You have an absolutely fantastic start here. I half agree with previous statements about your descriptions (only half because I like to see a lot of descriptions, but I also recognize that sometimes you only need a small description to make everything clear).

Your characters have very strong beginnings and show amazing room for development, growth and interactions. Each has a definite sense of who they are and what they doing, and you have portrayed each of them nicely to the reader.

I would suggest with the others that you reread some of the lines to find the grammer mistakes, but other than that... keep writing and you will definitely improve on your terrific work in progress.

I cannot wait for the next instalment!