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 Posted: Mon Apr 16, 2012 6:16 pm
So I had this dream a few days ago that I was in the middle of the ocean alone. There was this huge storm coming towards me, and I was calling out for... this one dude XD A tune was playing in my head that I'd made a while back on the piano, and then I woke up and was like, "O . O lyrics?" There's more to the story than the storm, but that'll be explained in the song.[piano begins, drums join in after]
I am lost at sea
I hear the waves, they whisper to me
I long to be set free
Save me from this nightmare please
[violins come in]
Alone, alone
Save me from this nightmare please
Alone, alone
Save me from this nightmare please
The storm is drawing near
I'm scared to death because you're not here
Come and hold me dear
without you I've all things to fear
I'm alone, alone
Save me from this nightmare please
Alone, alone
Save me from this nightmare please
Can't hear your voice [alone, alone]
No other choice [alone, alone]
[Music builds up before slowing]
[piano instrumental w/ violins]
[only piano and violins play]
Time and time again
I looked back on what we had been
The sea has won, my friend
this life of mine has come to an end
Alone, alone
Save me from this nightmare please
Alone, alone
Save me from this nightmare please [2x]
[Music fades out] This song actually didn't come out as good as I hoped, but I'm sure I can edit everything and fix it up! Please comment and tell me what I can work on!
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Posted: Mon Apr 16, 2012 6:23 pm
I like the lyrics, but I REALLY like the way you presented them. It allowed me to use my imagination while I read the lyrics. I heard a song in my head, not a poem. Good job!
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His Majesty Satan Captain
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Posted: Mon Apr 16, 2012 6:35 pm
Thank you so much! I didn't think I was very good at lyricism, but I guess I must have some talent if I've been complimented ^-^ Thanks again : D
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Posted: Mon Apr 16, 2012 6:50 pm
I like it! I really wish I could listen to it or something. It seems like it would be a very good and pretty song. One thing I think you should add is a cello. Not really, I was just kidding. But come on, you have to admit cellos are pretty awesome. P. S. I play the cello XD oh and do you think you could check out my lullaby. It's part of a story I'm working on so I would appreciate it if you could read it and critique. Here it is.
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Posted: Mon Apr 16, 2012 6:57 pm
Girl on Fire 12 I like it! I really wish I could listen to it or something. It seems like it would be a very good and pretty song. One thing I think you should add is a cello. Not really, I was just kidding. But come on, you have to admit cellos are pretty awesome. P. S. I play the cello XD oh and do you think you could check out my lullaby. It's part of a story I'm working on so I would appreciate it if you could read it and critique. Here it is.Actually, I think I could fit some Cello's in there : o I've only heard my song in my head, because I don't have the equipment to actually produce the music. But once I'm able to get everything I need I might be able to add a track to this topic. I'll be sure to check out your story and lullaby! And! I love the siggy~
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Posted: Mon Apr 16, 2012 7:02 pm
Boxxy Makutaki Girl on Fire 12 I like it! I really wish I could listen to it or something. It seems like it would be a very good and pretty song. One thing I think you should add is a cello. Not really, I was just kidding. But come on, you have to admit cellos are pretty awesome. P. S. I play the cello XD oh and do you think you could check out my lullaby. It's part of a story I'm working on so I would appreciate it if you could read it and critique. Here it is.Actually, I think I could fit some Cello's in there : o I've only heard my song in my head, because I don't have the equipment to actually produce the music. But once I'm able to get everything I need I might be able to add a track to this topic. I'll be sure to check out your story and lullaby! And! I love the siggy~ Yeah, it is pretty sweet isn't it haha. Blazinga! Anyway that would be cool. Let me know if you ever get a track up here because I'd love to hear it! And thanks for reading my stuff. I always hate asking but only on person has commented. I think I'm going to update it soon too.
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Posted: Mon Apr 16, 2012 7:05 pm
Girl on Fire 12 Boxxy Makutaki Girl on Fire 12 I like it! I really wish I could listen to it or something. It seems like it would be a very good and pretty song. One thing I think you should add is a cello. Not really, I was just kidding. But come on, you have to admit cellos are pretty awesome. P. S. I play the cello XD oh and do you think you could check out my lullaby. It's part of a story I'm working on so I would appreciate it if you could read it and critique. Here it is.Actually, I think I could fit some Cello's in there : o I've only heard my song in my head, because I don't have the equipment to actually produce the music. But once I'm able to get everything I need I might be able to add a track to this topic. I'll be sure to check out your story and lullaby! And! I love the siggy~ Yeah, it is pretty sweet isn't it haha. Blazinga! Anyway that would be cool. Let me know if you ever get a track up here because I'd love to hear it! And thanks for reading my stuff. I always hate asking but only on person has commented. I think I'm going to update it soon too. no no! I'm glad you asked! I have to go now, but I'll be able to read and comment your story tomorrow! Thanks again for the cello idea! : D
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Posted: Mon Apr 16, 2012 7:08 pm
Boxxy Makutaki Girl on Fire 12 Boxxy Makutaki Girl on Fire 12 I like it! I really wish I could listen to it or something. It seems like it would be a very good and pretty song. One thing I think you should add is a cello. Not really, I was just kidding. But come on, you have to admit cellos are pretty awesome. P. S. I play the cello XD oh and do you think you could check out my lullaby. It's part of a story I'm working on so I would appreciate it if you could read it and critique. Here it is.Actually, I think I could fit some Cello's in there : o I've only heard my song in my head, because I don't have the equipment to actually produce the music. But once I'm able to get everything I need I might be able to add a track to this topic. I'll be sure to check out your story and lullaby! And! I love the siggy~ Yeah, it is pretty sweet isn't it haha. Blazinga! Anyway that would be cool. Let me know if you ever get a track up here because I'd love to hear it! And thanks for reading my stuff. I always hate asking but only on person has commented. I think I'm going to update it soon too. no no! I'm glad you asked! I have to go now, but I'll be able to read and comment your story tomorrow! Thanks again for the cello idea! : D No problem! And thanks to you as well! Good night!
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Posted: Sun Jul 01, 2012 5:46 pm
Elder Astrauld I like the lyrics, but I REALLY like the way you presented them. It allowed me to use my imagination while I read the lyrics. I heard a song in my head, not a poem. Good job! I Agree I Could Use Mii Imagination.
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