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★ General Information
Name: Conri Name Meaning:Means "wolf king" in Irish Gaelic. Edit Level: Unedited Wolf Species: Dire Gender: Male Starting Stage: Puppy 16 Weeks Old (3 1/2 months old) Cosplay?: No WIP Request: No
Body Coloration/Markings: Red base || Dark Grey Inner Ears Face Coloration/Markings: White Under-Muzzle || White Upper Forehead Spot Eye Colors: Silver || Dark Grey Pupil Nose/Pad Color: Dark Grey Leg Coloration/Markings: Dark Grey Socks Tail Coloration/Markings: White Tip References Images:
• History Part I – The Beginning: Conri had a pack when he was first born, he was constantly with his den mother, and never left her side, as he grew older though his den mother weaned him off of her he was about 12 Weeks (3 months) old when she had weaned him off. The pack often hunted, and would bring back plenty of food for every member to be full and satisfied once the meal was brought back to the den. Conri had just grown into 16 weeks ( 3 1/2 months old) when he had been joining the pack learning how to hunt from the others. One morning it had appeared his pack had scattered, and found themselves, as such Conri was left behind in the den. For a few days Conri whimpered often due to missing his den mother, and fellow pack, at night time he would try to howl as loud as he could in hopes they would hear his cries, and yet none returned.
Part II – Predator encounter : Conri soon realized that night after night, with none of his pack returning, he was going to have to leave the den to try to fend for himself, he was becoming hungry, and would need to eat to survive. He paced the entrance of the den, when just outside the entrance a rustling sound was heard, his ears perked up, and he trotted towards the den's entrance. When he approached the entrance way he lowered himself to the ground and in a stalking manner as if though he were on a hunt he crept up to the entrance, and looked around the left sides opening which is where the sound had come from. He started to shake, and tremble as he soon realized someone heard his cries out into the night, but it was not who he anticipated would have heard it. Standing with its nose to the ground was a full sized adult male dire wolf that looked feral. it was skinny so it was definitely looking for food. Quietly Conri backed slowly into the den trying not to make a sound, when his footing accidentally kicked a small pebble which caused the pebble to roll down a slope in the den, suddenly the Adult Male Dire wolf snapped its head towards the sound of the pebble and Conri could see the massive teeth that the older wolf had, Suddenly Conri realized he was spotted, and as the older male wolf leapt at him with snapping drooling jaws, Conri jumped off the right walls edge, as the adult male dire wolf leapt in for the kill, Conri had no choice it was now or never he had to leave before he became this predator's midnight snack.
Part III – Coming of Passage: Conri mustered up the courage then left his home den to venture out into what was left of the lands. He was given no chance to glance back at the empty den, before he started to take off going north of it hoping that along with his journey he would successfully hunt and scavenge food for himself. Once he had felt he gained more then enough distance of ground between him, and his first non-pack member adult male encounter he had to take off in that case since the den had only one entrance, he made note of this so that in the future where he chooses to live in a pack, or if he decided to make his own pack he would make sure that there was a den with various exit points. Thus if the pack was out hunting the future pups would have a place to escape, and could hide them selves in the surrounding area of the exit routes. That should allow ample time for the Adult pack to arrive and fend off the predator.
Part IV – Survival of the fittest: It had been several days from the predator encounter, and since Conri had hunted, he was able to scavenge off some meat from a carcass that must have been left by a previous packs hunt.
Still hungry though he decided he would attempt to hunt something on his own. He spotted an injured fawn in the clearing, and since he was by himself he watched the fawn, looking and observing his surroundings.
Usually hunting had more then one pack member to help take down the meal for the day. In this case, there was only Conri by himself. Noticing that the deer did not hear his approach he noticed a boulder he could get to and would be able to catch his prey easily by jumping down onto the fawn and getting an easy meal.
Conri went up the slope of the boulder the fawn had not seemed to notice any of his movements, and with great success, Conris plan was executed perfectly he had successfully hunted on his own his first prey, and the meal would keep him full for quite some time.
It seemed Conri was adapting well on his own, and growing at a rapid rate time seemed to fly by, and he was coming into the 52 Weeks (1 year) of age. He was eager to share what his pack had taught him before their unexplained disappearance. It was time he started to look for his beta. he was longing for a mate it was as if it was his time to settle down, and from his pack now, he had what his original pack taught him, and the hunting skills he developed from having to solo hunt over this past year. It was beginning to become colder it seemed, and the coat he had was beginning to thicken. He would have to find a den to stay in for the winter before finding his beta.
• Plots:
Part III – Future Encounters:
Come Spring Conri would be off looking to start his new pack.
Conri is going to be a chaotic neutral pack leader he plans to find a mate, and to produce several litters of pups Conri will establish rankings of his pack members, and for any new coming wolf who may tress-pass.
Conri may be chaotic neutral pack leader, but he is caring, and as such on a case by case basis, he will be blunt, and either allow or deny access to any potential new pack members.
Conri as a pack leader the Alpha will be outspoken and will make sure that his pack abides by the laws he has laid in place since it is for the safety of not only himself, his beta mate, their offspring but the entirety of the whole pack's well being.
As the alpha Conri will always be the first on the battle ground, and the last to leave he will not back down from anything nothing will stop him from protecting that which is in his pack.
Conri since his first predator encounter determined that he will always put his pack's safety first, and nothing will place them in jeopardy, he will never be alone again, and his pack will never have to face a foe like that Feral Dire Adult Male Wolf from the night he did.
He may have narrowly escaped, but he was able to scavenge and hunt smaller things successfully so he survived that encounter learning that being a lone wolf would not cut it in the world, so he would make sure his pack was strong and large.
From what he had learned from his first pack, his predator encounter, the solo hunts, he would surely make a great alpha for his pack. He would undoubtedly be the Wolf King.
Posted: Tue Aug 01, 2017 7:56 pm
Glad to see you've fleshed everything out a bit!
• Once again, bullet points are not acceptable as a form of description of personality. We ask that you take the time to describe each facet of his personality. If you plan to keep the bullet points as major personality traits, that's fine, but elaborate how they affect the character. How does he become fearless, if in his first few months of life, he was abandoned, cried, and hid in a cave? An observant wolf would be one who grew up wise to the world; this makes sense with his given history. However, why does he become outspoken, and does he have any points of view that he feels vehement about?
• Why did the family scatter? Were they running from something? Were there other pups that were abandoned, as well, that simply died, or was he the only one? If that were the case, why was Conri the only one left behind?
• Personally, I'm skeptical of a 4-month-old puppy surviving the cold, harsh and long winter that Elys'raena experiences. It gets VERY cold, very quickly. Tell us more about HOW he survived. How did he avoid becoming prey, himself? How did he maneuver through pack territories without crossing paths with any members and possibly being killed for trespassing, or for simply being a male of unrelated blood? If he wasn't that young when winter hit, how old was he and he did he learn to survive when the pickings were thin even for well-established packs who could go weeks without a successful hunt?
• One year is a bit young to be thinking about a mate! Most wolves don't reach sexual maturity until 2 or 3 years. ;') These would be fine if you were questing him as an adult, but he's being quested as a puppy. Remember that he is still a young wolf, and will be regarded as such by most older wolves. Any young females his age aren't going to be thinking about litters for quite a few years.
• While we understand that you are anxious to make a pack, it should not be his sole driving force. He is going to have to live on his own, survive on his own, and convince others to travel with him and stay with him for long enough that they can find a place to make their own. Consider other plots and story arcs, as well.
Final note; we'd like you to take some more time and really think about how all of this fits together. At the moment, it's reading like paragraphs from a book, but there are chapters and pages missing. Please give it one week of tweaking, rewriting, editing and whatever else you feel necessary to make him feel more cohesive before you resubmit for approval :')
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Posted: Thu Aug 03, 2017 12:24 am
Requesting Archive Conri needs full revamp, and is not yet prepared properly for questing.
