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Dakko Nailo

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PostPosted: Mon Mar 12, 2012 8:26 pm


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ғeel free to call me. . .
Erik Orion Nailo Erik works though

υnless you're blind, you should see that I'm. . .
Male

чou think I'm what age? No, I'm. .
18

The υniverse welcomed me on. . .
February first

α lot of people say I'm. . .
Erik is generally in his own world usually giving a cold retort before disappearing although sometimes he'll stay and talk to you and see if he should stick around to hear what you have to say. Once you've become his friend though he is loyal and kind.

care to hear my story?
Born into the tribe known as "wave-Masters" that specialize in mainly conjuration and evocation his father was one of his villages strongest magicians his mother the most aesthetic soon after he was born and was trained in the ways and teaching of his people but in order to broaden his understanding and ability of his gifts they sent him to a school full of magical creatures and magicians to mingle and find ways for him to improve himself.

αbilities? Yeah, I have . . .
Born as a wave-master his people has a natural affinity for magic and the mysteries surrounding it so hes a quick learner and usually can put more power into his spells

I aםore. . .
○ Solitude
○ Calm, cool headed people
○ Watching sunsets/sunrises
○ Magic arts and practices


єveryone of these drive me mad. . .
○ Melee combat
○ Talkative cocky people.
○ Crowded places
○ Difficult problems he can become frustrated easily.

мy House, Dorm, and Homeroom are. . .
House: [House, Please edit in when you're assigned one.]
Dorm: [Dorm Room, Please edit in when you're assigned one.]
Homeroom: Magics and weaponry

чou see, I'm controlled by . . .
Darith The Wanderer
PostPosted: Wed Mar 21, 2012 9:15 pm


So... about being approved by a crew member...

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PostPosted: Mon Apr 09, 2012 4:02 am


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Hello there!
Sorry for the wait.
There's a couple of things that need adjusting before I can improve.

Firstly, perhaps you could expand further on his personality? It's a tad short.

Also - whoa! That whole biography is one sentence! I recall there being a sentence minimum, so this will need looking at. Attempt to separate it all into a few sentences. A full stop after 'evocation' and a capital letter for the new sentence concerning his father. A full stop after 'magicians' and a capital letter for the next sentence. It would be nice to include more detail about his background.

Perhaps be more specific about the type of magic he controls and the ways of the 'wave-masters', including why they're called this.

Quote me once you're done and I'll reassess asap ~

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