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 Posted: Sat Dec 08, 2012 5:42 pm
Echos of a Dying Star :: Quin[Oh what a t r a g e d y ]Content 1 ----------- Introduction 2 ---------------- The Dust 3 ------------ The Guardian 4 ------------- The Essence 5 -------- Random Thoughts 6 ------------- Critique Log 
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Posted: Sat Dec 08, 2012 5:42 pm
The Dust :: The Pesky Miracle[I'm overly n a r c i s s i s t i c ]
Character Name: Quintin Aquila
Nicknames: Q, Quin
Dust Essence: LGM – little green men – pulsar radiation
Gender: Male
Powers: Defensive- offensive – Quin would be able to emit frequencies, which can be used in a damaging manner to inanimates. Maybe a method of frying certain technologies accidental or no. Definitely want to brainstorm around these ((:
Traits:
Radio Emissions - The boy leaks frequencies. Some harmless and not even audible- others strong enough to make the vitreous humor in your eyes reach a resonance that your brain compensates by inputting it's own image- was that a ghost? Others go straight to your reptillian brain- sending fear and panic. The use of radio emissions as a weapon has yet to be developed- but it can be used for nearly anything. On a manner of spectrum- good to evil- it is directly in the gray region. This can also send the fledgling technology of this world on the fritz. Vacuum tubes popping wherever he goes.
Phase Lag - Have you ever had a nightmare where your body moves like tar? There are certain triggers for Quin early that will make his body lag. LIke he himself is at the event horizon of a black hole, the last layer of visible light before it's sucked into the dense core. His body would remain static and his image separates to continue his planned task- creating a dramatic lag time from visual stimulation to actual movement. The need to jump and dodge a sweep would send him flying across the room, a ghosted image jumping yet still being drawn by his moving form.
Ghosting - A neutron star flickers at night- a tale that it's death has long since happened and what we see is the light that is billions of years old- looking into the past. I see Quin having similar behavior- similar to the phase lag- where his limbs will grow less opaque, flicker before returning to normal, when he's ill or especially stressed his body will ghost as an emulation of his intangible dust. During times of intense emotion the opposite might occur, he might glow.
IMAGINE A GLOWING BALLSACK OF PASSION D< BB COM'ERE LEMME SHINE ON YEA- OH YEAH YOU LIKE IT LIKE DAT. Seriously though... Glowing p***s. Tell me that doesn't make you guffaw...
Appearance: Quintin’s appearance is on par with his personality. Big. Upon reaching full stature he should stand well above any crowd [6’3” + ]. His skin, at least initially would benefit from a gloaming appeal- the frosty shade you get around a fire in polar night- the blues, purples and flesh tones are so much more vivid. [This is a painting but this would be his skin characteristics] sans luminosity except down his limbs. His extremities are slightly incandescent especially nearing his fingertips. His body is molten and cool all at once- freckles and marks littering his skin like the human next to you however, the light dustings are iridescent and concentrated on his shoulders, arms and his high, prominent cheekbones. There is symmetry between Quin’s right and left, his smile is dimpled and he is the figure of heartthrob. Tall lean muscles slither from his body- gentle giant. His eyes are a deep blue, nearing black emulating the ‘black hole’ his essence was birthed from- when the light hits them a thick limbal ring would be all to apparent while the inner iris lightens. His brow line is soft and gracing downward underneath a spiraling mass of grey-white hair.
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Attire- Quentin is definitely pulled straight from the GQ- extraterrestrial catalogue. He’s casual but fine all at once and maintains a messily put together exterior. His colors are normally cooler- blues, grays and whites. Due to his guardian’s lifestyle he’ll be prone to ignore footwear all together.
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As played by reference [when he is older] - Quin will grow to resemble the build and stature and facial structure of McFassyPants *SHOT SO SHOT DEAD DON'T JUDGE ME HE'S FABULOUS*
Distinguishing Features: Iridescent freckles- extremities can glow. On the other end of the spectrum if sick or depressed [plot plotten?] instead of glowing, fingertips, hands, toes, feet—ear tips, may loose opacity.
Personality: Narcissistic, Intuitive, Judgmental, Extravert, Smart
The personality dynamic of Quintin is an interesting dovetail to Magnolia [guardian]. Of the 16 personality portraits, Quin fits directly into the ENTJ category.
Quintin is an engineer tried and true- logical problems are his forte especially when in a social environment. His extroverted thinking is usually displayed by the need to vocalize thought processes- aiding in the over all organization of his brilliant mind vomit. The problem is that he sees his own intelligence, relishes it and doesn’t share it as much as he gets a kick by proving he knows more than his company. He loves the thrill of a challenge [as he rarely will be able to find one] and will need that verbal confirmation to feed is all too large and ever growing ego. In short he’s a brilliant narcissist. A brilliant narcissist with what appears to be an impulsive gut—which is wrong. Magnolia is impulsive where as Quin is fast thinking and quick to ride a plan out in his head. After enough time in his new skin, Quin will begin to listen to his gut and follow it to whichever conclusion it leads him. Each time, he makes these gut-based decisions with little warning, which gives him the impression of being unpredictable.
What comes with the ego only further drives home the self-glorified complex that rattles in his head. He’s loud- there’s nothing quiet about Quin. A thrill seeker at heart with a flashy sense of style- ruffled just enough to trick himself into thinking that other people thinks he doesn’t care. Additionally, he displays outward style for attention and self-expression. There is no way that Quin could ever sit quietly and appreciate life on the side- he has to be up and the center of attention.
Suffice to say, in contrast to his large meathead exterior, Quintin has a hard time verbalizing his emotions- not unlike his guardian. When he doesn’t try to brush something off as a joke, he attempts to diffuse the depth he feels something at. He is unable to talk about his fears or knowledge of compassion. It’s not that he doesn’t feel, it’s not that he doesn’t recognize or comprehend his emotions (read Magnolia), he is just poorly practiced in making his feelings known, or even really how to handle strong emotions. He instead will seek thrills to distract from his feelings and drive on in an unhealthy manner.
Eventual playboy I'm sure. HIDE YO WIFE, HIDE YO KIDZ - OR HIDE Y'OTHUH GENDER IDENTIFYING SEXUALS- HE LIKES EM PRETTY AND HAS NO PREFERENCE IN GENITALIA.
Likes/Dislikes: Quintin loves stimulus and is in a constant state of searching for that high he gets when he's elbow deep in a part. He hates being idle and will often get irritable and snappy.
Hobbies: The tinkerer- for now I see him picking up everything and anything he can get his hands on and taking it apart. While younger he'll leave a train of destruction in his wake. Once he grows older he'll be able to piece everything back together with growing confidence. He draws but it's more analytical.
Anything Else:
Guardian Interaction- The largest issue Quin presents Magnolia is that he is a living and breathing being that is suddenly thrust into her custody. She can barely keep a steady relationship with an adult let alone establish a nurturing one with a child. He's like her black spot- a distraction from work yet Magnolia feels the need to care for Quin as if he were her own. Initially she will attempt to pretend he doesn't exist whilst maintaining minimum requirements to keep a human child alive [human he definitely is not]. Receiving Q in child form is like receiving a golden retriever with a stick. Quin will be loud, obnoxious and needy.
Edit and Expand: When we examine Quintin's personality we see one part analytical intellect and two parts diva. The relationship with Magnolia is special as it treads along the lines of 'you can't choose your family'. As an overly narcissistic creature, especially in youth, Magnolia will become Quin's emotional punching bag that is morally obligated to fill his every need- this job comes with the requirement of an ideal amount of awe and attention that Magnolia is not ready to deal with. As the Guardian herself is focused on her work, Quintin is focused on himself. With any other social endeavor he can haughtily turn his nose and simply 'not care' this is all on the condition that his need to be the center of the universe is filled. By nature, Magnolia obviously, to him, must fill his required quota of attention and validation. Making him needier than an infant echidna in the winter without a sweater... I mean look at them... really?. b***h NEED DAT SWEATUH, CUZ!
Given Magnolia's complex understanding of emotions [har har/sarcasm], she won't know how to react. Where Quintin is laden with sarcasm and quips- Magnolia is painfully straight forward. It will be a constant battle to reach for normalcy- but as stable systems work out, the two will eventually reach an equilibrium point. Both creatures yearn so much for adventure which cornily enough they'll find in each other. They'll initiate a system where they check on bad habits and catch each other on mutually agreed faults. [The frightening aspect here is that neither of them are entirely driven by strong normal social means- so what would be categorized as a fault?]. They will promote inspiration and eccentricity within each other. More of a negative relationship gone good.
Social Interactions and Further Plots:
Quintin puts all the fronts up of being an independent soul and it is too true. In an initial meeting if you do not accept the truth that he is the very center of the universe he will most likely give up hope on you and move on. However as this shop is an RP shop there has to be something deeper right? Of course there is and as the protagonist in his own afternoon soap drama our narcissistic fellow will be subject to many uncomfortable circumstances... wherein he wants to be accepted, appreciated and validated.
Well how does that work? It's completely contradictory? Isn't it? Beuller? Here's the skinny on Quintin Aquila. He sees himself as the most lovable person on earth. He's self viewed talented, attractive, intelligent and [later on] sexy as hells bells. What's not to love? When put into a room with another person he won't simply stand there and toodle on his way, working to figure out the next big invention- not when there's a perfectly good receptacle of praise and adoration [plausible receptacl- Quin, that's rude, they aren't objects they're people]. He likes feeling good but he just can't look down at the warm feeling in his chest and label 'Good, I like feeling you'.
The same goes for the opposite direction, if someone bores him or 'hurts' him [that would be hard but it can happen, people can offend and wound Quintin], he'll look down at the sick sinking feeling and go 'bleh, I hate this feels' and come to a conclusion- that this person isn't worth his time.
So we look at the flowchart that is Quintin's social brain and go 'okay, there are two initial responses begetting two conclusions'. If he enjoys the way the person makes him feel- he'll continue to engage in with that person and continue to feel good as a response from the person.
If he doesn't initially enjoy you, he goes to a new block on his flow chart. The 'am I stuck with them?'. If no? He'll ignore the situation and move on. If yes? He'll begrudgingly deal with the person in the best way he knows how. Snarky behavior and prickly tongues.
So we've just scraped the surface of Quin with the added et al. Let's delve a bit more complex. What were to happen if Quin were to dislike someone, begrudgingly deal with them and then get a good internal response to the extended period of time in contact with said person. Or to put it simply- how does someone become friends with Quintin. There's the conundrum- he's already turned on his stark exterior to you, the load of sarcasm and the biting comments- but maybe that's just it, maybe they are just the banter pair and can smile at the end. That's difficult because according to his own chart- Quin is supposed to dislike the person but he feels a sense of contentment and happiness when he's around them. This will vary from person to person and it will be interesting to see how Quintin's personality will grow when he finds someone who he doesn't mind feeling intense emotion around and what his reactions will be. Maybe he's a big kid, maybe he'll ignore it. I can't say without a bit of test interactions.
I can say one thing for certain, he's far to invested in self love to let anyone in a shared space stand without personal interaction. If you're there, he'll most likely move to engage with you.
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Posted: Sat Dec 08, 2012 5:46 pm
The Guardian :: The Physicist[she looked to the stars for a new p r o m i s e ]Name: Dr. Magnolia Henrietta Kaufman
Age: 25, January 22nd
Gender: Female
Description: Magnolia is fair and less than dainty. Starting with her face, sweet and endearingly crooked. Her smile is never far from her face, a single dimple pulling at her cheeks. Freckles dust her cheeks, falling under the light but noticeable bags beneath her always bright, muddy-hazel eyes. Her hair falls in curls to her shoulders, something that could be brilliant gold- unruly due to mild neglect, keeping her from being any where near perfect. Not a true beauty, but close. She’s of a moderate stature, her crown barely exceeding 5’5” in height, her limbs not of a delicate frame but slightly more full.
She eats healthy enough, however one critical fact keeps her from the athletic form she purses her lips at. Her skin is very delicate- rued with a hereditary disease. Friction makes her skin blister quicker than most. A walk of nearly 2 miles would have her off her feet for days while the sores drain. Mechanical friction is her worst enemy resulting in a more laid back lifestyle- evident in her appearance. She is a lady but not a dame; she has elegance but not slim fingers and cares not for the practices of tea pouring anyway.
‘As Played By Reference’: [Greta Salpeter] [1] [2] [3]
Personality: Analytical, Work-intensive, Eccentric, Impulsive, Kind
Magnolia is of an analytical mind. Her world is composed of science and she graces each experience like an experiment. She’s intelligent and driven to a fault. Due to her physical limitations she throws herself into her work and finds meaningful ways to make the simple things in her life soothe her scattered mind. She isn’t very active and this leads her to a more bookish lifestyle and heightens passions that would otherwise seem a waste of time. The heavens have always called to her, each ball of light, shimmering in a place where she wouldn’t feel pain. Hundreds of planets and systems, stars living and dying- it was an easy decision where her passions and her father’s money would be put to good work. She’s driven, reaching a doctorate in astrology and physics in record time. The beaming smile on her face, and her emotion when she speaks of her studies- her work is her only love.
Of the 16 personalities - Magnolia falls straight into the INTJ portrait. Magnolia knew nothing but love of her father and a world with limitless opportunities, she is strong minded and finds herself completely comfortable in her own skin. She believes that she can control her environment and needs to have her ‘world’ running smoothly and systematically. She values honesty, respects laws and traditions and has the expectation that her peers share a similar view. This isn’t to say she is closed minded she just outright chooses to make the best outcome. She doesn’t attack an opposing stance so much as doesn’t comprehend and cannot understand and will smile dumbly, single dimple quirking as she tries to navigate the complexities of dealing with other people. Her world is built on facts derived from observation, logic and direct sensory stimulation. She is quick to express her thoughts and a judgment in a situation forwardly however was granted with a finely tuned filter. When hitting one of these ‘misunderstanding’ ruts with Magnolia, it is best to explain in absolute terms or it will be lost to her and she’ll move on to a different train of thought.
Emotionally she tends to be overly detail oriented and doesn’t quite recognize the depths of what emotions carry. This isn’t to say she doesn’t hold emotions- she may in fact express her emotions more readily than one of her peers- if laughter elicits a good feeling- she will laugh. However, she not deals with the other side of the coin. Anxiety, depression and sadness all carry bad feelings with them and thus she will avoid the root causes of the emotions that make her feel less than ‘good’. Instead of dealing with a problem head on, she will avoid it and try to bring the good feelings back. Hot cocoa on a cold day, drawing faces in the fog, kissing a stranger. Due to her lack of understanding, wanting the world to fit into tiny boxes, she enjoys the simple pleasures above all else. This gives her a happy go lucky exterior and she’d sooner dance barefoot through a lecture hall than mope in her bedroom. When emotions can’t turn ‘good’ she turns to her work and immerses herself as a happy distraction.
As an overly logical being, Magnolia puts forth full effort in everything she chooses to conquer- however it has to be something that aligns with her goals otherwise she will put that task on the backburner and ‘forget’ about it. Due to this it is easy to neglect much in her life- friends and potential relationships. In short she’s a loose canon with a target.
History:
-Born to Henry Maelstrom Kaufman and late Wendlyn Maria Kaufman [nee Patsy]. Henry is a robust man and retired inventor at a young age. In a stroke of genius, Henry was able to easily manufacture a self-lubricating material for the pistons used in the steam engines. With the industry booming, his product was highly sought and he was able to retire at an early age to settle his family in Faleen.
-Wendlyn carried and exhibited the gene for Epidermolysis Bullosa and passed it to her only daughter. She passed when Magnolia entered her 3rd year of education due to an infection of the heart.
-Magnolia is very much a ‘daddy’s girl’ and has lived a very sheltered life due to the nature of her father needing to spoil his princess. She was interested only in inventions and the heavens- the best schools and the finest education were required for his daughter. He still dutifully supports his daughter and she is not ungrateful for his care and charm.
-Magnolia, while maintaining the intelligence to exceed her peers stayed with her age group through her education in order to ‘adapt socially’. She graduated with top marks in the ‘astrophysics’ equivalent doctoral program. She continues her studies in Aimes- traveling back home to Faleen weekly to visit her father and work in her department.
-Her passion for education is continued as she gives guest lectures and colloquiums on her studies, to stay in the good graces of the educational community, weekly. She also loves lecturing to the younger grades, hoping to invite children to her passion and allow them to see how open their educational careers can be.
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Posted: Sat Dec 08, 2012 5:47 pm
The Essence :: LGM[Through that last dark cloud is a dying s t a r ]
The signal turned out to be radio emissions from the pulsar CP1919 (the first one recognized as such). Bell noted that other scientists could have discovered pulsars before her, but their observations were either ignored or disregarded. She noted that Sir Fred Hoyle identified this astronomical object as a neutron star immediately upon their announcement.
In short the essence is radio emissions from a pulsar- the "sound" of a dying star. Tragic but beautiful. A neutron star is a type of stellar remnant that can result from the gravitational collapse of a massive star during a Type II, Type Ib or Type Ic supernova event. Such stars are composed almost entirely of neutrons, which are subatomic particles without electrical charge and with slightly larger mass than protons. Neutron stars are very hot and are supported against further collapse by quantum degeneracy pressure due to the Pauli exclusion principle. This principle states that no two neutrons (or any other fermionic particles) can occupy the same place and quantum state simultaneously.
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Posted: Sat Dec 08, 2012 9:48 pm
Thoughtless Mind Rattles :: Plotting[rabble dabble plot and p r a t t l e]Q's essence is a tragic end of a star-- should be viewed as the 'cries' or 'song' of a dying star. Radio frequencies just barely reaching our lonely planet. This is the idea that the squawks we record have long sense died out. Almost a return to sender and entirely hopeless SOS. It's sad and beautiful all at once. I almost want to take this image and bring it to his personality? Never interferes in the lifestyles and happenings of other people/ souls despite having the capacity. Is he bitter? Or can he never make it in time. Childhood I see him wrought with nightmares of never succeeding in giving aid to a party in need. Quin is then so terrified of failure he acts entirely self absorbed to keep everyone from needing him? Or is this contradictory.
In response to this I think some of his traits should reflect being 'useless' - maybe instead of transparent limbs in times of distress- he looses physical form? Unable to grab-- would suggest he's that much more focused in engineering machines and systems to do things for him. That coupled with controlling radio frequencies [emissions, not just audio] - could be an interesting step to fixing his 'ghosting' -- in fact I'll tie this into actual frequencies.
Real time normal human = the top. Action creates immediate response. I say move hand and my hand moves. What if, in distress, Quin as more like the second plot. Input is given but there is a phase shift in reaction- a ghosting effect that's always too little and too late. Instead of temperature on the dependent axis place [output U(s) ] ....
... The perfect song for him >>
"A conscience never burdened you
No empathy to slow you down
Others were there for you to use
Like hapless ships you ran aground
How can you sleep?
The world burns at your feet
How can you forsake
The casualties you leave in your wake?
You lied like other people breath
Speaking a twisted lexicon
To get your way by any means
No matter who you tread upon
How can you sleep?
The world burns at your feet
How can you forsake
The casualties you leave in your wake?
The saddest part is you believed
The world you fashioned in your mind
While all the people you deceived
Were slowly plotting your demise
How can you sleep?
The world burns at your feet
How can you forsake
The casualties you leave in your wake?"
- How Can You Sleep - Assemblage 23
"I’m on the verge of collapse
I’m on the brink of disaster
And I’m far more lost than I want to admit
I’m at the end of my rope
I’m on the edge of a breakdown
And no matter how tightly I hold on, I still slip
And you’re watching me die
Right in front of your eyes
And if you turned your back on me
I wouldn’t be surprised
There’s no new story to tell
It’s every man for himself
As brick by brick
We construct our own personal hell
I’m running out of time
I’m running short of options
And the desperation is chewing me up inside 
I’ve got nowhere to go
I’ve got no one to turn to
Just accelerating, inescapable decline
And you’re watching me die
Right in front of your eyes
And if you turned your back on me
I wouldn’t be surprised
There’s no new story to tell
It’s every man for himself
As brick by brick
We construct our own personal hell
I’m suffocating with guilt
Asphyxiating on panic
And I can’t shake off this fear with which I’m bound
I’m buried up to my neck
I’m sinking under the water
And the next wave could be the one that brings me down
And you’re watching me die
Right in front of your eyes
And if you turned your back on me
I wouldn’t be surprised
There’s no new story to tell
It’s every man for himself
As brick by brick
We construct our own personal hell"
-Collapse - Assemblage 23
"Tear apart the life and times of familiar faces
And tracing lines to what connects me and binds me to
Images of the remote and never-changing
Grand designs, style and grace
And am I
Lost in thoughts on open seas
Let the currents carry me
If I could would I remain
Another life or another dream
No turning back, face the fact
I am lost in space and time
Turning here, looking back in time
One and all let us celebrate the rise and fall
Celebrate the life and times of splendor
Desire and love constant and never-changing
The flow of times, closed in lines
Can't tell if I'm just
Lost in thoughts on open seas
Let the currents carry me
If I could would I remain
Another life or another dream
No turning back, face the fact
I am lost in space and time
Turning here, looking back in time"
-Space & Time - VNV Nation
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Posted: Sat Dec 08, 2012 9:49 pm
Critiques :: ResponseThe Semblance of Unity *cracks knuckles* So you're missing a specific traits section. Which is crazy useful. You describe most of what would be considered traits in other sections, but it's easier to lump it all together. Like his emissions messing with technology/machinery. And his ghosting thing's. Speaking of ghosting. I like the idea of him having an afterimage...or rtaher, a transparent before image that is his initial reaction to things, say if he dropped a cup and grabs for it, you might see his transparent hand reach and almost catch it, but his real opaque hand would be so delayed that it would miss the cup entirely. Having a transparent "before image" I think works better than being intangible. Fading them out makes me think of how a black hole sucks even light into it's maw. I think Quin's clothing section would benefit from some sample pictures. Everyone's definition of GQ may be different. As far as being bitter and having nightmares, something that also may work with him would be an obssession with failing/dying things. Or dying causes etc. Idk. I'd like to see keywords in their personalities. A set of four or so words that are immutable personality traits. They do not change, they are the core of your guardian or your dust. Other than that, I like him. Your nerd made my brain hurt a bit, but it shows you've done your research 8'D. Quin as a playboy, oh my. Does his skin feel like icy hot? >_> *shot* Love it! - To reply- Aric Val Wow with the traits part of it -- I REALLY HAD TO wrack my brain to read all that. But it's great! Everything is really well-researched and I see the amount of work you put in the whole thing. The traits may be slightly tweaked, I would just warn you, it's not on my department mostly but I think that Lag is so interesting--and may prove to be really comical at times ahaha besides that I don't think the glowing and the change in opacity at times would be a problem. His personality is wonderfully written and really really complex and interesting, he seems too mature for his age but I actually don't see much of a problem in that --but in contrast to a line you say "Receiving Q in child form is like receiving a golden retriever with a stick. Quin will be loud, obnoxious and needy." (which is hilarious btw XD) -- In how you described him in the personality part-- I don't really see that too much? So when does the needy part come in mostly? Because I do see him as very independent. If you can, I'd also really love to see a bit more insight on how he does actually make friends/enemies and what can actually rattle him. I love how he and his guardian, Magnolia feed off of each other. Their personalities are both really strong and I love to see how they do interact and personalities collide especially as Quintin gets older! Love the history about her, really detailed and wonderful. Aside from the things I would hope you add, I really love him! And would really hope to see him come alive when the chance comes up <3 Thank you so much! I added a few things that I hope will bring clarity and developed my glowbunz a little more *squishes Quin* Edited - 'Social Interactions and Further Plots' and 'Anything Else'
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Posted: Sat Dec 08, 2012 10:03 pm
Open for crits and things!
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Posted: Mon Dec 10, 2012 10:44 am
*cracks knuckles*
So you're missing a specific traits section. Which is crazy useful. You describe most of what would be considered traits in other sections, but it's easier to lump it all together. Like his emissions messing with technology/machinery. And his ghosting thing's.
Speaking of ghosting. I like the idea of him having an afterimage...or rtaher, a transparent before image that is his initial reaction to things, say if he dropped a cup and grabs for it, you might see his transparent hand reach and almost catch it, but his real opaque hand would be so delayed that it would miss the cup entirely. Having a transparent "before image" I think works better than being intangible. Fading them out makes me think of how a black hole sucks even light into it's maw.
I think Quin's clothing section would benefit from some sample pictures. Everyone's definition of GQ may be different.
As far as being bitter and having nightmares, something that also may work with him would be an obssession with failing/dying things. Or dying causes etc. Idk.
I'd like to see keywords in their personalities. A set of four or so words that are immutable personality traits. They do not change, they are the core of your guardian or your dust.
Other than that, I like him. Your nerd made my brain hurt a bit, but it shows you've done your research 8'D. Quin as a playboy, oh my.
Does his skin feel like icy hot? >_> *shot*
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Posted: Wed Dec 12, 2012 4:47 pm
Okay! Swift edits have finally been made! I added the traits to Q's section with a simple description... of course they're all open to critique and molding. Intangible and fading is exactly what I'm going for- his essence is a radio frequency of a star doing exactly that- getting sucked into a black hole creating a dense collapse and nebula. I like your idea of him having emotions towards failing/dying things- however I think it'd be more of a fear than everything else. He doesn't like cut flowers as they are beautiful and will eventually die so he'd rather keep a living plant or a fake plant. That sort of thing? Keywords to personalities have been added! Thanks for the tip! And haha, it is a bit confusing but I tried to sum it up in the last paragraph. Let me more if I should break it down more! And yes~ Yes the narcissism and playboy attitude- can't say much for his skin but you know his mouth is |DDDD *hung*
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Posted: Mon Jan 07, 2013 11:43 am
Wow with the traits part of it -- I REALLY HAD TO wrack my brain to read all that. But it's great! Everything is really well-researched and I see the amount of work you put in the whole thing. The traits may be slightly tweaked, I would just warn you, it's not on my department mostly but I think that Lag is so interesting--and may prove to be really comical at times ahaha besides that I don't think the glowing and the change in opacity at times would be a problem. His personality is wonderfully written and really really complex and interesting, he seems too mature for his age but I actually don't see much of a problem in that --but in contrast to a line you say "Receiving Q in child form is like receiving a golden retriever with a stick. Quin will be loud, obnoxious and needy." (which is hilarious btw XD) -- In how you described him in the personality part-- I don't really see that too much? So when does the needy part come in mostly? Because I do see him as very independent. If you can, I'd also really love to see a bit more insight on how he does actually make friends/enemies and what can actually rattle him. I love how he and his guardian, Magnolia feed off of each other. Their personalities are both really strong and I love to see how they do interact and personalities collide especially as Quintin gets older! Love the history about her, really detailed and wonderful. Aside from the things I would hope you add, I really love him! And would really hope to see him come alive when the chance comes up <3
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Posted: Mon Jan 07, 2013 1:47 pm
Yes! Thank you so much for popping in D: <3 And I’m sorry it’s all so dense and nerdy- I was worried about that but I’m glad you like. I have no problem with them being tweaked, I’m throwing my ideas at a wall and seeing what sticks! Always open for tweaks and such! Personality wise, I agree! It is mature and maybe I’m looking too far at a 100m target and less 50m. The goal I’m trying to hit at is that he’s exceedingly narcissistic and needs to be the center of the universe. The difference between Magnolia and say, an acquaintance, is he can choose his connection with the acquaintance- if he doesn’t rock their [friend/foe/stranger] world and show them a new god in Dust form [himself] then they are obviously not worthy of being acknowledged. But there’s always that portion of him that needs to be received and admired and loved. Magnolia is a constant- he can’t up and leave her so he doesn’t have the option of ignoring her so he has to augment her behavior to fit his needs! I hope that explains it, maybe I’m awful at articulating~ I added sommore on that up in his post c: Gah such good input though! I also added a blurb about socializing. Meeting new Friends and Foes will definitely be at the soul of his personality growth~ Especially once he starts having feels but can't articulate what said feels are. Very uncomfortable boy |D More on that posted too. Again thank you for your input! More Critz iz good critz! <3333 youresolovely
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Posted: Tue Jan 08, 2013 4:20 pm
I'm going to do one of these numbers and i'msosorrypleasedon'thateme DDDD; Chrystali m'lady yo gorgeousness ;; I want your brain to get better and if you're staring at a computer screen all day I suggest downloading f.lux! It's saved me from monstrous headaches D; <3333 I'd love some input <3~ Aric Val BP! I'M BACK Thank you so much for your crit but I'm greedy and require to be graced with more of your love >D <3 but you're a busy bee, and I suggest nommy teas and coffees for nice snackums <33333
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Posted: Mon Jan 28, 2013 2:30 pm
Note to self- Quinn is going to be Jareth with he grows up. Hand double for the win
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Posted: Tue Mar 05, 2013 11:00 am
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Posted: Tue Mar 05, 2013 1:23 pm
theLimeTree with an edit oops Quentin
Traits
Radio Emissions -- love the idea, but traits cannot affect others. They might be able to feel that hum of their own free will if they so choose to acknowledge it, but it cannot be forced upon them. The other two are fine!
As for his attire -- as long as his Guardian's job can support that quality and type of clothes, it's all sexy good to go.
Everything else looks great to me. I'm fine with his personality being more mature -- I do anticipate differences as a child and that some things change with growth, etc etc -- so everything here looks fan-tastic to me! Since BP critiqued the quest before, I just want to make sure she's satisfied with the changes and we'll count this as approved and lock it! nvn/
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