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Imperfect is a story that I made up a while ago I hope you enjoy and also...
please dont shove me down ten feet under the ground in other words.
Plez dont be harsh...

Imperfect

There once was a girl in a perfect little town in a perfect house. She had perfect parents,
And above all she was perfect. She had everything. But a pet. For long she had begged her
perfect parents to get her a pet. But to no avail she was sent in here perfect room on her
perfect bed and cried. This happen for amount of weeks until the perfect parents gave in.
They ordered a puppy that they had never seen. The perfect little girl was happy again she
would have the perfect puppy. She got prepared for her perfect puppy. She had the perfect
doggy bed, the perfect dog collar and the perfect dog name “perfect."
There was a perfect triple knock at the perfect wooden door.
The little perfect girl ran down the stairs and opened the door a perfect gentle men held a
perfect wooden crate. He handed it to the girl and she signed her name perfectly on the
dotted line.
She took the crate up to her perfect room and closed her perfect door.
She opened the crate and walked out was a small.
imperfect puppy.
The puppy was ragged and dirty it wasn't cute it only had three legs and an imperfect stub
of a tail.
She turned away from it and walked downstairs to her parents.
She told them of how this dog wasn't perfect.
They didn't listen and told her to go play with him.
She took his leash and led him outside. All the perfect kids laughed at her imperfect
puppy.
The puppy smiled as they laughed.
Finally the little girl took the puppy to the train tracks there was an old tree she tied the
puppy to the tree.
The puppy barked and pleaded for her to come back she walked across the train track and
suddenly got her foot stuck under the heavy board.
I dog barked frantically at the train coming.
She tried to free her foot but it just got more and more stuck then The perfect little girl
passed out.
The next thing she knew she woke up in a perfect hospital.
The imperfect dog laid on her stomach.
her parents sprung to her side and told her every thing.
The dog kept barking until a neighbor came and told us.
she looked at her leg and it was gone.
The imperfect little pup did not look that imperfect anymore he was a hero.
And so he was named perfect.
both the girl and the pup were imperfect together.
they both were happy until the end of both there days.
we all are imperfect it just takes a while for you to see it.
the end.

endind was a little upsetting to some people its just some people dont get the meaning of the story.
Please dont be harsh...
its a very moderate short story

Well, putting aside my nitpickyness for grammar and formatting. It's not a bad story. It has an interesting moral. It seems like the kind of thing you see being sent around in e-mails. But that's just with the inner editor in me being put aside.

It is a really good story. You know it would make a great childrens book. You can make a lot of money being a children's book author. Good Job. I love the moral.
~Karen~