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PostPosted: Thu Jul 07, 2011 6:15 am


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☆★ Minnie Crimson ★☆


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PostPosted: Thu Jul 07, 2011 6:17 am


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Race: Majin
Stage: Witchling
Gender: Female

Biography: Minnie has twisted past. Being a member of a huge rich family, she's having fun with it. A lot, especially on elegant things, she loves elegant things.
When she was 4, her family taught her table manners. When she was 5, her family taught her about what a lady and a lord does. When she was 7, her family taught her how to dance, elegantly. When she was 15, her mother died. Her father finally told her, that she isn't her mother's real daughter. Minnie was really hurted that day. Now she knows why is she really different from them all. Minnie finds creepy things interesting, but they didn't. And so, the hurted Minnie ran away from home. She has some money she stored up, her father and mother gave her money, and so she brings those too. She also bring a box her mother gave to her. She set up a little hut deep in the woods, she used her money to buy needs for herself and the house. She works in a town near the woods as a medicine maker.
One day, she heard a whisper ; "You're not a human, you fool. You're different, much more stronger than them. You're a witch." . At that moment she realized. Why is she different than others. She's also been curious with the box her mother gave to her, and so she opened it up. She found a huge spell book. How does her mother (step mother) knows that she's a witch? Minnie doesn't really knows about this.
And so she became an orphan. She practices magic more than ever she did before because, she tried to get friends, or at least getting adopted. She also practice more magic, and more about herbs, since she needs it for her job at the town. She tried to find her old family, but she doesn't know where they are now. She was a alone, until now. She is an orphan, because no one wants to adopt her (why? see in personality part).

Personality: She is a brave and elegant girl. She hates people who can't make up their minds, and perverts. She's a pretty good witch, capable to do most of the spells from her big spell book. She's kinda' lazy, but still will work, especially when its related to cleanliness, and money. She is a friendly girl, but she is capable of revenge when anyone insults anything related to her friends and family. Almost forgot; she's pretty much grouchy and easily angry, so no one really wants to adopt her. Aside from that, people doesn't really want to adopt her because they think she's strange (since she's a majin, and they're humans).

Facts:
★ She loves to dance because it's elegant!
★ She's shy around people she has a crush on.
★ Her favorite colors are black and white.
★ Very sensitive about cleanliness.

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PostPosted: Thu Jul 07, 2011 6:33 am


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Ability Concetration/Theme: Monochromatic (except for her eyes). Minnie magic is great at attack, or offensive magic. She can master a little bit curse, but those curse spells she learned are still easy to break. Minnie is also very interested (and shows talent) in herbs, and she learned many of them, and made them to medicines.

Tea: The Unlucky Black Cat, list of ingridients :
★ Black Cat's Paw
★ Rat Tail
★ Pink Catnip
★ Cracked Mirror
★ Black Opal
★ Demon's Claw
PostPosted: Thu Jul 07, 2011 6:39 am


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Physical Description:
★ She is an average 17 year old girl, and she is tall. She always wants to look elegant and she wears black and white. She has a bright skin color. See refrences for more details
★ Her eye color is mixed colored eyes: pink, blue, white, and yellow. For more details, see refrences (use the tektek).
★ She has a white hair. Style? See refrences.
★ She wears a black and white dress and a pair of white arm warmers with little black demon wings on each arm warmer. She wears black lipstick. She also wears a witch hat, white with stains, and a skull on the middle. She wears black gloves and black witch shoes.
★ Her wand is black, and has a skull on top.
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PostPosted: Wed Jul 13, 2011 3:08 pm


First off, the whole "tragic history my entire family was murdered randomly and I don't know why" background isn't really very believable. Neither is the "no one wanted to adopt her" part. Why wouldn't someone want to adopt her? What made her so horrible that people would reject adopting her? Where did she live, then? How did she survive? A seven year old who's just witnessed their entire family be murdered isn't going to be thinking very coherently; at least, not any seven year old that I've ever known. Your entire history is very unrealistic.

As for her personality, how is she elegant if she's grown up by herself without anyone to teach her things? In my opinion, being brave doesn't equal to wanting revenge. Revenge is something lesser, something that makes people act in a way they wouldn't normally act. Wanting revenge is a dark thing, and it usually turns people bad.

Also 14 is very young for a Witch. Witches are at least 17.

I'm sorry, but this needs a lot of reworking. There are several very large gaps and flaws in both her personality and background that need to be fixed and/or expanded on before it can be accepted.
PostPosted: Thu Jul 14, 2011 3:25 am


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First off, the whole "tragic history my entire family was murdered randomly and I don't know why" background isn't really very believable. Neither is the "no one wanted to adopt her" part. Why wouldn't someone want to adopt her? What made her so horrible that people would reject adopting her? Where did she live, then? How did she survive? A seven year old who's just witnessed their entire family be murdered isn't going to be thinking very coherently; at least, not any seven year old that I've ever known. Your entire history is very unrealistic.

As for her personality, how is she elegant if she's grown up by herself without anyone to teach her things? In my opinion, being brave doesn't equal to wanting revenge. Revenge is something lesser, something that makes people act in a way they wouldn't normally act. Wanting revenge is a dark thing, and it usually turns people bad.

Also 14 is very young for a Witch. Witches are at least 17.

I'm sorry, but this needs a lot of reworking. There are several very large gaps and flaws in both her personality and background that need to be fixed and/or expanded on before it can be accepted.
Humm... Yeah i'm practicly new to both the thread and the guild, but thank you for pointing out my mistakes! I edited it, is it more badly now... Or better? sweatdrop

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