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Posted: Sun Apr 08, 2012 2:56 pm

So I actually meant to start this challenge on April 2nd but work has been ungodly this last week. My original plan was to spend the next year writing a 40 chapter fiction piece, and I intend to stick to that, albiet a week delayed.

In light of my dated, initial entry I think I'll scrap the list I had started for myself and just use the original challenge one. That being said, I would very much appreciate having a group of regular editor and/or reviewers to help me turn this into a piece worth reading (and one not choked full of continuity errors).

My plan for the time being is to spend this and the following six days creating the structure for my little endeavor and next Sunday I'll begin writing the first chapter. Thank you in advance for starting on this journey with me, I hope it's an exciting one.

Posted: Sun Apr 08, 2012 2:58 pm

I'll be saving this second post for any additional information I might want to include at the front in the next year.

For the time being I'm just going to fill it with love...

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Posted: Sun Apr 08, 2012 2:59 pm

001. New Beginnings

I want to start by creating the setting for my journey. In terms of a ficitional story I want the environment to play a large part in the driving force that motivates my adventurers on their journey. In today's age it takes something of personally monumental value to actually get someone to move to action.

For me new beginnings seems like a good focus for a religion. Whether you love it or hate it, religion is undeniably one of the most influential forces in the world and our history. There have been times when the church was more the ruling power than the area's monarch. As such I want my journey to take place when the church has a lot of power. It could be both a friend and a minor-antagonist and it has the capabilities to infuse itself across my entire world. This is exactly the type of constant force I'm looking for.

Light's Church of Rebirth

Everyone fears dieing. Since the dawn of man, no one has ever truely wanted to know the secrets of death or the judgments of the flame believed to follow after.

In a time when man was young and demi-gods were common place, there were two such great creatures that took an interest in the fertile race. Both saw something of value in man and each sought to use it as a means.

The first to approach a community of dirt tillers was a bird of enormous proportions. His wings blocked the sky from view as it left its talons' prints in the plowed earth. His crown of red plumage rested on a head gazing from a height over two grown men tall. His long tail, aflame layed itself across the field's surface.

Simurgh spent the midday afternoon in conference with the head of man, as the lowly creature pleaded for the lord to lift his tail from the village's precious dirt. As the sun began to turn to evening time an agreement was struck and Simurgh flapped his fiery wings into the red sky, his long tail tearing a trench into the dirt.

The following morning(... I do plan to finish this up later but life calls and I must answer)

Posted: Sun Apr 08, 2012 4:31 pm

Hi there! I just thought I'd pop my head in and say good luck on your challenge. ^^ Also, what kind of feedback are you looking for in this journal? I'd be happy to help.

Edit: Also, if this is part of your 365 challenge, even if it's a WIP I think it might be best placed in the Member Journals section of the guild. Would you like me to move the thread? :]

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Posted: Sun Apr 08, 2012 5:40 pm

I really enjoy where you're going with this. It has a fable-like feel so far. What I mean is... it's so straightforward but so fantastical at the same time, that I feel, I suppose, that the lessons, the compromises, will be the same. I'm just speculating, but even if there aren't lessons like in fables, I still enjoy it, the style of your writing.

I really liked the description of how tall the bird was. For some reason, it seemed fitting that the form of measurement was 'men' - "[...] from a height over two grown men tall." - as it seemed to aid setting the time period and the type of men around the demi-gods, without directly stating it.

There isn't much here, so I guess it's hard to find something to really criticize. I will when there's more, and keep telling you what I like heh. I think this is the start to something really great.

Oh, um, at one point... You say...

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[...] there were two such great creatures that took an interest in the fertile race.

I don't see why humans would be more fertile than any other organism, plant or fungi or animal, or even bacteria. I'm not quite sure what you meant there, though it was an interesting way to describe man.

Posted: Fri Apr 20, 2012 9:11 am

I'd like to apologize for having produced absolutly nothing. Unfortunatly I don't think I have the time available in my day-to-day life to really undertake a daily writing challenge. I don't want to scrap the initial idea but updates are going to be less frequent than originally planned.

@Voldie

Thank you for your kind words. Hopefully I can repay them with a little bit of actual progress on this piece sometime soon.

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