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Agent Starfury

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Posted: Sun Jun 11, 2006 12:35 am

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Posted: Sat Jun 17, 2006 12:13 pm

awesome next time try rhyming

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Agent Starfury

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Posted: Mon Jun 19, 2006 2:41 am

gee, thanks. but i do free-verse. i occasionally do poems that rhyme though. and this one rhymed a bit.. sweatdrop or, at least, it was supposed to..

Posted: Wed Jun 21, 2006 12:24 pm

i liked it a lot! and it doesn't matter that it didn't rhyme. it was still pretty good!

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Agent Starfury

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Posted: Fri Jun 23, 2006 2:43 am

thanks! heart

Posted: Sat Jun 24, 2006 2:51 pm

I really liked it. heart

Screw rhyming. Real poems are free-verse, darng it!

I love the imagry and the over-all feel of the poem. Very dark. ^.^

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AlexandraAnn

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Posted: Mon Jun 26, 2006 3:16 pm

I like it a lot, keep up the good work. biggrin heart

Posted: Sun Jul 02, 2006 9:27 pm

gamesrule95

awesome next time try rhyming

I disagree with this statement xp Not all poems rhyme, and I think that if it isn't in your style to rhyme, forcing them would be awkward 3nodding

I do, however, think that you should slim it up and cut out the unneccessary words. For example, the "tortured soul" in your first stanza could just be "soul", that way you can help the poem to roll off the tounge better

I thought that you had an excellent story, and I think that you are a great writer! Great job and keep up the good work! domokun

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Larele

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Posted: Fri Jul 28, 2006 3:20 pm

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gamesrule95

awesome next time try rhyming

I disagree with this statement xp Not all poems rhyme, and I think that if it isn't in your style to rhyme, forcing them would be awkward 3nodding

I do, however, think that you should slim it up and cut out the unneccessary words. For example, the "tortured soul" in your first stanza could just be "soul", that way you can help the poem to roll off the tounge better

I thought that you had an excellent story, and I think that you are a great writer! Great job and keep up the good work! domokun

Agrees with above^ There's many types: Sonnets, Ballads, Haiku's ect. Not all ryhme or follow the same scheme.

Posted: Fri Jul 28, 2006 3:22 pm

Beautiful, deep words.. I like it!

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