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 Posted: Sat May 06, 2006 6:18 pm
Here is a poem I made. I am quite proud of it.. I've been writing for about three or four weeks now, I think... Anyway, please tell me what you think! n.n;
Want grows, high and low, when I think of you.
Desire is seeded, fulfillment is needed, needed from my boo.
The more I want, the more it taunts, saying that I must wait,
but, the more I wait, the more time it takes, so I curse this terrible fate.
The thoughts arrive, and the part will rise, revealing my aching need,
the need to show you how much I love you in a way only lovers can see.
Through hours of passion, while our bodies are clashing, the flood
gates will soon open,
and we lay there together, love made for forever, both spent, exhausted,
and soakin'.
((Do NOT take the gold from the poll if you do not comment!!))
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Posted: Sun May 14, 2006 10:59 am
I think it's good and easy to understand. I like nice simple things so ya...good job
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Posted: Thu Jun 08, 2006 5:25 pm
very nice ^^. Simple yet deep. Good job~ lol...i like how you rhymed 'You' with 'Boo' XD
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Posted: Sun Jun 11, 2006 10:39 am
One of the poll choices was soemthing about you being a beginner. If you are, that's really good! It's simple, but not in a way that you can get the full meaning in the first line...If that makes any sense at all..... sweatdrop Good, good! (Don't let me confuse you.)
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Posted: Sun Jul 16, 2006 4:46 pm
I like it, its very nice and well written, the feelings are clear.
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