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 Posted: Tue Nov 15, 2011 5:47 am
I actually see the world around me,
The drama,
The Joy.
The tears,
The laughter.
The complexity of human nature,
how it amazes me!
People come and go,
Some for better,
Some for worse.
Leave the sadness behind,
Look at what it's worth.
....Change.
Inner evolution to the masses.
No more closed minds,
break tradition,
DARE TO BE DIFFERENT.
Life is hard,
But it's worth having.
The world will chew you up,
And spit you out.
If your not careful.
However,
Being careful is one thing,
Over-precaution the other.
Careful where you draw the line,
In the illusions of your mind.
Twirling like a butterfly,
caught in the wind.
Metamorphosis beyond the norm.
I won't live my life the way you want me to!
If seeing is believing,
then stop and watch.
I will not fall,
I will not fail.
Ideas last though the ages,
Knowledge is dangerous,
So watch me,
I'm not the prey.
Bulldozing through obstacles in my way,
Keeping my insecurities at bay.
Strength is my power,
and your weakness.
I will not makes your mistakes.
History will not repeat itself with me.
I set my own path,
and I choose the one that stands beside me,
Not behind me.
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Posted: Sun Nov 20, 2011 6:48 pm
Very upbeat and self assured. It has a nice bouncy rhythm that kind of makes me want to be dorky and say "right on!" while pumping my fist in the air. (yes, I realize how odd I am).
People and breaking the norm is a great subject for poetry. People are so very complex and you got that in a very few lines which is good. And you hit a lot of good points: Dare to be different, life is hard but ok, don't overthink things, I do what I want..... It all works pretty well together. So good job.
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-l- Psychotic Saint -l- Captain
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Posted: Sun Nov 20, 2011 6:50 pm
-l- Psychotic Saint -l- Very upbeat and self assured. It has a nice bouncy rhythm that kind of makes me want to be dorky and say "right on!" while pumping my fist in the air. (yes, I realize how odd I am). People and breaking the norm is a great subject for poetry. People are so very complex and you got that in a very few lines which is good. And you hit a lot of good points: Dare to be different, life is hard but ok, don't overthink things, I do what I want..... It all works pretty well together. So good job. It's alright, i am an oddball too! Im so glad you liked it. It's been my theme as of late.
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