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 Posted: Sun Nov 06, 2011 11:41 pm
twinkle caramel candy missred_missused I fall to pieces before your eyes,
all because of your stupid lies.
I run and hide to escape the pain,
but wherever I go I hear only rain...
I wake at night and scream for you,
yet I know that you will never come through.
So I wait in the shadows and there I pray,
to find the words I need to say.
I love you so much and I can't go on,
I still listen to our stupid love song...
I hate to remember and I hate to forget,
I think that now it's you I regret.
You're stupid smile that promised so much,
Oh how I had ached for your touch!
Take back your memories, take back your tears,
I've come to realize that you're all my fears... both meaning and rhyme are in balance! have you done anything like that in the past ? yum_strawberry I've taken poetry classes and my teacher is epic, he kinda pushed me along in my head as I was writing this poem. I've written one other poem that has become kinda known in the poetry world. It's called Ginger Ale and Sawdust Crackers. Look it up and see what you think biggrin
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Posted: Sun Nov 06, 2011 11:46 pm
ameerahmx missred_missused I fall to pieces before your eyes,
all because of your stupid lies.
I run and hide to escape the pain,
but wherever I go I hear only rain...
I wake at night and scream for you,
yet I know that you will never come through.
So I wait in the shadows and there I pray,
to find the words I need to say.
I love you so much and I can't go on,
I still listen to our stupid love song...
I hate to remember and I hate to forget,
I think that now it's you I regret.
You're stupid smile that promised so much,
Oh how I had ached for your touch!
Take back your memories, take back your tears,
I've come to realize that you're all my fears... Your poem is really good! i luved it! i hope you win! Thank you very much biggrin lol
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twinkle caramel candy Crew
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Posted: Mon Nov 07, 2011 6:45 am
missred_missused twinkle caramel candy missred_missused I fall to pieces before your eyes,
all because of your stupid lies.
I run and hide to escape the pain,
but wherever I go I hear only rain...
I wake at night and scream for you,
yet I know that you will never come through.
So I wait in the shadows and there I pray,
to find the words I need to say.
I love you so much and I can't go on,
I still listen to our stupid love song...
I hate to remember and I hate to forget,
I think that now it's you I regret.
You're stupid smile that promised so much,
Oh how I had ached for your touch!
Take back your memories, take back your tears,
I've come to realize that you're all my fears... both meaning and rhyme are in balance! have you done anything like that in the past ? yum_strawberry I've taken poetry classes and my teacher is epic, he kinda pushed me along in my head as I was writing this poem. I've written one other poem that has become kinda known in the poetry world. It's called Ginger Ale and Sawdust Crackers. Look it up and see what you think biggrin i read it but i must say i liked more the other two poems of yours. yum_strawberry
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Posted: Mon Nov 07, 2011 4:33 pm
missred_missused ameerahmx missred_missused I fall to pieces before your eyes,
all because of your stupid lies.
I run and hide to escape the pain,
but wherever I go I hear only rain...
I wake at night and scream for you,
yet I know that you will never come through.
So I wait in the shadows and there I pray,
to find the words I need to say.
I love you so much and I can't go on,
I still listen to our stupid love song...
I hate to remember and I hate to forget,
I think that now it's you I regret.
You're stupid smile that promised so much,
Oh how I had ached for your touch!
Take back your memories, take back your tears,
I've come to realize that you're all my fears... Your poem is really good! i luved it! i hope you win! Thank you very much biggrin lol No problem! XP
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Posted: Mon Nov 07, 2011 8:33 pm
twinkle caramel candy missred_missused twinkle caramel candy missred_missused I fall to pieces before your eyes,
all because of your stupid lies.
I run and hide to escape the pain,
but wherever I go I hear only rain...
I wake at night and scream for you,
yet I know that you will never come through.
So I wait in the shadows and there I pray,
to find the words I need to say.
I love you so much and I can't go on,
I still listen to our stupid love song...
I hate to remember and I hate to forget,
I think that now it's you I regret.
You're stupid smile that promised so much,
Oh how I had ached for your touch!
Take back your memories, take back your tears,
I've come to realize that you're all my fears... both meaning and rhyme are in balance! have you done anything like that in the past ? yum_strawberry I've taken poetry classes and my teacher is epic, he kinda pushed me along in my head as I was writing this poem. I've written one other poem that has become kinda known in the poetry world. It's called Ginger Ale and Sawdust Crackers. Look it up and see what you think biggrin i read it but i must say i liked more the other two poems of yours. yum_strawberry Yeah I wrote that poem randomly and on my last account I had on gaia, I was told that I should enter it in a contest. It was picked and I was proud of it but I didn't really like that poem too much. I like the poem I wrote for this alot more truthfully lol
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Posted: Tue Nov 08, 2011 6:48 am
so, i finnaly decided:
the winner is missred_missused ! yum_strawberry
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twinkle caramel candy Crew
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Posted: Tue Nov 08, 2011 12:35 pm
twinkle caramel candy so, i finnaly decided: the winner is missred_missused ! yum_strawberry Thank you very much! surprised
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