Heh, yeah... *note to self: Fix own mistakes before pointing out others
ninja * I did say I'm not a very good critic
lol I'm still working on him (as you may have gathered), I've also just made him taller (he was 5'6) but I'll probably end up changing it again
sweatdrop I'm not sure how tall I want him. But thanks for pointing his weight out, I'd have probably fogotten to go back and change that knowing me
rolleyes *gets distracted easily*
When I edit, it never goes in a striaght line, 'tis why I never bumped it from the second page lol as it only made sense to me and it points out what glaringly needs changing (and I was too lazy yesterday to change the history and other little details to make it fit.)
The history is being changed so disregard that completely and I am changing the cancer part (before I had it as he had to quit karate and he had a limp) but having cancer doesn't neccessarily mean he'll have lumps all over him.
I have done research on it to make it sound realistic, (or at least to me it did
lol ) I've just changed my notes recently and haven't updated the rest of it. It was first decided that he was showing the first signs of bone cancer, sore joint in his knee, swelling, so he had to quit his sports, but now I feel he should keep at it so he isn't showing signs but had tests as his family members had died from it (father, grandfather and great uncle) and it was found he had the gene so gene theorpy it is! Still need to flesh that out a bit.
Malic, yes an uncommon name,
At least it isn't a japanese name, now that would be weird I did have it pointed out to me when it was Malik that it sounds too much like a yugioh character.
rolleyes Stupid cartoons. And I actually searched on an online site for baby names and liked it so decided to change the k to a c. But see, it can't be
that uncommon if you know one person
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Your character's reasoning to want to become a bizarre, ugly freak is there, but seems a little far fetched. Bone cancer just doesn't seem to warrant doing such a thing to yourself. Try something more debilitating like stone man syndrome.
Uh, not quite getting this. He doesn't want to be a bazarre ugly freak (unless it's based on my forgetting to change his weight when I changed his height? Or you mean that I want him to be a bazaar ugly freak?) if he had a choice with what animal to become, he'd choose a black labrador.
Of course
nobody has a choice
twisted I'm not sure what you mean by 'doesn't seem to warrent doing such a thing to yourself'.
Bone cancer far fetched? More so then stone man sydrome?
lol I don't think I could portray that unique condition comfortably, also I would have to alter alot in his history and his perception on life (yes I am altering alot anyway, but it's still on the same lines) as it starts at age 10. What a horrible thing to have
sad But thanks for taking the time to look at my quest and commenting
biggrin Much appreciated!
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