with me and you won't be lost." he told me as he turned around to board that thing.

Once my turn was up, I climbed up the steps and there was absolute silence as I walked down the aisle to a seat. All eyes were on me as if I had a high power in society. I took my seat and turned up the volume of my Rammstein CD. This was blowing at my ear drums harder than the Germans did to the Berlin Wall.

Once at school, I jumped off the bus and headed inside. The morning was different from yesterday. The corridors were filled up with teenagers that were everywhere. I entered the office and as I was about to approach the counter, I felt a hand on my shoulder. I could feel all color drain from my face.

"How old are you son?" the voice asked me.

"Fourteen?" I just about asked him, as if if this was the wrong answer, then my head will be blown off execution style.

"Ever thought about playing football?"

"No..." That was the incorrect response for the both of us. For him the right answer would be yes and for me, I needed a vulgar word that preceeded the no.

"You'd be crazy to not say yes." he told me. From the way he sounded, I'd thought he call me Clairisse.

"I just don't like it."

"How can you not like it?"

I've always wanted to use this excuse since I saw that one Marilyn Manson VH1 special. "Because I'm too much like Brian Warner as it is and if I was any more like him, I'd become a Manson wannabe." He took his hand off of my shoulder and there was silence. I took a step foreward and grabbed my schedule.

Who was that freak?


I recieved my schedule and headed towards the first hour classroom to talk about lockers.

It wasn't until my third peiod class that I finally encountered the cameras. So I did have classes with these famed Blue Springs high school super jock gods. I was the first to enter the decorated classroom- this was one hell of a change from the rest of the boring white brick walls and the navy berber carpet- along with the occasional hated teacher, who just happens to be a priest of the first Church of Football.

The man who was sitting at the desk for this period was a fair-skinned man with dust-colored hair and a black pinstripe suit. I knew him all too well, for he was a substitute teacher. Usually, I never remember any of the subs that I have had back in Minnesota, but Mister Barker was unique. He could actually draw, as shown on the cartoon-filled white board. This board was filled with popular cartoon characters- Sponge Bob, Gary the snail, Bart Simpson, Peter Griffin, Homer Simpson, Stewie Griffin, Lisa Simpson, and many others that are saying whatever is academicly related. I can imagine that this was his way of giving the class our daily agenda.

"Mr. Barker?" I asked the teacher as he turned around from checking his e-mail.

"Yes?" He replied as he swiftly swiveled around in his seat, with a pointer gun aiming towards the celing.

The camera's light was on, and after noticing though the very corner of my eyes, my thought went from trying to find my seat to seeing if I at least looked alright for national television. "I had an assigned seat, right?"

"In the back corner, Colby."

I walked back towards where the cameras stood and I sat in my desk. I never thought that something like this would happen, but I was actually talking to the cameraman. "How's it going?" I began, just as some of the kids entered- one of them being this black kid with black Adidas pants and wearing a red under armour muscle tee. I'm pretty damned sure that wearing tight clothing that lacks sleeves goes against school policy, but he's on the football team, so who honestly cares? I could notice how the camera was on him and that the cameraman was busy- something like one of the Buckingham Palace guardsman. Those adults seriously need those funny black fur hats.

The bell rang again and Barker walked to the front of the room. Integrated one matematics- one of my personal specialties. I set my books on the floor, right next to my desk.

"We have a new student today, class." He announced as he gestured me to stand up. "This is Colby Wedekamper- he was one of my favorite students from when I used to sub up in Minnesota. What school district did you come from, again?"

I stood up as he was creating his speech. "I come from Minneapolis, since nobody here knows where Osseo is." I told him.

"Alright, take your seat."

I obeyed and the math lesson went on smoothly.

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PostPosted: Sun Oct 29, 2006 9:34 am


Chapter six


It's time for a pop quiz. Todays question is: What is the hardest time for a child on his or her first day of school? Is it making a first impression? Is it trying to find a seat at lunch? Is adjusting to the bitter teachers that absolutely hate you for no reason once you step foot in the classroom? Or is it all of the above? Personally, I'm thinking of trying to find something at lunch, but all of the above might match.

Eleven-fourty five rolled around on my first day and the first lunch bell rang. Hungry, growing teens rushed into the cafeteria- desperate for food, reguardless of what gruesome things the government provided for some school food. The menu said hot dogs, but were they truely serving Vienna bratwurst, or a new edible rubber developed by NASA?

After entering the cafe with thumbs in pocket, I headed into the lunch line and grabbed a calico lunch tray. I waited though the lunch line, and I waited, and I waited some more. The bell rang as I was passing the time by finding a table to sit at. It was depressing- everybody sat at different tables, based on clique. They never did that back at home. There were preps at one table- wearing their abercrombie and Fitch, alongside with their hotshot boyfriends that just happened to be the greek gods of this school. The nerds were sitting and showing off their tech and geeky junk. Then, there were the goths- the lowlifes at this school. They sat in the corner of the lunch room, with then typical Marilyn Manson and Alice Cooper look. Poor kids, they just want to express themselves, but nobody understands. Their pastors in their prescious gold plated churches preached on their platnum-plated podiums tollerance, but they also say that those who are different are evil. Hypocracy at it's finest, right?

"Hi, cutie pah- yeew're new here, raght?" an overweight kitchen lady asked me as she was giving me this mystery substance.

"Yeah- I come from Minnesota." I told her

"I could tell just hearing you say 'Yeah'." she responded. She was implying that I had an accent.

"Ya, shure, ya betcha." I joked as I moved down the line. "I do not have an accent." I muttered to myself as I paid for my lunch. I'll just sit with these "devilworshippers" today- mostly because I can't find a place to sit.

I set my tray on the table as a pale skinned girl with jet black hair, a red corset, navy blue nail polish and ice-blue halloween contacts looked up from her salad.

"What is your business here?" she asked me, in a calm, depressing manner.

"I... I... I'm new here and I don't have a place to seat." I studdered. "My name is Colby."

"My name is Beatrice."

Nice name.

"If you're new here, then why are you hanging out with us. Don't you get it that this is the bible belt? Most of these ******** are always in their own world and whatever B.S. their preachers vomit out of their mouths, they'll believe- get it?"

"Too bad that they know that I'm not a goth."

"You don't get it here- you've probably come from some lala land school up in Minnesota or something, but if you hang out with certain people, you'll be either admired or hated."

How did she know that I was from Minnesota?

"Just get lost and sit with some other kids for a week or a few." she told me.

"You sure, or are you just wanting me off because either a- you're a b***h, or b- something bad happened and you're taking it out on me."

"Kid, do you want to die?"

"No, but..."

"Beat it!"

"Are you alright?"

"Yeah." She retaliated. Beatrice looked at her salad again. Something has to be going on at home.

"What's wrong? Not to point out the obvious, or anything, but you're not going after me with a belt... or a razor."

"I hate it how you're being stereotypical, but yeah. My parents converted to Baptist recently..."

"Ouch. That seriously sucks." I was feeling something horrible inside my stomach that caused me to not want to eat my fries and corn.

"I know- they told me to drop my satanistic ways and reform to the lord. How big of dumbshits are my parents?"

"The epitome cubed."

"Damn straight!"

"Tell them to just ******** off and that if they loved you, that they wouldn't force you out of your ways. Otherwise just leave a faux suicide blaming everything on your parents."

She laughed and told me that I was funny.

I took my tray up to the garbage and dumped the contents of the tray into the garbage can. The bell rung as I left my tray on the dish room and the rest of the day was just normal. With the excemption of the MTV cameras that fluttered about. Yay for being an extra!
PostPosted: Thu Nov 09, 2006 4:14 pm


♠ Chapter seven and eight for your viewing pleasure. ♠

Chapter Seven


Not all children are this lucky. I had no homework on my first day of school.

I exited the school doors and Kristy caught up with me.

"Hai!"

"Hey" I replied to her, with half of a smile. "How was your day?"

"Not too bad- I saw you sitting with those sata-"

"Don't say it."

"Well- what's with that?"

"Don't ask." I told her as I walked through the mosaic front yard of the school to the bus.

"Alright, but you want to hang out with us at Tammy's?"

"What the heck is that?"

"It's the greatest bar alive! There are live shows and sports and excellent food and stuff like that." she explained to me.

"Alright- it's only my first day and... what the hell? Who else is going to be there?"

"Tony Smith and April Wheeler." At the time, Tony was in my third period class and April was a junior in my French class. "C'mon kid, it'll be fun." she told me as she wandered off to the parking lot. She drives a car, apparently.

The car ride was boring and I somewhat wanted to die. Preppy kids singing out of key to country music. Hell, I had no idea that you could sing out of key in that so called music. Not to mention that the car smelt of burned tobacco.

Upon arrival, our group entered a blandly decorated hallway, with a band playing onstage. They were quite talented with their industrial-style rock music and highly charged political lyrics. There were booths against the outside wall, tables in the middle and a large bar against the bathroom wall. Kristy's group sat down and started talking; I sat next to the group. Girls, boys, school, television and music was on the menu- along with today's helping of gossip for the soup du jour. Upon ordering onion rings, the band began to hit the showers. I stood up and excused myself from the group, talking to these amazing teenagers.

"Yo- great work up there." I told them with a serious tone.

"You really think so, kid? We're just dicking around- ya know?" the lead singer told me with a dark smirk amongst his black-stained ******** yeah!" I replied; seeing Beatrice through the corner of my eye. "I had no idea you had a band." I told her, looking in her rich brown eyes.

"Yeah- who isn't a musician? Except for those dumbshit jocks and their anorexic who... excuse me- I mean cheerleaders."

I grinned and laughed at what she said. "Too true!"

The rest of the day, I helped pack up for the posse and helped devour the fries with the other group. I guess it can be fun being the newbie.

Chapter Eight


The cool breezes of winter came to pass us; the cameras packed up for the last time until the next autumn. I dropped out of French and I took German at the community college after school. Through that missing period, I took up choir. Not a smart idea since I had another asshat of a teacher, but hell- I had the leader of that band, Leo, in my period. Everything was great, I sat with the gothic seniors in my class and nobody cared. Unfortunately, this sea wasn't always going to have calm weather. This was the beginning of a new world for me; I finally opened my eyes to the world for the first time, and it could not have been as beautiful as what I've seen in the looking glass.

Today was the day before Winter Break- everybody was eating with their friends, except for me. I sat at the usual table, but nobody was there- the goths have dissappeared. Seventh period came around and I was sitting in my desk, when Ivory, one of the girls, walked in with tears down her cheek. What was going on?

"You alright?" I asked her in the halls.

She only nodded.

"Is there something wrong?"

She nodded again, this time much more slowly and painfully. That was when she handed me a note. Beatrice. ******** no.

I pocketed the note quickly and made my way to the bus, hearts heavy. Was she for real, or was this my suggestion faux note? That was when I painfully unfolded the scratch piece of paper and read her neat cursive handwriting.

World,

Whoever is able to read this through the possible bloodshed that my body has caused me, please note that I'm not the selfish one for this intollerable act. It was a miracle that I was kept alive for this long and I just wanted to say to ******** you all for keeping me in this goddamned world and for letting me rot in the ignorance and stupidity of the common man in the bible belt. I thought that only my parents loved me, but I was wrong; from what everybody has treated me, this is a great big white world without colors or tollerance. Why waste the world's resources when there's no point for me? Why change myself for the "better", when you have it worse? Good-bye, c**k-suckers- I'll see you all in hell.

Beatrice Marie Herbst


My breathing grew heavier upon reading that note. and a small tear dropped onto my backpack. I guess that was it- look at how horrible our human race has become. I'm now ashamed of what species I was born as. I reread the whole note over and over again. This was a terrible thing. It was a holiday after all! Upon arriving at the stop, Kristy approached me.

"Whatcha got there?" she asked me cheerfully.

I just looked at her.

"Nevermind- I see that you have a bit of scruff there." her happiness was an unwanted virus that I was immune to for the time being. She pinched my cheek, feeling my brand new stubble that gave me this rugged look in the face.

What she did set me over the edge. "Kristy, one of my first friends in this goddamned town just killed herself." I exploded, then calming down. "Sorry."

She took a deep breath and just walked on. Was it that I scolded her, or that she didn't know how to comfort me? I didn't know. All I felt was the unwanted puppy- Numbness- that Bea left behind for me to take care of. I marched home like a mindless soldier and entered through the door to a happy family.

"Hello Colby- how was school?" My grandma asked me. She was a little woman with many wrinkles in her skin to demonstrate how much history she's monitored throughout the ages.

"Hi grandma." I replied in a depressing matter as I grabbed a glass of milk from the fridgerator.

"What's the matter? You appear to be depressed." she noted upon looking at my unpleasant face.

"A girl." I choked. I didn't know how to phrase it right. "One of my friends..." I studdered.

"What about your girlfriend?" she asked me.

"Grandma!"

"Well- what's with this girl? Spill it, Colby."

"I found out that she killed herself today."

My grandma just stood there- suprised and speechless, but nothing under the lines of sympathetic.

"If she couldn't take the heat, she should have stayed out of the kitchen. That was selfish of her."

"What the hell, Grandma? She was my friend?"

"Colby!" My mother reprimanded from the other room. "You have no right to talk to your grandmother that way- say your sorry right now."

"Sorry Grandma, but seriously- it's hard for me and you're not helping any by saying that she was a selfish twit."

She just walked away, dry of all appropriate things to say. I sat on the counter and leaned over. I sobbed. I wanted to wake up.

Her funeral was the day before Christmas Eve. All of her true friends were standing around her favorite evergreen on school property. Leo was cradling her compact dusty body against his, like an infant.

"I loved her more than anybody else in the world, and this is how she repaid me." he told the funeral attendants. "Damn her, and damn those ******** who stood in the way of her life, liberty and her persuit of happiness. Damn them all to their own hell."

I smiled and I began feeling that as well.

"Good-bye, love, you will live in the rest of us. Lest we forget; gather ye rosebuds while ye may. Tomorrow is still a flyin'. The same rose that smiles today, tomorrow will be dying. Rest in peace, darling." He said as he dropped the ashed around the dirt that ringed the pine.

A tear shed down another girl's eye as we all parted our separate ways.

Zwiebelsaft!

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