Otakkun
It was decent, but I wish (for my brain, at least) that you would have went back and changed the ' " notes back from the question mark that kept appearing ^_^
also, a writing pet peeve of mine is the "would of" thing...it is "would have" ^_^
Other than that, it was very good...short and sweet, and to the point. Some people would have unneccesarily dragged that on forever, but you were really good with timing. The only short thing about it was the experiment part at the end...and it couldn't be any other way ^_^
Oh, and to reply to the "continue it" posts...I don't think that you should, at least not for a while, because you will never like it as much as the original
3nodding domokun Thank you!! eheh... Yeah.. The little Question mark things Are beginning to bother me, they just show up... I really don't know why, and I'm really not on enough to check this everyday and fix them up... *sigh* so sorry about hurting your mind... as for... the would of thing, that makes you sound like my brother, lol It's how I talk, It's how I write... I suck at grammer^
sweatdrop Anyhow... Thank you Much! ^.^' I don't write alot but when I do I normally never finish my stuff, because I'm one of those people that tend to drag things on and on and on... Your Comment told me what I had to work on (Grammer xD) and all that good stuff, and I really appreciate it because other people just said... "Oh good job" But I like being Critiqued... unless it's just random crap that the person personally doesn't like about my writing *shrugs* anyhow, thanks again...
My response to the Continue posts... Is I might Make Welcome home the Prologue of a longer story, but more than likely, that longer story will never be read, because I'll never finish it *shrugs*
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