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 Posted: Thu Jun 08, 2006 7:50 pm
This isn't one of my better poems, but I still like it for some reason.
The world is a scary place.
So many darks alleys,
nothing to light the way.
It seems everyone's against you,
They're pushing you towards what seems like your doom,
You fight, but there's nothing you can do,
farther and farther into the dark you go,
but one single light shines,
and you realize that
the light was there all along,
You just refused to see it.
So towards it you go,
thinking here comes the happiness.
But the light dims,
the closer you get the more it fades.
It seems as if its always out of your grasp.
Finally, you give up,
you fall to your knees,
wallowing in self-pity and sadness.
You remind yourself that times are dark,
That it was just an illusion,
made up by your mind.
And once more,
you refuse to see the unseen....
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Posted: Fri Jun 09, 2006 11:36 am
Now that I like. I felt it all the way. *kudos* heart
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Posted: Fri Jun 30, 2006 10:01 am
Wow, that was awesome! That was probably the best poem I've read on here. Congrats on a well-written piece.
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Posted: Fri Jun 30, 2006 6:26 pm
Brava! C'est magnifique!!! Really, it was wonderfully well written. Maybe it's just my interpretation of it, but, refreshingly, it seems to have a glimmer of hope put in at the end. Again, that may not be what you meant, but everyone is going to take something different from it. Refusing to see the unseen...to me it implies that there is something there. I dunno, It's late, I'm sleepy, I'm rambling. You probably meant something completely different.
Pay no attention to the girl behind the curtain (of drowsiness).
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Posted: Sat Jul 01, 2006 12:58 pm
^^ I love it!! 'Tis well-composed.
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