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Fenava

Mystical Hunter

PostPosted: Sun Jan 29, 2017 9:15 pm


Name: Arveildir Suojelija

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Dragon form:
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Angel form:
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Age: 5,000


Gender: Male


Eye Color: Red


Hair Color: Blue


Height: 6' 10"


Weight: 210 lb


Sexuality: Straight


Voice:


Scars, Markings, or Accessories: He got scars from his previous battles and wars he been in. Dragon Tattoo on his right shoulder and a Angel tattoo on his left shoulder.


Race: a hybrid of Angel and Dragon.


Bio: You could say his life was a living hell, his teacher was merciless on him. Because he thought that Arv's angel side would make him soft and weak. Arv proved him wrong time and time again, everytime he got cut or broken bones, he got back up and continued until he couldn't move at all. He even been tortured by the teacher, incase he was captured while fighting in a battle or war. He fought in many wars, regardless if he wanted to or not. He travelled around like Yojimbo. People try to fight him the bounties placed on him from mutiple kingdoms for crimes he didn't commit, but in the vicinity of ex. blackmailing corupted council men and high ranking people, murder, arson, and vandilism. So in response he trys to help people and clear his name with the latest monarchs and he trys to help them prevent wars. He trys to avoid violence, but it never works out.


Personality: He is kind enough to give people his clothes, food, water, and money. But he will kill in a second if he has to. If he sets his mind to something, he will not stop until it's completed it doesn't matter how it is completed. He uses his manner, when he is around woman. He will try to protect and save every one, he cares about. He is cautious when talking to someone, in case they want the bounties on him. He trys not to use his weapons.


Family: Kuolema Suojelija and Enkeli Suojelija (sons)


Likes (At least 3)
- Ladies
- Gentlemen
- Respectful people
- Helping people

Dislikes (At least 3)
- Disrespectful people
- Jerks
- People who attack and fight for no good reason
- People who want his outrageous bounties

Occupation: A wandering mercenary, Duke of the Fire and Light kingoms


Loyalty towards: Gods


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Powers: Inherited
Dragon aspects-
Scales, wings, and tail manifestation: he can change his skin into scales, grow wings and a tail

Atmospheric adaptation- The user’s lungs acclimatize and breathe in/on any gaseous mediums, whether hostile or deficient, users lungs also filter away non-gaseous substances such as dust, asbestos, etc. They can breathe toxic gases instead of oxygen and survive mountain, aerial, or terrene air deficiency (it takes a while for it to kick in).

Temperature immunity- User is immune only to the temperature, (what causes fire and lava to burn items is heat) not other effects, so falling debris, slippery ground, etc. are problem.


Angel Aspects-

Weapon manipulation- User can create weapons by shaping the existing matter or energy, they are capable of creating any weapon their familiar with. Depending on what the weapon is made of, it can posses a variety of abilities and be very effective in both offensive and defensive combat.

Power anchoring- His powers notably cannot be absorbed, erased, changed, copied, etc. Existing powers can strengthened, but only through the user's own abilities



Rare
Holy fire- he can create, shape and manipulate holy flames, it can clense corupted and/or possessed people but they have to willingly agree. Which are especially effective against demons and other evil beings. It may also trap and/or immobilize angels or demons, rather than killing them.

Weapon of choice:
Angel's tears

Dia's Wraith

Jumalatar suojaus

Strengths: (At least 3)
- powers
- bladed weapon fighting
- endurance
- medical experience


Weaknesses: (At least 3)
- blunt weapon fighting
- not good fighting with others
- usually doesn't plan

Fighting Style:
He either disable or kill his enemies.

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Theme: I will not bow

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PostPosted: Wed Feb 01, 2017 6:30 pm


Moonflower_Dragoness


Let me know if I have to chane any thing.

Fenava

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PostPosted: Wed Feb 01, 2017 6:36 pm


Fenava
Moonflower_Dragoness


Let me know if I have to chane any thing.


While I am reading this could you please send me a past Role Playing sample or a RP with your character about a paragraph and half to two in a PM. Please and Thank you. A crew member may also come on here and give you editing/approval advice on your profile too.
PostPosted: Wed Feb 01, 2017 6:49 pm


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Cons: You need to re-write your backstory and add more to it. It's bland and does not really make him stand out as a character. Same with the personality. Add more likes and dislikes as well. Also, a "grim-reaping angel-dragon duke mercenary" reeks of OP. Scale it back by a few adjectives.

Not feeling fear or anxiety makes him a rather shallow and one-dimensional character with zero interesting qualities.
Also: The grim reaper abilities have to go. They're insanely OP and do not have a place.

Additional Comments: You need to scale back the Gary-Stu.


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Fenava

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PostPosted: Sun May 07, 2017 12:38 am


Moonflower_Dragoness


I hope this is better, also gave him a rare ability and if it's op I understand.
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