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 Posted: Fri Apr 07, 2006 4:54 pm
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Posted: Fri Apr 07, 2006 5:20 pm
Don't capitalize every line like you have here. Only capitalize proper nouns and the beginnings of sentences; otherwise, people get confused.
Otherwise, I want more setting to the scene. This is short and to the point, yes, but a sexual poem like this should probably be drawn out and suspenseful- or was there a line count limit?
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Posted: Fri Apr 07, 2006 5:21 pm
I have issues making things long. The part of my brain that goes "STOP BEFORE YOU RUIN IT, IDIOT!" is very, very loud.
Also, didn't mean to capitalize everything. Silly computers "fixing" things. Grrrrr.
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Posted: Fri Apr 07, 2006 5:23 pm
Did you write it in Word?
Use Notepad. Much more efficient, I think.
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Posted: Fri Apr 07, 2006 5:36 pm
LaverneTerres Did you write it in Word? Use Notepad. Much more efficient, I think. Open Office Writer.
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Posted: Fri Apr 07, 2006 5:56 pm
The Lovely Miss M. LaverneTerres Did you write it in Word? Use Notepad. Much more efficient, I think. Open Office Writer. Right, so, moving on cause I don'tknowwhatthehellthatis.
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