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PostPosted: Wed Jul 13, 2011 9:28 am


Heartfelt, The moons yonder smile.
Sorrowful, The oceans gentle waves.
Painful, The tragic shattered love.
Balance, The bitter sweet realization.
Betrayal, the laughter of a fool forgotten.


In the shadows of the universe sat a Moon, shining beautiful due to her brother the Sun, She was thought beautiful but her eyes were closed in sorrow. Her brother did not want to share her with anyone, afraid that she might leave him. So she was even more alone, her brother busy with brooding about how best to keep her from sight. Down below in the world that was Alive, the ocean was still and lifeless, depressed and lonely, not even the fish he held was thankful to him. He was So alone and so sad, even the earth despised him, setting up banks and turning her rocks backs on him to shun him for being so dull. One night though, when The Moons brother had turned away to look somewhere else she looked down upon this little world and saw the ocean. She could see her reflection upon his waters for how flat and depressed he was so she reached down and touched him, ever so gently rocking him while he slumbered to give him pleasant sleep. When he woke up he came to find the Moon smiling at him and fell in love with her, he raised his waves to try and embrace her but she was too far and he was quickly losing his energy. As with the Ocean the Moon had as well fallen for this poor soul and had reached down again, pulling at his wave to have him embrace her but alas, he was too far away. The Brother finally took notice of what had happened and grew angry with his sister, He started to chase her and she fled, so goes that every night, the Ocean and the moon pull and touch for each other before her brother returns.
 
PostPosted: Wed Jul 13, 2011 9:36 am


Such a beautiful and bittersweet story. I like your take on the tides. It's an interesting concept and you present it well, simple and without much fuss. The poem at the beginning was a nice touch as well.

Good job. ^_^

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PostPosted: Wed Jul 13, 2011 10:14 am


-l- Psychotic Saint -l-
Such a beautiful and bittersweet story. I like your take on the tides. It's an interesting concept and you present it well, simple and without much fuss. The poem at the beginning was a nice touch as well.

Good job. ^_^


thank you. I wrote the story half a year ago and only added the poem when i just posted today XD i thought it was a nice touch too.
PostPosted: Wed Jul 13, 2011 11:14 am


Wow is all I really can say. This was a very good read and I also enjoyed the poem in the beginning. smile

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PostPosted: Wed Jul 13, 2011 11:26 am


I love it, as a creation myth it works very well. I like that it has both scientific elements (The moon shining due to the sun) and fantasy ones.
PostPosted: Wed Jul 13, 2011 11:42 am


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I love it, as a creation myth it works very well. I like that it has both scientific elements (The moon shining due to the sun) and fantasy ones.


that's what i was going for. ^^

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