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 Posted: Sat Jun 14, 2014 3:21 am
Hello, all! Jabber here. Over the past 5 years, I have written a little more than 40 song lyrics and I thought that this would be a good place to share them. There are two things I'm always looking for in relation to them: constructive criticism and ideas for new ones. Feel free to comment on what you did or did not like about my songs. Just please keep it constructive.
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Posted: Sat Jun 14, 2014 3:33 am
The Lonely One
I am alone
Stuck in Abyss
Never to have felt a kiss
Love has come and gone
To be the Lonely One
Is to be consumed by sorrow
I have come undone
And I see no tomorrow
Swallowed by the darkness
Mind's filled with rage
I want to sleep forever
Cause my heart's encaged
To be the Lonely One
Is to be consumed by sorrow
I have come undone
And I see no tomorrw
I have fallen, form Eros's side
And have been plunged, into Tartarus
Sent beyond the veil of light
Death has doomed us
Remembered as the Lonely One
Fills mme with sorrow
To have come undone
And have seen my last sunrise
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Posted: Mon Jun 16, 2014 3:49 pm
So Alone
Why have you deserted me
In this, the time when I have need
What am I to do now
Why is it that I can't breathe
How come there's a bullet in my heart
What am I to do now
Your hate has killed me
And destroyed all I could be
Is it life that I lack
Cause you stuck a knife in my back
I am just a pile of bones
Why am I so alone
You were my closest friend
But cause of you, now I am dead
What did I do to you
Was it cause my skin is white
Or because I was never right
But now I'll never know
Your hate has killed me
And destroyed all I could be
Is it life that I lack
Cause you stuck a knife in my back
I am just a pile of bones
Why am I so alone
You left me all alone
Why'd you leave me all alone
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Posted: Mon Jun 16, 2014 6:20 pm
I love So Alone out of the two. I can really feel the emotion coming through the song. I also love the flow of the song. What type of music is it apart of? I feel like it can be a mix of rock and classical.
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Queen_EnchantedLuck Captain
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Posted: Mon Jun 16, 2014 10:54 pm
Queen_EnchantedLuck I love So Alone out of the two. I can really feel the emotion coming through the song. I also love the flow of the song. What type of music is it apart of? I feel like it can be a mix of rock and classical. Well, thank you. Actually, I wrote it to be more of an alternative/alt metal. Something similar to what Breaking Benjamin might play. They're my biggest inspiration.
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Posted: Tue Jun 17, 2014 12:09 am
The Dark of Night
Walk in the starlight
Look to the sky
Look for my eyes
Glowing in the moonlight
I'll protect you forever
Just stay by my side
Until the end of days
I'll protect you from the dark
Back at the twilight
I showed you the world
I said I'd save you
I said I'd love you
Now look towards the dawn
It leads to better days
But now we're in the dark of night
I'll protect you forever
So please stay by my side
And until the end of days
I'll protect you from the dark
Now there's something you need to know
That even if you're not with me
I'll still protect you
From the dark of night
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Posted: Sat Jun 21, 2014 10:24 pm
All You Need
You see me, but you see nothing
I want to show you, all I could be
I'll wait, til you're ready
To see all I am
I'll fight for your attention
Til you finally see me
I hope someday you realize
That I have the potential
To be all you need
I see you, and I see a queen
I want to know what, all we could be
Will you wait, til I'm ready
To be all I am
I'll fight for your affection
Til you finally love me
I hope someday you realize
That I have the potential
(To be all you need)x2
Now that I'm getting older
I ain't what I used to be
But I'll still
Fight for your attention, affection
Til you finally see me, love me
I'm still hoping you realize
That I have the potential
To be all you need
Fight for your attention
(I'm getting older)
I'm still hoping you realize
(Ain't what I used to be)
That I have the potential
(But I'm still)
To be all you need
(All you need)
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Posted: Sat Jul 05, 2014 3:04 am
Puppet Master
Dancing on these cursed strings
Feeling all the pain they bring
I've gotta break free
I've just gotta BREAK FREE!!!
You wanna make me dance until I die
Stick my own finger in my eye
Make me serenade all your lies
You torture me despite my cries
Puppet! Master!
I've gotta break your curse
Puppet! Master!
Or you'll be calling me a hearse
Puppet! Master!
Your marrionette strings feel like a noose
Puppet! Master!
So grab the blade and cut me loose
Your pulls and jerks hurt me so
More than you could ever know
You make me writhe, you make me crawl
Someone cut the strings and watch me fall
Puppet! Master!
I've gotta break your curse
Puppet! Master!
Or you'll be calling me a hearse
Puppet! Master!
Your marrionette strings feel like a noose
Puppet! Master!
So grab the blade and cut me loose
Dancing on these cursed strings
Feeling all the pain the bring
I need to break free
Or its rest in peace for me
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Posted: Wed Jul 09, 2014 8:08 pm
Soaring Sprirt (Blast Away)
Even though, there's doom and gloom coming
My spirit soars
You can't hurt me
So blast away
You come on through like the plague
Lay waste to me every day
You can't put out the fire in me
It will always burn bright
Even though, there's doom and gloom coming
My spirit soars
You can't hurt me
So blast away
You cause me so much pain and misery
Then you say you want to cause the end of me
So you put a gun against my head
Then I say this before I'm dead
Even though, there's doom and gloom coming
My spirit soars
You can't hurt me
So blast away
You pulled the trrigger
Now my spirit will soar higher and higher
My spirit will soar
Forever and always
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