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 Posted: Tue Feb 28, 2012 7:50 am
Here I will post my poetry. So the forum won't be filled with my poetry only. lol
Feel free to comment, criticize, whatever you like.
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Heart Beat
My heart beats only for you
It plays a song meant for you
Feel my beats in every note
It's a song my heart wrote
If you play my heart strings
You will hear my thoughts
Turn me up louder and louder
Your love makes it beat faster
I'll sing softly in your ear
Till the tears disappear
And when you're down
I'll get rid of that frown
Lay your hand on my chest
You will be impressed
Wait till you hear my love-song
It'll make you want to sing along
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Posted: Tue Mar 06, 2012 2:33 am
I enjoyed that one to some degree. Tone was awesome, and the rhythm (is that what they call it in poetry?) was good too. The words were simplistic, for easy reading, and was enjoyable at the very least. I don't really have any criticism, 'cause it's not really my field, but keep up the good work. (:
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Posted: Tue Mar 06, 2012 6:51 am
Lord Denning I enjoyed that one to some degree. Tone was awesome, and the rhythm (is that what they call it in poetry?) was good too. The words were simplistic, for easy reading, and was enjoyable at the very least. I don't really have any criticism, 'cause it's not really my field, but keep up the good work. (: I'm not really someone who would use difficult words. surprised Thanks tho. smile
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