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 Posted: Tue Feb 21, 2006 6:06 pm
Hah. Tis time for me to post something. I usually don't write stuff that regards otaku culture in more then passing, but since the protagnoist has a very anti-manga agenda, I thought it would be okay. This is the beginning to something I'm not sure if I'll continue or not. Need to see if there's an audience for it or not. Click http://www.gaiaonline.com/forum/viewtopic.php?t=12301778Leave your critique either here or there, both work biggrin
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Posted: Wed Feb 22, 2006 2:26 pm
I really liked it, and the character Will seemed to have my kind of sarcasm! whee There were only a few things that I saw that I didn't like. There were typos, it was hard to tell who was saying what, and maybe you can describe the characters and setting a little more. Oh, and you first-off say he was born and raised in Maine, then you throw the setting into Mississippi. Maybe show some background, or at least some sor of transition...It's a little bit too much of an abrupt change!
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Posted: Sat Feb 25, 2006 2:13 pm
Ah. Yeah. I guess it does throw a lot at you at once. I just sort of wanted to make sure the first few paragraphs were entertaining enough to keep attention as I went into detail on things later on...
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Posted: Sat Feb 25, 2006 2:15 pm
UglyDisneyPrincess Ah. Yeah. I guess it does throw a lot at you at once. I just sort of wanted to make sure the first few paragraphs were entertaining enough to keep attention as I went into detail on things later on...
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Posted: Sun Feb 26, 2006 2:42 pm
Thanks for the advice...iluvwritin o_o You need a abbreviable name. XD;
I updated it today, if anyone is interested.
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Posted: Sun Feb 26, 2006 6:16 pm
UglyDisneyPrincess Thanks for the advice...iluvwritin o_o You need a abbreviable name. XD; I updated it today, if anyone is interested.
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