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Posted: Wed Jul 22, 2015 3:57 pm

Name: Ammun

Nicknames: Mun

Breed: Egyptian Mau

Attached to: Andrew 'Drew' Bones / Sailor Etamin

Alignment: Order

Blood Type: AB+

Fav. Food: Shrimp, Sushi

Hated Food: Peanut Butter

Hobbies:

Watching Over Drew: Drew saved Mun's life. Now it's Mun's turn. He may just be a small kitten, but he knows not to judge a cat by their size. He would do anything for Drew, and in some small deep way, considers him his father. When Drew first found Mun, his parents only gave permission for Drew to nurse the kitten back to health, then the kitten would have to be put up for adoption. By the time, came for Mun to go, the two were deeply bonded, and Mun refused to leave Drew. Thankfully, a Civilian counselor of Drew's, announced that the breaking of their bond would be detrimental to both and that keeping them together would help them help them both heal from their internal wounds . Drew was allowed to keep Mun. Some times Mun doesn't just watch over Drew, he watches him. He loves to what Drew is doing and sometimes try it for himself. This brings a lot of joy to the both of them.

Nega-Hunting: Mun loves fetch, especially with Negas. It's his favorite game. If he sniffs a nega, he won't leave the trail until he tracks down the Nega that he smells. What doesn't make Mun very happy, is that he can't exactly 'Fetch' the Nega. Instead, he has to note the location and description of the Nega and return ASAP to his bonded order members. After that, he has to rely his on bonded members to take the Negas down.

Virtues:

True Friendship: Mun is grouchy, yes. He can be rude and crude. And yes, most of the time, he has a hard time having hope for humanity. However cranky that Ammun is though, he always knows that his Order friends are true, loyal and pure hearted. He trusts in their friendship - and he knows they trust in him, knowing the grouchiness is only from the pain brought upon by others and not meant for them. He doesn't make friends easily, but when a friendship is made, it is made for life.

Kindness: Mun would be embarrassed if anyone knew, but he has a good heart. Mun complains about everything and everyone; from the rich man to the poor man - especially the poor man. However, the poor man's children might get a second glance, when no one is watching, as well as food, clothing and toys. According to Mun, he doesn't know who donated the stuff, but he might know a little more than he lets on.

Flaws:

Cranky (All The Time): So a little history first; Drew found Mun, in an alleyway, a few months ago, unawakened, hurt badly, starving, dehydrated, and afraid of human touch. Needless to say, he has a grouchy personality even for the equivelent of a 6 or 7 old, to everyone all the time. He can be rude (because of his temper), he can be crude (because he's only a little boy). He is even grumpy with Drew who saved him, and who he considers his adopted father, even though he loves him dearly. He is cranky, because in a way his childhood innocence was stolen far too soon from him.

Contrary (to Most people): If this cat doesn't have a deep bond of friendship with you, be warned. Mun will go out of his way to irritate you. It's almost fun in a way, and somewhat misplaced revenge. Only those he truely respects will be obeyed, and those are very rare. Drew's mom once requested that he remove himself from her side of Drew's parents' bed (she's allergic to cats). Ammun got up, stretched, walked causally over to the center of the bed, and planted himself there. Only after a long private chat with Drew, did he remove himself, and agree not to lay there again.

Challenge: "In the name of Ra, we'll defeat y'all!"

PHYSICAL DESCRIPTION : CAT FORM

Face/Ears: M shape on forehead. Tiny, pink mouth mostly covered by the fur. Fur grey above mouth (slight line of pink for mouth) and below mouth is white. There's a little pink triangle just above the mouth, someone might think to call the nose, even though it's pulled in a little. Mascara - like lines on cheeks (actually in the article). Ears grey on outside, pink on inside. Furry, but not long fur.

Body: Mun is small kitten. It's not that Drew isn't taking good care of him; Drew found him hurt and starving in the street. He took him to the best care he could, and did his best to take of him. However, Mun's time being hurt, starving and alone, so young, left scars that will remain for ever (I mean spiritual and that his full size will always be smaller than others).

Fur: Purple forehead Star. Short Fur. Black fur with darker black spots.

Eyes:Light Green

Accessories: A bandana on the neck - white with a black Eye of Ra on it.

PHYSICAL DESCRIPTION : HUMAN FORM

Eyes: Light Green, Oval

Hair: Black dredlocks to chin-length

Face: Round face, no freckles, thin face, Middle Eastern/North African skin tone, small mouth, small nose

Clothes: Egyptian Sandials, Golden Armbands, Egyptian Loincoth thingy.

Posted: Mon Aug 03, 2015 1:19 pm

Sailor Hawk

Hey, Hawk! I have some comments on Mun so that we can get him up to stampability!

First, in the "Watching over Drew" hobby, you mention two background NPCs (a counselor and a vet) who are powered -- unfortunately this is not okay! If you'd like to have this happen, you would have to find PCs to plot with who have those jobs, but simply referring to random non-player characters who happen to be (presumably) Knights is not okay. It is possible, in any case, that a civilian counselor would recommend keeping the cat to improve Drew's emotional state, since animal therapy is definitely a thing!

I have concerns about his "Nega-hunting" hobby -- particularly that generally officers aren't going to let a cat just lead them around back to a Senshi? While Mun may certainly enjoy hunting and following officers, dragging them back to his Senshi seems particularly unlikely when the officer is capable of fighting back or dragging Mun in for corruption (both of which are pretty likely outcomes.)

You also reference Drew and how he thinks and feels a lot in the profile -- really this should be entirely about Mun, and how he is in general, rather than how he specifically relates to Drew, because presumably he'll be played with other characters! I just don't feel I have a lot of sense of what Mun likes to do for himself, rather than for Drew. Does he have other hobbies?

Onto his traits --

The "True Friendship" virtue is once again less descriptive of Mun and more of other characters. I think talking about how he is a very loyal cat once you get past his grumpy exterior is fine without needing to talk about specifically how he feels regarding Drew and Demitri?

"Good Heart" is reading really similarly to "True Friendship" too, and since it's almost entirely example and not a lot of trait, it's hard to judge the difference. I'd say you could make one focus on his loyalty and the other on kindness and they might feel different enough? As they are they just both seem to be a lot of "Mun has a grumpy exterior but is totally a softie on the inside" which is totally an excellent character type, I love that type, but he could use a little more to him!

I think the "Cranky" flaw looks good!

However, I'm going to have to entirely say no to "refuses to be litter-box trained" as a flaw. It's kind of unpleasant, and definitely too specific. A general "messy" or "slob" flaw would work well, if Mun doesn't like keeping clean beyond that (for instance, perhaps he knocks things over or just likes making messes) or possibly "contrary" (that he doesn't like doing things just because he's told to).

Quote or PM me and we can talk things out if you have questions or ideas!