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 Posted: Tue May 22, 2012 1:46 am
Akira Magus Altaïr
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Full Name: Akira Magus Altaïr
Nicknames: Akira of the Fallen
Age: 3000 yrs.
Birthdate: 01-08
Gender: Male
Title: Royal Guard Captain
Race: Featherfolk "Angel"
Kingdom: Kougi
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xxxxxx Magic Abilities
xxxxxx Black Magic: Lightning
xxxxxxxxxxxx •Mastery: Magnus as an Angel of Judgement, has mastered over the element of lightning as blessed upon him by the gods. The energy radiating from his being shines like a light from which he manipulate electrons in his being and in the air around him.
xxxxxx Healing Light
xxxxxxxxxxxx •Due to the energy radiating off of his body, he can heal not only his wounds, but the wounds of others
xxxxxx Arcane Magic: Transformation
xxxxxxxxxxxx • Like many of his kind, he spent a Millenium watching over Mankind through all there endeavors, and from time he would come down to intervene when nessecary. At first, they were forbidden to come in their normal form for it was not their realm. As to applease the great ones beyond, they developed a type of ability of which allowed them to transform into a human or an animal if they wanted to be one to hid their wings and/or their beings. While transformed, Magnus loses his ability to heal another.
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Class: Warlock
Origin: Fallen Angel City
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Weapons:
-Hidden Assassin Blades on each arm. [[Pic]]
-Carries a Scythe with a wipe extending from its hilt.
-An assortment of hidden daggers in his cloak and feathers.
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Personality: Magus is a relaxed man that treats his friends like family and his enemies like bugs. Being born in times of war, he still holds a firm hate over Humans and anyone not of mixed or full Demon/monster/Impure blood. A term he hates to refer to. His true hatred comes out when faced with an opponent.
Quote: “Somethings you can't unsee, when I am done, your going to wish you could.”
Height: 5ft 8in.
Weight: 180 lbs.
Eye Color: Dark Blue
Favorite Music: Rock and Pop
Theme Song: Too Close by Alex Clare
Battle Theme: Erase My Scars
Emotional Theme: Your are the Day
Favorite Color: Dark Blue and Black
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Akira is a General in the Army of the Fallen. He dispies all humans and the things that they do as he watched them over the years and the destruction that followed them as time past onwards. Sure there were some good things, but the number of bad was a smell that overpowered that of the good. Soon, the dispies he felt turned to shear Hatred as he paid withness to countless wars and ended lives of a few tyrants himself that have mysteriously disappeared. He was an Assassin, but unliked the works of human assassins, his deeds couldnt be trace. As time progressed onwards and one foolish human after another struggled for power, one mighty wizard unknowingly unleashed the confinds of pandora's box putting all kinds of creatures into the realm. It was that moment, he knew he had to intervene and lead these creatures on the path of Justice.
As an Angel of ageless wisdom and unparrelled abilities, he was accepted gracefully by the people of the Kingdom of Kougi and its main capital named after his army, Fallen Angel City.
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Posted: Tue May 22, 2012 4:05 am
Well, one of my biggest problems with this profile is the amount of spells you have. But, I can give you a suggestion that can let you use everything, but still only have four abilities.
For example, if you are a master at wind manipulation, you can pretty much use all of the moves stated in your spells correct? You can manipulate the wind to cause air suction, or create a shield of wind. Of course, you need to state what is the limit of your wind manipulation abilities. This way, you can do everything in those spells, and more.
Same goes for the Lightning and water elements.
With Healing, you need to do something similar. Because healing is well... Healing. Nothing like the holy blast or barrier spells, due to the fact that they aren't really healing someone. Just state how much you can heal, and how bad of an injury you can heal.
The reason for me saying this, is that I do not want it to look like you have more than one ability. Just describe how much of each element you can manipulate, and stuff like that.
If you have any questions, pm me.
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Ichigo The Bunny Vice Captain
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Posted: Tue May 22, 2012 3:04 pm
Easiest way to do it would be to state your character has control over an element (one primary) then one secondary. If he's a master of more then one, then it makes him considerably OP. The main purpose of rp'ing with your own character is to let them grow, so if they've mastered everything, then they would need to be some kind of leader more then not, but even then, same situation applies.
From there you would state (with 2 abilities) that he has control over one element.
Then another.
Then with the last 2 slots you have left for abilities/power/etc., create 2 ultimate techniques or something of that nature.
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Posted: Tue May 22, 2012 9:29 pm
Zenaku the Demon Well, one of my biggest problems with this profile is the amount of spells you have. But, I can give you a suggestion that can let you use everything, but still only have four abilities. For example, if you are a master at wind manipulation, you can pretty much use all of the moves stated in your spells correct? You can manipulate the wind to cause air suction, or create a shield of wind. Of course, you need to state what is the limit of your wind manipulation abilities. This way, you can do everything in those spells, and more. Same goes for the Lightning and water elements. With Healing, you need to do something similar. Because healing is well... Healing. Nothing like the holy blast or barrier spells, due to the fact that they aren't really healing someone. Just state how much you can heal, and how bad of an injury you can heal. The reason for me saying this, is that I do not want it to look like you have more than one ability. Just describe how much of each element you can manipulate, and stuff like that. If you have any questions, pm me. better?
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Posted: Tue May 22, 2012 10:04 pm
Looks much better, however you still have two wind spells on your profile.
What does the Arcane Magic:Transformation do in terms of your abilities? Does your strength or speed increase? Or does it do something else? It looks like it just transforms you into whatever you want.
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Posted: Wed May 23, 2012 1:12 am
Zenaku the Demon Looks much better, however you still have two wind spells on your profile. What does the Arcane Magic:Transformation do in terms of your abilities? Does your strength or speed increase? Or does it do something else? It looks like it just transforms you into whatever you want. Removed them and Basicly, I couldnt think of a fourth, so transformation. And guessed right, it just transforms me into whatever i want. From human to hid my wings, a mouse to a four armed demon. Ability increases are banned, so its what I came up with.
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Posted: Wed May 23, 2012 6:17 am
Approved. I will set up the forum for the fight soon.
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