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"MIxed Feelings"

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firebreather1324

PostPosted: Thu Aug 23, 2012 9:58 am


"Mixed Feelings"
I should hate you but I don't
I find myself having feelings for you
You hurt me, you destroyed me
Part of me liked what happened
Part of me didn't
The feelings I had I buried deep
Unreachable,Untouchable, Unknown
You studied me as I studied you
You know me better than I know than myself
I trust you, I always have
Even when I said I hated you
I missed you, please stay my friend
Please

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PostPosted: Mon Sep 03, 2012 8:24 am


a nice poem about feelings,

if i may say a suggestion it's only about the lay-out try to split it in three parts then this poem will be not online nice at text but also at lay-out so people should read it more easely cool

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PostPosted: Mon Sep 03, 2012 9:40 am


I think it's nice!
PostPosted: Mon Sep 03, 2012 2:15 pm


✖✖✖ - I think it's wonderfully written. But I think the ending is a little to different, or could use more detail.

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PostPosted: Sat Feb 09, 2013 10:40 am


I enjoyed reading it and I really have nothing bad to say about the poem. It has a good flow and is emotional. Thank you for writing it.
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