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 Posted: Fri Jan 27, 2012 9:56 pm
This is a drabble that I wrote for a contest once. It was surprisingly challenging for me because the whole point of a drabble is to write something in 100 words or less. I had to forcibly pull myself away from my laptop multiple times so i wouldn't get carried away on the descriptions. Anyway if you like it please follow the link in my signature to give it a rating as it is currently in the arenas right now. Let me know what you think!
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Posted: Fri Jan 27, 2012 9:57 pm
Laughing smiles, swirling gowns and delicate tapered heels. The room was a swirl, a veritable maelstrom of color spinning round and round and round. The night was cool, the air was clean, and the stars were all a bright. And swirls of clouds wreathed the moon in a milky halo of light. I looked at him and he looked at me, with eyes as bright as the sky. I hated him but oh how I loved him just as much.
And so we danced. Because that’s all we could do.
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Posted: Wed Feb 08, 2012 4:54 pm
i quite like that, great job on the details with very few words
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Posted: Wed Feb 08, 2012 9:43 pm
Haha thanks. XD It was a fun challenge. :3
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Posted: Thu Feb 09, 2012 4:54 pm
i personally dont think i could do it, im to detailed , and like too many words lol
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Posted: Sat Feb 11, 2012 9:59 pm
After I read something good I always go into "Omg! Omg!" fangirl mode. It starts off slow and has a big unexpected impact at the end. I think the fact that so much is said in so little words adds to the beauty of it. It's almost like saying "This is what's important, and that's all that matters." Personally, I think drabbles have as much impact, if not more, as complex stories where minute detailing can be the answer to a plot, if done well.
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Posted: Sun Feb 12, 2012 8:07 am
cgirl360 After I read something good I always go into "Omg! Omg!" fangirl mode. It starts off slow and has a big unexpected impact at the end. I think the fact that so much is said in so little words adds to the beauty of it. It's almost like saying "This is what's important, and that's all that matters." Personally, I think drabbles have as much impact, if not more, as complex stories where minute detailing can be the answer to a plot, if done well. i couldn't agree more.
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Posted: Wed Feb 15, 2012 12:12 am
DLT15dragonlord i personally dont think i could do it, im to detailed , and like too many words lol Haha you never know. :3 You should give it a try. I had a hard time with this because I would keep running off into details. I would have to physically pull myself back from my laptop so I would stop. XD But I'm glad I did it. Sometimes fewer words can have more power than poetic imagery and symbolism. This helped me harness that. I want to try to write more drabbles but I haven't been struck with inspiration yet for any.
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Posted: Wed Feb 15, 2012 1:50 pm
I think I will try , it sounds like a fun challenge.
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Posted: Mon Feb 20, 2012 10:04 am
You should! If you post it let me know! I would like to read it!
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Posted: Wed Feb 22, 2012 4:56 pm
Night Kunoichi You should! If you post it let me know! I would like to read it! Rain and tears She looked out the window, and cried. The rain poured down, as did her tears. She stared out the window, like she stared at the pain within. She left him, and didn't turn back. In the back of her mind that was the worst thing she had done.She still loved him, and it burned. She felt rage within, just like the lightning that struck. Pain flooded in, but she felt so empty. It kept raining, it was the worst storm she ever faced. But, surely enough light was to overcome the rain. No longer would she hurt inside. there you go, my first drabble. im not sure what i think of it?
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