When you say "Ubedo" I think you mean Obito if you're talking about the boy who gave him his Sharingan.
But I think this fanfics okay. I don't see the plot much, though.
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RinSkylar
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Posted: Sat Mar 18, 2006 6:12 pm
Thats good so far...but are you going to finish or is that the ending?
Posted: Sun Mar 26, 2006 3:51 pm
Cool story. You did a good job on it.
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Posted: Sun Mar 26, 2006 4:50 pm
WOw that was pretty fgood.... though i have the same question was that the end or waws that the beggining or something? cause if so it wasnt that long.
Posted: Wed Mar 29, 2006 2:10 pm
RinSkylar
Thats good so far...but are you going to finish or is that the ending?
yeah is that the end if not work on the plot but you have a good start.
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Posted: Mon Apr 17, 2006 9:29 am
The way they talk and act is just not right... You know, it's kind of OoC. Also, check all of your spelling and grammar.
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