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PostPosted: Fri Jan 13, 2012 2:20 pm


ғeel free to call me. . .
alice heart

υnless you're blind, you should see that I'm. . .
a female

чou think I'm what age? No, I'm. .
16

The υniverse welcomed me on. . .
February the 14th.

α lot of people say I'm. . .
very energetic, im nice, im shy, im fun, im random, im good at music, i scare them when im mad

care to hear my story?
im a neko/angel/witch who waz born into a good life my parents loved me i had great friends and i waz never shy till about 3 years ago when i waz bullied for being different but my friend suported me through it all so im still a good person i waz born a music and magic prodigy
αbilities? Yeah, I have . . .
the ability to play any song on any instrument,use any type of magic, shape shift a little change the collor of my eyes,and change into any of my forms whenever i want

I adore. . .
my friends
my family
my music
my alone time
practicing magic
water
the dark
the beach
the sun
a full moon
animals
nature
stars

єveryone of these drive me mad. . .
people being mean to som1 else for being themselves
running long distances ...why do i have to run when i can fly even faster or even teloport for that mater seriously
the cold

мy homeroom and dorm room are. . .
i dont have 1 yet.

чou see, I'm controlled by . . .
emo neko love123

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PostPosted: Fri Jan 13, 2012 7:27 pm



Hello, there are many aspects in the profile that need to be fixed, please bear with me.

Personality will need some reworking and additional details, it is much too choppy.
•What makes her happy/sad/angry?
•How can she be 'very energetic' yet 'shy' at the same time? These character traits seem contradictory to me. Please only select one or go into details as to how there can be a duality between these traits.
•How does she scare 'them' when she is mad?
•Please use full English in prose. Elaborating on every character trait would help others grasp Alice's personality

Biography Tips:
•How was she cast aside for being "different"? Due to her magical and shape shifting abilities and/or her musical prowess?
•Were the people who bullied Alice simply jealous and envious of Alice?
•Please include how or why she decided to come to Fuyu Academy.
•You should have at least 4 full sentences in the biography section before it can be approved.

The ability section will require some more details for precision. When adding more details, please recall that people attending Fuyu Academy are those who are not fully capable of using their abilities, so I will not be accepting the 'prodigy' title for magic.
•There seems to be too many abilities and they are too powerful for a mere student. It doesn't seem like she even needs to come to Fuyu Academy if she is this capable on her own. Please remove at least one and tone the others down.

Your 'homeroom and dorm' section are missing some information. If you've copied the Fuyu Character Skeleton correctly, there should also be a 'House' section, please add that in. Also, you may not have a dorm, but it is you who decides Alice's Homeroom. There are 4 choices in Fuyu Academy: "Magics/Weaponry" , "Math/Science" , "World Studies/Magical Creatures" and "Arts/Music". Please choose one of these options and insert it into the profile.

As a general note, I would like to propose using an integrated spell checker on your Browser. It can help find some mistakes you've overlooked and honestly helps everyone, even me! I would also request you refrain from using chat abbreviations, such as "some1", because we aim for a certain amount of literacy here.

Are the images going to be fixed, because they are broken links to me and nothing loads! If you could fix it, it would be appreciated!

Please quote me when you are done editing so I can reassess Alice!

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