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 Posted: Sat Mar 19, 2005 12:49 pm
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Posted: Sat Mar 19, 2005 12:50 pm
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Posted: Sun Mar 20, 2005 2:06 pm
Bandit, have you written more of your story or is it still in progress?
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Posted: Mon Mar 21, 2005 10:50 am
ConsusLata Bandit, have you written more of your story or is it still in progress? I wrote a little bit more but not too much. I'll post it if you want but it will be better if you give me a little time.
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Posted: Mon Mar 21, 2005 10:55 am
Please give me your comments. ^_^
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Posted: Mon Mar 21, 2005 1:42 pm
Bandit, I am going to be completely honest. First of all, I would highly recommend that you ask a friend or two to edit what you have written so far. Also, depending on exactly where you are taking this story it may be very clicheic. That entirely depends upon what you write next. Other than that the composition is good but could be refined.
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Posted: Wed Mar 23, 2005 2:42 pm
ConsusLata Bandit, I am going to be completely honest. First of all, I would highly recommend that you ask a friend or two to edit what you have written so far. Also, depending on exactly where you are taking this story it may be very clicheic. That entirely depends upon what you write next. Other than that the composition is good but could be refined. It isn't my fault Gaia messed up my indentions... that WAS the editing problem right? I have a lot of time to work on it now that my leg is broken.
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Posted: Wed Mar 23, 2005 5:38 pm
Banditman.EXE ConsusLata Bandit, I am going to be completely honest. First of all, I would highly recommend that you ask a friend or two to edit what you have written so far. Also, depending on exactly where you are taking this story it may be very clicheic. That entirely depends upon what you write next. Other than that the composition is good but could be refined. It isn't my fault Gaia messed up my indentions... that WAS the editing problem right? I have a lot of time to work on it now that my leg is broken. Well I was referring mostly to grammar usage, word choice, sentence structure, and the like.
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Posted: Wed Mar 23, 2005 7:35 pm
ConsusLata Banditman.EXE ConsusLata Bandit, I am going to be completely honest. First of all, I would highly recommend that you ask a friend or two to edit what you have written so far. Also, depending on exactly where you are taking this story it may be very clicheic. That entirely depends upon what you write next. Other than that the composition is good but could be refined. It isn't my fault Gaia messed up my indentions... that WAS the editing problem right? I have a lot of time to work on it now that my leg is broken. Well I was referring mostly to grammar usage, word choice, sentence structure, and the like. I see. Whats the matter with my grammer?
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Posted: Wed Mar 23, 2005 7:36 pm
Banditman.EXE ConsusLata Banditman.EXE ConsusLata Bandit, I am going to be completely honest. First of all, I would highly recommend that you ask a friend or two to edit what you have written so far. Also, depending on exactly where you are taking this story it may be very clicheic. That entirely depends upon what you write next. Other than that the composition is good but could be refined. It isn't my fault Gaia messed up my indentions... that WAS the editing problem right? I have a lot of time to work on it now that my leg is broken. Well I was referring mostly to grammar usage, word choice, sentence structure, and the like. I see. Whats the matter with my grammer? I will attempt to edit it for you and send it to you if you like
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Posted: Wed Mar 23, 2005 7:39 pm
ConsusLata Banditman.EXE ConsusLata Banditman.EXE ConsusLata Bandit, I am going to be completely honest. First of all, I would highly recommend that you ask a friend or two to edit what you have written so far. Also, depending on exactly where you are taking this story it may be very clicheic. That entirely depends upon what you write next. Other than that the composition is good but could be refined. It isn't my fault Gaia messed up my indentions... that WAS the editing problem right? I have a lot of time to work on it now that my leg is broken. Well I was referring mostly to grammar usage, word choice, sentence structure, and the like. I see. Whats the matter with my grammer? I will attempt to edit it for you and send it to you if you like K, I probably messed up around what people said... that's where I tend to mess up.
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