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MoonIess

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PostPosted: Fri Mar 08, 2013 11:22 am


I'm not sure if this is too gory or not, but feel free to delete it if you want. Just tell me first.

A girl screamed and her breathing began to grow faster and faster as her fear grew. Her eyes widened until they almost popped out of their sockets and her hand clawed at the other one. Her right hand was ripping through her flesh by itself as if it were possessed by a devil, which it probably was. Finally, her fingers reached bone and crushed through just as easily. She started choking on her own blood - she probably tore a lung with her nails. Finally, her hands stopped moving and she gasped. She slowly raised her hand and felt the emptiness that should not have been in her chest. She tried to scream, tried to call out, but she couldn't form the words. Every breath was painful and grew harder and harder. Liquid and bile bubbled in her throat and several blood vessels popped in her yellowing eyeballs. She vomited a pool of gushing blood that she had been trying to keep in. She felt horrible. It took a few seconds for it to finally click in. She was dying yes, but she had also ripped out her heart. Her breathing began to slow and become shallow, only to pitch faster sometimes, unhealthily. She finally managed to clear her throat and started screaming, only to be smothered in her own gore. Shouldn't she be dead by now? No. She realized. Her heart was still attached by a few main blood vessels. She knew that if they were severed, she'd be dead in a minute. Oh no. She realized. That meant that whatever possessed her hands did not finish it's job yet. With a painful gasp, she felt the last bond between her organ and body break apart.

Weewooweewoo, sounded the alarming sirens. Flashing lights and a forming crowd surrounded the mental hospital. Shouts were heard and wondering cries and shrieks. A large gurney that was covered in a long white cloth was carried into an ambulance with the unmistakeable bump of a box filled with something. The woman's family and friends were gathered around the truck, demanding answers. Finally, her lover pushed past the annoyed officials and threw back the heavy cloth for the last look of his lover. He cried out and his hands flew to his face as he took a step back and was pushed away by the police.
PostPosted: Fri Mar 08, 2013 11:24 am


Oh my gosh. That was really scary and creepy. ;o It's pretty good though. Omg, that was SUPER scary.

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Imaginary Demon

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PostPosted: Fri Mar 08, 2013 11:45 am


Oh my gosh. Super gross, but I think it was pretty good.
PostPosted: Sat Mar 09, 2013 1:28 pm


I hate gore, but it was still pretty good.




I hate gore

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