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 Posted: Mon Apr 09, 2012 3:40 pm
Heya! Your owner here again! That came out wrong... It sounds like I just called you my slaves.. o-0 I meant- I am the owner of the guild. xD Okay, glad that's straightened out. Okay, so I'm going to post poems all over this topic and possibly short stories.
Please, give me suggestions on what poems I should write or short stories. I am really quick at writing poems so if you give me a topic I could give you one in 5 minutes. >:]
Also, I almost forgot to say - Please tell me what you think of my work, give me tips on what to improve upon, or comments, rate it, just give me your opinion! Thanks~
Comments:
Maylin_C:
Hiya Ty wink . Alright so I thought your story so far is good. I like the plot. I feel sympathy towards the protagonist. Losing your family pretty much sucks. Even when you can't remember them. But at least he gets hints. I like the description that you use as well. Can't wait to read the next part heart
XXdemon_child102XX:
hi! well i did like your writing especially the description and hope you can go on good story love it!!
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Posted: Thu Apr 19, 2012 1:46 pm
Almost Forgotten: Part 1
My mind became clear. I could feel my bones aching everywhere in my body. I tried to move my arm, but pain shot through my veins. I tried to open my eyes, but the light that shone through felt like pepper spray. I remained still, and didn't move.
I tried to think about how I got here, or what happened. Doing this just confused me. I couldn't remember anything.
The pain slowly left my body. To adjust my eyes to the light, I very slowly opened them. Trying not to hurt myself, I lifted my upper body until I was in a sitting position. I looked around. I was in a forest. I was sitting on cold damp grass. There were multiple trees that towered over me. The bark was a perfect brown, and the leaves were a lush green. The sun shined through the leaves above me.
I slowly stood up, trying not to fall over, and keeping the pain from paralyzing me. I leaned on the closest tree. I looked down at my body. I was pretty tall, thin, light skinned, and I wore a t-shirt, jeans, and sneakers. My clothes were torn in many areas, and I had gashes, and bruises all over my body.
I closed my eyes, and just tried to think. A voice started in my head, a soft whisper but still sounded like pure terror. It was a woman, but I still didn't recognize the line or voice, "Run! Save her, and go! Leave me behind."
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Posted: Fri May 04, 2012 12:15 pm
Almost Forgotten: Part 2
Hearing the woman's voice broke my heart. I couldn't tell who it was though. I repeated the line in my head, trying to figure out what the line meant or who said it. A face flashed in my memory, the woman who said it. She had wavy brown hair, and she looked like she was in her 30's. The face made my heart sink. I knew whoever she was, she was dead.
I took a step forwards, since sitting in the middle of a forest won't do me any good. I then stopped and decided to yell for help, "Hello? Is anyone there?"
"Yes. She is there. Go save her." This voice sent chills down my back. It was that woman again.
"Who are you?" I asked, but there was no response. I yelled once more, "Is anyone here?" I heard birds leave a tree and fly off, probably startled by the sound of my voice. I walked forwards, continuing through the forest. The forest looked perfect, as if it was landscaped. The grass was a beautiful green and the only imperfections were the few sticks and leaves, from the towering trees. I continued walking, but I stopped when I found something on the ground. What looked like blood, stained the grass and a tree. Not a lot, but a few dark spots.
Some strange feeling came over me, and a vision and words appeared in my head, "Help!" Screams of terror and pain shot out from the woman. She ran quickly through the forest. Sticks cracked and leaves crunched. Something was chasing her. "Help!" A loud grunt sounded. A bear was chasing her.
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Posted: Sat May 05, 2012 12:28 pm
Almost Forgotten: Part 3
The flashback went away. Seeing that woman run for her life hurt me. I felt like I just died inside. I sat down with my back up against a tree and cried. She was a big part of my life, no doubt about it. "AGH!" I groaned loudly. Why did I have to wake up in the middle of a forest with no knowledge of my life?.. Why me?
"Baby, don't give up. Save her!" Her voice returned. Shivers replaced the tears. The woman was my wife.. I knew it. A name popped into my mind.
"Mary," I had a wife named Mary. An image of her entire body appeared. Little memories of me and her together.
"SAVE HER!" She was yelling at me. I got up confused, and scared. I felt hands touch me, they spun me around, I needed to run that way. I did. I ran through the bright forest, as fast as I could. My heart ached. I stopped when I saw more blood.
"Hello? Is anyone there?" My voice was shaky and scared. I stepped forwards, and before I knew it, I saw a figure. A boy, about 9 years old, lay on the ground bloody. He was lying on his back. His stomach was ripped opened, and his intestines poured out. His face was mangled. This was an image that would never, ever, leave my mind. I didn't cry, I didn't run, I didn't fall, I just stood there like a brick staring at him. The most horrific site ever. My vision faded and my mind slowed.
"Help! Daddy!" The boy ran through the forest. He tripped over a rock and face-planted to the ground. He was already bruised and cut. He rolled over onto his back and stared with terror.
"Jack!" My voice called out from a distance.
The approaching bear got up on his back two paws, growled, and then lowered. He stood there solid, as if turned to stone by Medusa's wretched glare. The bear got closer, and with the swipe of his paw, opened up his stomach.
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