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Name:Kaname Gekimone
nickname(s):Gecki and Kane
species:gecko
appearance:He is a white gecko with two horns going off the back of his head,he has brown eyes,he wears yellow gloves with several black rings above each one,he has a two rows of black spines going down from his shoulder blades to the tip of his tale,unlike others he wears baggy black pants,and he has yellow shoes with a black wires running from one side of the shoe to the other.
weapons:a Katana and two daggers.
powers: gecko walk
allows him to walk on walls and ceiling.
ninjutsu
ability to use the elements in a spell like attack
ninja leap
Ability to jump four times his body length
illusion
ability to make clones from his shadow
tame
able to talk to nature's wild life
Backstory:He was born in the woods and raised himself.He had to learn how to hunt,heal,purify water,and survive through all his childhood.He has learned the ways of nature and only hunted what he felt necessary.At the age of ten he moved into town and did what he could to help others.now at the age of fifteen he has found a chaos emerald shard,and hopes to defeat any evils with it.
personality:quiet but tries not to avoid conversation,kind,and often calm and able to process a situation thoroughly.
others:His eyes change color with mood.
blue:sad or worried
green:relieved
red:enraged
yellow:calm
brown:usual
nickname(s):Gecki and Kane
species:gecko
appearance:He is a white gecko with two horns going off the back of his head,he has brown eyes,he wears yellow gloves with several black rings above each one,he has a two rows of black spines going down from his shoulder blades to the tip of his tale,unlike others he wears baggy black pants,and he has yellow shoes with a black wires running from one side of the shoe to the other.
weapons:a Katana and two daggers.
powers: gecko walk
allows him to walk on walls and ceiling.
ninjutsu
ability to use the elements in a spell like attack
ninja leap
Ability to jump four times his body length
illusion
ability to make clones from his shadow
tame
able to talk to nature's wild life
Backstory:He was born in the woods and raised himself.He had to learn how to hunt,heal,purify water,and survive through all his childhood.He has learned the ways of nature and only hunted what he felt necessary.At the age of ten he moved into town and did what he could to help others.now at the age of fifteen he has found a chaos emerald shard,and hopes to defeat any evils with it.
personality:quiet but tries not to avoid conversation,kind,and often calm and able to process a situation thoroughly.
others:His eyes change color with mood.
blue:sad or worried
green:relieved
red:enraged
yellow:calm
brown:usual
Okay, couple problems with this, I'll start with the most severe and work my way down to the nitpick details.
Number one, Chaos Emeralds, and they're shards, are to not be used by anyone. No character comes pre-equipped with any sort of Emerald, and the only time you will be coming face to face with the Emeralds are during global events in the main storylines run by me, and that doesn't mean your character 'gets' them. It just means they will be used and that your group may or may not be in possession of them.
Number two, which is actually a worse offense than number one, but I explain in quite a few areas that most kinds of super forms and anything dealing with the Chaos Emeralds and your characters being affected and such is frowned upon. But I digress. Your character's backstory has absolutely no mention of how he learned any kind of ninjutsu. Not to mention raising himself is so highly unlikely that it leaves millions of questions with no good answers outside of 'because I said so'. The most prominent being, of course, is how he learned ninjutsu, how he learned to manipulate the elements and his bloody shadow to attack.
Number three, and it's more backstory issues, is how the hell he learned to speak languages. He raised himself in nature, you claim, so voice would be useless to him. Plus by raising himself he would not be civil and well mannered - he'd be savage. Just look up nature vs. nurture for more on that. Also, in raising himself, alone in nature, he would likely not have had a name for himself, and he would not have a last name at all.
Number four, mood ring eyes are lame and overdone. Eyes are expressive enough as they are - they dull when depressed, they tear up when sad, they are clear and intense when angry - adding color to the mix is unnecessary, add useless space to a post, and actually take away from the experience than add.
I know I ripped into your character pretty bad, but I'm thorough with these things. Creating an interesting character that adds to the experience is part of the fun - creating a Mary Sue with ridiculous powers and an ill-conceived backstory takes away the fun from others. If you want to discuss it further and want some help in creating a cool and interesting character, hit me up with a PM and if possible, use the Gaia IM service.
