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_Built_to_Offend_666

PostPosted: Mon Jul 17, 2006 1:32 pm


sorry if it sounds overdramatic or anything, but i wrote this while feeling like s**t (see my topic in the main forum if it hasn't already faded off the list onto another page). can i get feedback or something as to weither the lyrics are any good or not?



s**t IN MY MOUTH

Everything that ever meant anything to me
Gets lodged in my throat
Injected into my veins
And stabbed in my back
Everyone that ever meant anything to me
Are still laughing at the nails in my coffin
Every memory that ever meant a damn thing to me
Becomes the parent to another enemy

Trying to hard to be happy in life
Looking up is so ******** hard when you're falling down
Too worthless to even end my life
Such a piece of s**t can never truly make a sound

Is there anything in life?
Why is anyone ever happy?
What is it that I cannot see?
Was there ever a reason to be?
Why did I have to be me?
What is it that makes me still breathe?

A human stain, a lifeless mole
Just digging and digging some big hole
A lonely sting, dependent on others
I've been digging this hole to bury my druthers
For the first time in life I had put down my sheild
I actually let her tear down my cynical name
This mistake has caused my whole damn world to yeild
The whole ******** time I only have myself to blame

{
Trying to hard to be happy in life
Looking up is so ******** hard when you're falling down
Too worthless to even end my life
Such a piece of s**t can never truly make a sound

Is there anything in life?
Why is anyone ever happy?
What is it that I cannot see?
Was there ever a reason to be?
Why did I have to be me?
What is it that makes me still breathe?
} - [x2]

Angel makes you scream
The angel haunts your dreams
Perfection is the greatest flaw
Angel makes you bleed
The angel makes you see
Just how much it hurts to care

I hold out my hand and it falls apart
I hold out my naked carcass left in shards
I hold out my trust and it gets ripped apart
I hold out a roadmap that leads towards hell
I hold out a piece to a broken puzzle
I hold out the only thing keeping me alive
I hold out a leash and my social muzzle
I hold out the truth that's always been a lie

None of it ever mattered
Just like a number too small to exist
Nothing I did ever mattered
Because everything in life has the same ending

{
Trying to hard to be happy in life
Looking up is so ******** hard when you're falling down
Too worthless to even end my life
Such a piece of s**t can never truly make a sound

Is there anything in life?
Why is anyone ever happy?
What is it that I cannot see?
Was there ever a reason to be?
Why did I have to be me?
What is it that makes me still breathe?
} - [x2]

Angel makes you scream
The angel haunts your dreams
Perfection is the greatest flaw
Angel makes you bleed
The angel makes you see
Just how much it burns to care

Just how much it stings to care

{
What lets even one child laugh?
What lets someone ever smile?
How do people become loved by another?
What is it that I do not see?
} - [x4]
PostPosted: Fri Jul 21, 2006 10:31 am


do i take it from the silence that my song sucks? if that is the case could someone tell me what they didn't like about it?

_Built_to_Offend_666


Alex_nightmare

PostPosted: Sat Jul 22, 2006 4:02 pm


i like it, it's very deep and i can relate to it.
PostPosted: Sun Jul 23, 2006 11:12 pm


I love it.
I like mostly everything.
Too much to point out.
So i'll just say everything.
And i understand the song.
so i think it's pretty groovy

Thida Fxcking Tragedy++

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