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I wrote a poem how is it...?

Instant Deviant

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Posted: Sat Jun 03, 2006 7:04 am

This is one of my poems its in a book you may have seen it....maybe not!

Lifes Meaning

What is life,
Do we live to live or live for destiny,
Life is like a flower,
It starts at a seed,
Then it blossom's,
Opens itself to the world,
And eventually withers up and dies,
As will everything as will I,
But I can not know these things,
So I will wait now and forever,
For lifes meaning,
Its destiny... or not.

Posted: Sun Jun 04, 2006 12:19 am

I think it's rather pretty. I like it. My only quarrel with it is that blossoms is spelled wrong and there are a few "I's" that need to be capitalized in the 9th and 10th line

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Posted: Sun Jun 04, 2006 3:01 am

it is quiet wonderful.

Posted: Mon Jun 05, 2006 8:53 am

This poem seems rather generic. (I do hate being such a hard critic, but it is obvious, at least to me) Yes, it is a deep thought that might cross one's mind from time to time- the reasons behind why we breath or follow the paths of fate. I just can't see the fire behind your words.

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Posted: Wed Jun 28, 2006 5:37 pm

I also see lack of inspiration man. Sorry but I didn't really like it. It seemed to say what I've herd many times over, without giving new information, or meaning. Sorry

Posted: Fri Jun 30, 2006 9:47 am

It's good, but it just doesn't really get to me. Still, a well-written piece.

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