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Xiena BloodStone

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PostPosted: Fri Mar 23, 2012 7:34 pm


Name: Xiena (Xena just with an i before e)
Age: 16
Gender: Female
Sexual Orientation: bi
Craft/Rank: Smithcraft

History:
Xiena has always been a wild child. None of her family are dragon riders and she does not see herself as being the first to be one either. She in fact stood for her 12th turn but when no dragon found her she left. She claims to have 'slept through' the two that came after that. For her 15th turn she didn't go cause she was trying to create a weapon. She had the shape but failed in striking it wrong on a cooled area breaking the circuital item. She doesn't fear the idea of not being a smith but she wants the item she see's in her inner eye. It calls to her dreams and she doesn't know how to get it with out making it. As a Child she drew this weapon often and even told her Best friends about it; though some laughed at the idea of the weapon.

Now in her teens she carries a journal with her that holds the drawing of the weapon and the types of metals she believes would work best. However the supply for some are low/hard to get a hold of. And when those metals are in reach they go for roofing and walls that will protect from Thread fall. Xiena works hard at her dream and works to help her family make things for income and items they themselves need.

Description:

Xiena has her mothers fire blue eyes and her father's free style hair though the color is from her great great grandmothers on her mother's side; its a soft brown with a red hue. example here

Her skin has a soft earthy tan though it pales to normal tans since her's is made more from forges then sun light. Her body shape is a sturdy hourglass form with soft toned legs and barely visible muscles in the other wise girly arms of hers. Her chest comes from her mother but is wrapped down to be supported; unwrapped she is a solid D, wrapped up she is a C in a half. Her hips though toned match her chest size to help balance her frame. Xiena's hands are not as delicate as a woman's but when washed up and given a weeks rest from crafting they are close.

Personality:

Xiena has Passion weather its a free spirit time or if its a take charge time for her passion. Her greatest passion is to be free but she fears that would mean to be alone as well.

Though her childhood was not the life of an orphan she often feels alone. She has depression that she feels will haunt her less she can make her dream item. She does not like to be social when her depression hits and often it'll keep her in bed. However if it should strike when she isn't home she will hide it by being friendly and generous. There are times when her depression goes from sad to angry in a matter of seconds. That action tends to make her the black sheep even in her own home.

Xiena has her random mood swings and much of it comes from her depression. Only her closest Friend can seem to understand when to back off and when not to. Some of the things said or done around her will set her off and she'll act out. She never means to and when its over she tries to apologize in hopes others will understand.

She has some the qualities for a leader but she rarely shows them in fear she'll steer some one wrong and it'll cost them greatly. Instead Xiena confides herself to her Journals. She has hope she'll get the item of her dream but the item is also her fear. To Xiena, she is not normal and she doesn't belong in the world she lives in. However she will fight to protect her family if she ever needs to. She sees herself as cursed, yet blessed to have those around her.

How she would describe herself to some one is; "I am a full play. I can start as a dark and scary night or a a warm and loving day. I can play out as a sweet fairy tale or as the darkest of reality. But it is how the story ends that many agree with, happy ever afters are never the answer to a great play."

Other:

Xiena likes to create things weather its in drawing, writing or trying to craft her dream item.

Xiena likes to hum to herself as she does her chores though if any one comes around while she is humming she stops.
PostPosted: Fri Mar 23, 2012 8:20 pm


Does she live in the Weyr or one of the Holds? You say she's a smith apprentice (can't be journeyman til 20 if I recall?) but she's also Stood for a few turns now? Was she Searched and moved to the Weyr or has she since then returned to her Hold or Crafthall?

And this dream item, just out of personal curiosity I'd like to see what it is, I'd also like to know why she wants it so bad if she also fears it? Also, does it cause her depression from a lack of OWNING the item or a feeling of failure for not having made it?

You say she has leadership qualities but you don't say what they are? Her insecurities seem rather crippling to any aspirations of leadership.


Ummm as for anything else, you've explained her negative traits, what about her positive? When she's happy and everything is going well what is she like?

I hope I'm not a harsh critic! heart

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Xiena BloodStone

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PostPosted: Fri Mar 23, 2012 8:31 pm


Dizzy_Kat
Does she live in the Weyr or one of the Holds? You say she's a smith apprentice (can't be journeyman til 20 if I recall?) but she's also Stood for a few turns now? Was she Searched and moved to the Weyr or has she since then returned to her Hold or Crafthall?

And this dream item, just out of personal curiosity I'd like to see what it is, I'd also like to know why she wants it so bad if she also fears it? Also, does it cause her depression from a lack of OWNING the item or a feeling of failure for not having made it?

You say she has leadership qualities but you don't say what they are? Her insecurities seem rather crippling to any aspirations of leadership.


Ummm as for anything else, you've explained her negative traits, what about her positive? When she's happy and everything is going well what is she like?

I hope I'm not a harsh critic! heart


Well her personality is off me. I have a drive to keep moving forward and if the situation calls for it I step forth and in many times I've been the leader and the adult to stop fights and get others to a peaceful agreement. However I do this cause I also think about 5 at least steps ahead. To put that into her for here could class her as a god like oc since not many can see how I can be a servilely depressed person yet inspire and motivate others and myself when need to.

As for where she lives I still do not know why candidates have to live away from family if they are not orphans. She has however grown up in Trine since that is where her family lives so that is her wyer.

As for when she's happy she's trying to create her dream item. I really don't know how to say it but have you ever had a dream where you owned something in it and it was always with you like it was part of you? That is why she wants it I just don't know how to explain it out any further. As for the fear part that is her depression, it makes doubts that the item will save her from her sorrow and mood swings.
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