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 Posted: Sat Mar 30, 2013 5:49 pm
Full Name
Eric Grim
Nickname
Dosen't have one
Birthday
September 9
Age
17
Gender
Male
Sexuality
Straight
Height
5'9
Weight
180 lbs
Nationality
Unknown
Homeland
Death City
Accent
None
Personallity
Eric rarely shows emotion and always keeps himself in check but is more open to his twin sister Crystal. He takes speacial missions from lord Death himself and completes them in any way shape or form but sometimes gets him into trouble. Eric has a very short fuse and is unsocialable.
Personal Skill
A high tolerance for pain and a great fighter
Occupation
Errand boy for Lord Death/ student
Rank
Student
Star
2
Family
Twin sister Crystal
Mother( deceased)
Father(deceased or unkown)
Friends
Prof. Stien, The Death family
Enemies
A few people he owes debts to because of his parents
Backgorund
Eric and his sister were young when their parents were attacked by kishin in death city. Ever since they had been living on the streets and ally ways which forced Eric to be the adult between the 2 of them leaving him short temptered if his sister was endangered or threatened. A few years ago they were ambushed by 2 kishin and almost died if it wasn't for a wondering meister who killed the kishin and brought both of them to Lord Death who enrolled then into the academy and let them live there. And still do to this very day. About a year ago Prof. Stien started training Eric and Crystal personally because he saw potional in them and decided to take their training into his own hands. Eric enjoyed their special training and still gets lessons every once in a while.
Appearence
Eric wears a black over coat and has only the top half buttoned up. He has red hair and light blue eyes. He thin and quick but dispite his light frame he can if made extremly mad could still put someone in a full body cast. Eric also wear's lose fitting grey jeans and white boots. He also has a sliver pocket watch.
Partner
Crystal Grim
Soul Color
Dark Green
Clan
None
Meister Type
A Balanced between defence and attack
Abillities
Soul Shock (Eric can change his soul wave length into a paralizing attack that when used against Meisters can disrupt the resenances between a Meister and his weapon and gets feed back from the attack canceling out one of his abbilities can only be used 5 times in a fight )
Shock Trap ( Sets soul trap around him that if activated can shut down the soul of anyone canceling out any soul attacks against him downside can only stay in the circle until it is sprung or gets the same effect has a 15ft radius and can only be used 2 times in a fight )
Teleport ( Can warp anywhere and can sometimes be off target )
Hobbies
None
Flaws
Short temptered and when things get bad he put's his sisters safety over his own and hates losing.
Weakness
Head strong and sometimes will not use his head in a fight and gets predictable and sloppy.
Likes
His sister, Lord Death, and Spicy food
Dislikes
Anyone who threatens his sister, Witchs, and annoying Meisters
Theme song
Add later
Interesting facts/trivia
None
((didn't know what rank meant even after I read all the noobie stuff before and after I sent my application in so I think I fixed it a bit))
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Posted: Sat Mar 30, 2013 6:47 pm
Full name
Crystal Grim
Nickname
None
Birthday
September 9
Age
17
Gender
Female
Sexuality
Straight
Height
5'8
Weight
124 lbs
Nationality
Unknown
Homeland
Death City
Accent
None
Personality
Crystal is a complete opposiste of Eric. She is hyper and care free and also reckless and always expresses her emtions.
Personal Skills
She dabbles in cooking a bit but has no real skill
Appearence
Crystal has red hair and light blue eyes. She wears a white jacket with a black shirt underneath her jacket which is always unzipped. She has the same frame as Eric but is a little bit quicker then him.And wears red jeans and grey flat tops. Crystal also wears a pair of blue headphone's which she never takes off.
Partner
Eric Grim
Occupation
Student
Rank
Student
Classification
Normal Weapon(Almost a Death Scythe)
Family members
Twin brother Eric
Mother (Deceased)
Father(Deceased unknown)
Friends
Everyone
Enemies
None
Background
Crystal has always been cheerful even after their parents death and always had Eric's back when they got into trouble. She is a usaual A student at the acdamy and friends with everyone even though Eric had never made friends. Crystal thinks Prof. Stien is crazy considering all they ever do in class is disections and when he had started taking a special interest in their training she thought and still thinks he is creepy but can deal with him since Eric likes the training they are getting from a four star Meister.
Weapon form
Dual bladed scythe
Soul Resonance Form
Infinite Chains( Chains the enemy and their soul preventing them from moving and using abbilities in the end leaves them with out the use of their abbilities has a range of 50ft and can only be used once )
Soul Color
Dark green ( and always smiling and bounceing around uncontrollably)
Clan
None
Weapon Type
Scythe
Abbilities
Partial Weapon Transformation
Soul attack ( Can force her soul wave length on a enemy causeing internal damage and hurts her as well)
Main Attacks
Multi Copy ( Expanded her Meister's soul to make copies of him but can exhaust both of their soul's has a range of 25ft and can only be used 3 times )
Soul Blitz( A quick and brutal series of attacks with the blunt side of her blades and with each hit sends a small compressed parts of her Meister's soul into the enemy can only be used 4 times in a fight )
Hobbies
Reading
Flaws
Can't take anything seriously, Smartmouth, Cocky
Likes
Her brother ,the outdoors, Cats
Dislikes
Kishins, The Undead, Blood
Theme song
None
Intersting facts
None
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Posted: Sat Mar 30, 2013 9:30 pm
I advise using the profile layouts for Meister and Weapon types. With this profile its very... bland I guess that's the right word. Please edit it to the proper layout that way I can tell if things are how they should be Layouts here http://www.gaiaonline.com/guilds/viewtopic.php?t=22899117
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Posted: Sat Mar 30, 2013 9:57 pm
"I'm late! I'm late!
For a very important date!"
*∞:∙.ღ.∙:∞*∞:∙.ღ.∙:∞*∞:∙.ღ.∙:∞*
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Mind if you put parentheses in the title of 'Meister' and 'Weapon', because I couldn't tell what it said at the first time..
Also by the looks of the profile, it looks like it's still a working in progress... If it is, put W.I.P in the title..
°⋆°⋆°ɢяɛɛиɢʋммʏ10°⋆°⋆°
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*∞:∙.ღ.∙:∞*∞:∙.ღ.∙:∞*∞:∙.ღ.∙:∞*
"No time to say "Hello, Goodbye"!
I'm late, I'm late, I'm late!"
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Posted: Sat Mar 30, 2013 10:08 pm
Well anyone got suggestions on what I should add but I can't get pics to work on my posts so I've given up on visual appearances
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Posted: Sun Mar 31, 2013 12:17 pm
So how does that look now and if there is anything I need to change please tell me
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Posted: Tue Apr 02, 2013 7:16 pm
Ok I'm not insulting ths guild here but really it has been week and no one has posted a thing and I have been waiting pationally for someone to either approve my character or tell me something I need to fix and my pations is running thin
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Posted: Tue Apr 02, 2013 9:06 pm
"I'm late! I'm late!
For a very important date!"
*∞:∙.ღ.∙:∞*∞:∙.ღ.∙:∞*∞:∙.ღ.∙:∞*
ღ.∙: *∞* :∙.ღ.∙: *∞* :∙.ღ.∙: *∞* :∙.ღ.∙: *∞* :∙.ღ.∙: *∞* :∙.ღ.∙: *∞* :∙.ღ
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Okay, Ari... If you want someone to notice your profile and want it to be accepted.. then quote either the VC, Crew Members, or the Captain...
No one would notice it if you don't quote any of the crew about you profile... As it says in my signature "Quote me if you want my attention or be ignored"
Mostly all the crew is busy in their life and can't instantly approve your profile, so we apologize for taking a while to approve your profile, please everyone is trying their best to look around the guild and their lifes..
Also, your profile has lack of capitalization in some words, fix that, spelling, I see some words incorrectly spell, Eric's abilities, put a cool down on them, how much can he use them in a post and how long it regenerates for him to use it again. Crystal's attacks, put a cool down and how long to regenerate and how many post it can be used, also how long is the range of the attack..
°⋆°⋆°ɢяɛɛиɢʋммʏ10°⋆°⋆°
ღ.∙: *∞* :∙.ღ.∙: *∞* :∙.ღ.∙: *∞* :∙.ღ.∙: *∞* :∙.ღ.∙: *∞* :∙.ღ.∙: *∞* :∙.ღ
*∞:∙.ღ.∙:∞*∞:∙.ღ.∙:∞*∞:∙.ღ.∙:∞*
"No time to say "Hello, Goodbye"!
I'm late, I'm late, I'm late!"
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Posted: Tue Apr 02, 2013 11:37 pm
Yeah how does that look now and I'm sorry about that last post I didn't mean to step ouf of line I just didn't know you had to quote anyone of rank
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Posted: Wed Apr 03, 2013 8:39 pm
Alrighty then, since I'm on I'll give a crack at the fun of profiles today.
Gummi pointed out some spelling flaws and I still see them scattered through your profile along with a couple of grammatical errors. Though I have OCD its not tragically broken as it still is understandable to get the picture of your characters. Cutting right to the chase here, the abilities are... decent. Nothing really note worthy and it's kinda lack luster but its acceptable. What gets me is the radius of some of the abilities. Now I'm a decent fan of trap laying and such but a radius of 30ft is a little too much, please done down the area of effect. As for the descriptions of some of the abilities I can't comprehend due to grammatical errors so please fix them so we can get a better understanding of them. That's all the input I have for this, if any of the other mods point out some things I missed it would be very helpful.
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Posted: Tue Apr 09, 2013 2:02 pm
Ok I think I got them all but if you see anything I need to chsnge just point it out
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Posted: Fri Apr 12, 2013 6:52 pm
Apologies for not replying sooner, this week has been majorly busy for me.
Moving on to the profile, there are a few punctuation flaws in the abilities which make sense if you utilize your commas so please look over or if you need help I'll gladly give a fix for you. Another thing that is holding back my aproval is the flaws and weaknesses. The application form states that there needs to be at least 2 Weaknesses and at least 3 Character Flaws. Also another thing is the spelling error of abilities, not "abbilities" Thats just the OCD talking though. As for Multi copy, give a duration to how long the copy can last since it is stated that it exhausts the soul of both weapon and meister. Lastly, the shock trap just can't "shut down a soul" if anything it should be able to send a disruptive wavelength to their soul causing them to be momentarily dazed.
That should be it and if any other mod catches something I missed feel free to interject.
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