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 Posted: Thu Apr 13, 2006 4:51 pm
ok the other day i wrote some stories and i would like to share one of them.....
Once, in a quiet old town, the police caught a man beside an old house. The lights on their car shown, flashing blue and red upon the house and in the windows. A glass door faced them, letting anyone look on in the house, but only so much. When the police got out of their car, one of the mens' eyes strayed to the door. The light shown blue and he though he saw the image of a young girl leaning her right hand on the window and looking on them. He looked away just as fast, not realizing what he saw till he looked away. He looked back, but the light flashed red this time and no one was there. The other policeman looked at the door, wondering what the other was looking at. The blue light shone as he did so and he saw the girl, her skin a pale blue in the light, her dark hair resting on her shoulders. Her eyes seemingly looking through him, he blinked his eyes and she was gone instantly. They arrested the man in charge of murder and left for the night. The next day they stopped by the house and knocked on the door. A couple answered, they were around their 70's and the policemen asked them, "would you to be housing a young girl?" they both shook their heads for they never had children. They let the policemen in the house and they all went to the door, nothing seemed wrong with it, but then the first policeman put his hand on the glass, and took it off instantly, his hand stung as though it had been immediately frozen. The glass grew frost all over except where the girl's hand was the night before. In court the man arrested was also asked about the girl, he was charged with killing a family that was in another completely different area and the girl he described as being the last one he killed matched the description of the girl in the window.
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Posted: Sat Apr 15, 2006 9:03 am
Write more about her. I'm really interested! I'm curious about her. Very nice.
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Posted: Sat Apr 15, 2006 11:37 am
lol, thanks i'll see what i can do, i've been writing other stories as well. sweatdrop
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Posted: Sat Apr 22, 2006 9:13 am
It's okay, but needs a little more body and depth.
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Posted: Tue Apr 25, 2006 3:39 pm
it was a short story so there isn't much depth to it sweatdrop
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Posted: Fri May 12, 2006 7:44 pm
Ohh... Thats neat... ^.^' *points to her siggy?* Pleaseness?
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Posted: Thu May 25, 2006 10:08 am
Vera_Clindyle Ohh... Thats neat... ^.^' *points to her siggy?* Pleaseness?
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Posted: Fri May 26, 2006 10:50 am
That was really good. heart
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Posted: Wed Jun 21, 2006 9:44 am
i liked it, and just like everyone else, can we have more? i'm curious about the girl.
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Posted: Wed Jun 21, 2006 11:16 am
moree!!!
I wish i could write like that! I'm useless as writing what i mean.
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