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Frost7100

PostPosted: Fri Apr 20, 2012 7:53 pm




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Name:Zachary Roberts
Alias:Zach
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Universe: (Marvel or DC)
Alliance: Hero
Age:17
Height:5'11
Weight:170
Physical Characteristics:Black Hair, Red Eyes, medium build
Personality:Happy, kind hearted
Likes:Music
Dislikes razz eople who are full of themselves
Fears biggrin rowning
Bio:Zach is the youngest of the three brothers and is gifted with the best way of the blood art. Zach doesn't remember Brian or there other brother because of the night a few villagers from a town that they use to live in ran them out of town and hit Zach in the head pretty good when he was little, Brian took him to an old family friend who took him in and raised him. Years later the family told him he had a brother still alive so Zach left to find this family member and has been on the road ever since

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Powers:Zach is a Hemomancer (Blood Magic) with the ability to morph his body parts into demon like body parts however he dosent need to bleed to use his powers since he can control the blood in his body
Weakness(s): Zach is still human so he still has human weaknesses
Abilities:Is able to change his body parts into different forms based on the situation
Skills:Brian is quick on his feet and can change his body quickly

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PostPosted: Fri Apr 20, 2012 8:31 pm


Alrighty:

1. Please explain the source of his powers. Is he cutting himself and forming the parts out of blood, is it magic? etc.

2. Weakness needs to be different. Anyone who loses enough blood will grow dizzy and die. If he is human, he has human weaknesses.

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PostPosted: Fri Apr 20, 2012 9:13 pm


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Zach is a Hemomancer (Blood Magic) with the ability to morph his body parts into demon like body parts however he dosent need to bleed to use his powers since he can control the blood in his body


... What.

I assume "Blood Magic" is using one's own blood for rituals, so.... that... makes no sense, even for superhero physics. If he's not using his own blood, then I assume that he can't use his powers. So if he doesn't need to bleed, then how is he doing what he's doing?

Furthermore, what exactly can he do with this Blood Magic? What are the limitations on what it can and can't do? Who can he affect or not affect with his power? When did he first learn that he had it, who trained him, and why did they train him? Matter of fact... what is the "best way of the blood art" to begin with?

Now, correct me if I'm wrong, but I'm assuming you got the idea for this character from an anime or something; please try and give explanations for what he is capable of doing if so, since people will not automatically know what he's doing.

This character's story is... simplistic and seems a little rushed. I suggest overhauling the bio and powers; make them more detailed. The powers are what really need explanation, though, since you can just elaborate on his bio within the RP if you so choose and add it in later as it's revealed; that's what I've done a few times with my OCs.
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