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TheGoblin

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Posted: Mon Sep 20, 2004 2:48 pm

I was thinking about actually recording this song, but since I don't have a band to play in, several years of practice will be gone to waste 3nodding . So, "why not post it here?" I thought. I found no reason not to, since lyrics is also a great part of writing. And since there ain't many lyrics around, I'd like to advice you to write a few. I love reading lyrics, and to see more of them here would be awesome! Oh well, here's my lyrics for a song...

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[Verse 1]
Happy childhood friends
Separating ends
Promises that bends
Don't try your psycho crap on me!

Happy day at work
Being silly clerk
Obey that ******** jerk
There is no ******** wrong with me!

[chorus]
There is a crack
in my shell
You have no idea
Epidemic homicidal thoughts

I'm not a ******** thrall
Just wait for me to fall
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[Verse 2]
Happy marriage tales
Working with the sales
Where every other fails
Her postman ain't so innocent!

Happy living house
With my lovely spouse
A flame that cannot douse
Extinguisher is slipping out!

[chorus]

The past is fake
The present is rotten
The future is plastic
The rest is forgotten

The past is fake
The present is rotten
The future is plastic
THE REST IS FORGOTTEN!

[chorus]

Please, don't call me angsty. I'm not blaugh . Comments?

Posted: Tue Sep 21, 2004 9:33 am

I think that's very nice. I wish I could hear it being sung, then it'd have even more meaning to it! n_n

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TheGoblin

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Posted: Tue Sep 21, 2004 9:58 am

Raniya

I think that's very nice. I wish I could hear it being sung, then it'd have even more meaning to it! n_n

It's not a very "nice" song. More cruel blaugh . But yeah, I'd also like to hear it (outside of my head, that is, I got the whole song figured out)... sweatdrop

Posted: Tue Sep 21, 2004 6:15 pm

TheGoblin

There is no ******** wrong with me!

I think this line seems a little off. Do you mean there's nothing wrong with you? Or that you're never wrong? Just curious.

Other than that, it's pretty intense and I could definitely see it being performed in a metal song. Got any more lyrics?

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Posted: Wed Sep 22, 2004 8:12 am

TheGoblin

The past is fake
The present rotten
The future plastic
The rest forgotten

I really liked your song. It is very good. I could hear how it went in my head. I would defenitely like to hear it with music, but c'est la vie. I like the second part of the second verse. That was good. Very witty. As to the part I quoted, I think it would sound better if you took out the 'is's in the last three lines and just left it in the first. I took them out for you just so you could see what I mean. But all in all, it's good stuff. 3nodding

Posted: Wed Sep 22, 2004 10:27 am

serpenteyes

TheGoblin

The past is fake
The present rotten
The future plastic
The rest forgotten

I really liked your song. It is very good. I could hear how it went in my head. I would defenitely like to hear it with music, but c'est la vie. I like the second part of the second verse. That was good. Very witty. As to the part I quoted, I think it would sound better if you took out the 'is's in the last three lines and just left it in the first. I took them out for you just so you could see what I mean. But all in all, it's good stuff. 3nodding

Wow, thanks! It's so unfair when it comes to lyrics when it goes as far as actually hearing the song in your head. But then again, at least it's better then nothing 3nodding

It does give a kind of a nice tone when you remove the 'Is's, and if I ever get the chance to record it I'll definitely keep that advice in mind.

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